Open Mic: ...It's been a grip

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   mmm this was nice, the flow was solid throughout plus there was a lot in the 
way of content to digest here, that metaphor/simile/anology about husband 
and wife was simple but real Ripe, i get the impression that this is acting like 
a goodbye text/message (which i hope it isn't) for heads here at LA, I'm just 
hopping i've got it misconstrued on reading, as i haven't had much time to 
digest it all completely yet, as i've only breezed through it,i'll give it another 
whirl when i get home and leave if needs be a more detailed feedback post.
Ripe...peace.

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Crimson Juice Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Crimson Juice Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: ...It's been a grip Posted: 07 June 2019 at 5:50pm
	mmm this was nice, the flow was solid throughout plus there was a lot in the way of content to digest here, that metaphor/simile/anology about husband and wife was simple but real Ripe, i get the impression that this is acting like a goodbye text/message (which i hope it isn't) for heads here at LA, I'm just hopping i've got it misconstrued on reading, as i haven't had much time to digest it all completely yet, as i've only breezed through it,i'll give it another whirl when i get home and leave if needs be a more detailed feedback post. Ripe...peace.
	"You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance".

iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 31 May 2019 at 5:59pm
	Light the flame to the fortune it’s a craft I perfected It’s icing the cake with the scraps that I’m left with The height of fame was the torture I hadn’t been sentenced Lines of fate & hunger strikes my frame famished & friendless Despite the pain from the corner I’ve been trapped & dependent Griping the same, lifers to game grabbing for weapons Slicing for change, knife to the veins like I ain’t have the attention Seeking love ‘til the reaper come grasping my legs ‘n Kicking & screaming, isn’t this dreaming? Dragging to deathbeds Write my name on the order this wrap with a message Wait… must’ve forgot… That I stay strapped, no studs or dykes Scuds in flight to take out hubs like a grumpy wife Relatable warfare… In your layer swingin’ that jawn like I’m dustin’ mites One eye closed aimin’ this AR like Buddy Christ To make a top explode like some bubbly iced This that, junkie juice you shoot, in the booth I boot Kick this habit somethin’ tragic plus it abuse the youth Make ya moms disappear like she excused the use ‘Specially when you gone & put the you in “poof” Watch these muhfuckas think & others face screwed with “oofs” This that backdoor screen, you threw the oop Unlocked doors, so I ain’t gotta go through the hoops Socks only, slidin’ on the floor as I scoot in rooms No creaks, blown beaks… think I flew the coop I’m gone…