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Crimson Juice
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Posted: 21 March 2020 at 2:55pm |
pls don't judge this to seriously, it is a key which took about 20 minutes, i just want to keep
the awareness going is all...peace. We've all been rocked to the core as fever burns our every pore Contagious to the rich/poor as coughing spreads it like spores Panic erupts in food stores everyone's believing they need more With no intent to try rapport grapplin' over tins like its a civil war Facts are still a miff but daily new names get added to that list As the virus persist infected gulp air they resemble feeding fish Ppl confined to beds with large bubble placed over their heads All fighting to stave off death knowing there's no cure via meds The scientific academics upgrade it from outbreak to epidemic Now mutated to a pandemic and still ppl wonder if its authentic The virus wants to survive by being expelled find a host & thrive To expand & multiply by entering the nose mouth & frontal eyes To live shouldn't surprise but it gets harder when low on supplies As i surmise hopefully the 2 lines above won't be our species demise |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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Neek
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The scientific academicsĀ upgrade it from outbreak to epidemic Now mutated to a pandemicĀ and still ppl wonder if its authentic good to see you back home. the species demise line was slick, a real good callback. you still have the classic crim style, blunt and outfront. no flash or trickery..just raw emotion. I liked the piece, definitely timely. it had character.. kinda the observer..which really suits you. im happy to see you hop in to the fray, normally you just backbone the campaign. all and all, a welcomed edition to the fesitivies...also.. Sammy said he wants that smoke in a topical battle about cat tails but call it Cat Tales: Story of Nine Lives where you have 20 bars to do a nine person narrative. |
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Crimson Juice
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lol...thanks Neek, your always the been the man in the darkest of hours..
And as for that topical with Sammy, shit there's definitely some scope there to work with eh.. But if he's game i'd give it a blast still... #throwsdownachallenge |
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CHAIN
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Nice to see you're still active out here.
Yes, somebody had to speak on it. This was dope but I could tell some of the lines werent very focused. But still...very ripe lol |
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Goryo.
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A lot of elevation since I was last on. Actually this is dope as hell. I get that Covid is going to be a played topic real fast with how much you hear about it on a daily basis but this did a great job of condensing and summarising the collective feelings. Like there were a lot of raw quotables in this.
everyone's believing they need more ^Like normal life on steroids. Everyone keeps thinking they need more even when they have enough. Simple and hard hitting. Facts are still a miff but daily new names get added to that list Now mutated to a pandemic and still ppl wonder if its authentic ^I like how you revisited the topic later in the drop as if to say 'it keeps happening but still people are asking the same questions'. Verse gets more tense as a result. Overall great stuff.
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Crimson Juice
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Thanks CHAIN Goryo, good to see that you both still about and above ground,
and both dropping OM's since logging back in/on, so anybody else reading this check their pieces out!....peace. |
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Sammy
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crimson. this was a nice solid effort boski. I like the short lines. i gave the verse a quick frantic pace like someone who just wants to purge whats on their mind. It didn't seem to be focusing too much on the technical side of thing so im not gonna touch on that. it was a nice glimpse in to your world's perspective. riper than sun dried tomatoes that aren't ruined by preservatives and sold in package at stores because that will only eliminate much of the crucial nutrients, so i am not fucking with that.
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Dntplywelwitothers
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I like your direct approach to the topic. We're all seeing the same things play out, the situation is unreal, and I know we've all asked ourselves what would really happen in a situation like this...never figured we'd ever have an answer to that question...But what you're describing is the new norm...
"Contagious to the rich/poor" "Panic erupts in food stores" "Everyone thinking they need MORE" It's crazy how this is hitting us on a global level...the topic is one that will continue to surface, but this is still a fresh perspective and I appreciate you sharing. |
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Mitch.Wagwaan
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I liked the simplistic short line approach. Laid out a statement like a fast rambling of your thoughts.
Good to see you dropping Crim! |
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Crimson Juice
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Samwise
DPWWO Mitch Thanks for reading fella's I really do appreciate it..peace. |
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