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Neek
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Posted: 07 May 2020 at 8:55pm |
I feel like… I still write for the sole purpose to show vermin that old sermon where passionate coal burnin' got the locomotive coach turnin' take a trip with me.. my pens reprieve is a synchronized symphony of mayhem & choas interlinked yet he,… still beautifully serene I aint paint the masterpiece time is of the essence the ebbs and flows interceptions interject and mimmic quintessential temper tantrums I!.… want it!...now! so I scribe the moment while I unwind - and re-load it the token pistol holstered with a bullet but im more Lyndon, homie famous from assassinations I dont pretend to stunt got slugs that could squish a bug my engine run like the Winston Cup but yall in the dust in the interim my sprint a rush… Goodfella's Paulie - no kid could budge murder in the 1st, with offense to us passed the test before the pencils up our energy is *not* for pendulums.. intro the curriculum |
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Crimson Juice
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(WOW you preach brother man,get your ass in that pulpit and throw your voice at
us sheep, i see you've gone with the minimalist route with deep undertones, and the word choices were not only well placed but solid,(i'm trying to avoid typing 'ripe' as i feel i've over used it's purpose), i loved the the way you split those separate art forms into sections,seem to give the reader that space and time to contemplate without a break in flow as per say, real clever to the way you went in to each de- scription of the arts from like a personal angle/ perspective too,all with a poetic flair and stance,and the fact the reader could delve at their own pace and leisure with its Submarine deep contents was truly cool,highly enjoyable read my man, where the pleasure was totally mine,creative bored Mofo you..peace. |
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Mitch.Wagwaan
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Always enjoy your drops neek. Your unique style always paints a vivid picture. Quintessential temper tamptrums, damn.
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Concrete
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For someone bored this comes off as very playful and elegant, always a treat to read some keypoetry as you bring it here. Enjoyed and would read another.
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D-NoS
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love the way this is laid out and written , great read - peace
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