Open Mic: Onslaught Redux

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   still sick with it on a wicked quick visit
got slick wit to kick shit and rip vicious
on frigid bitches unlike heat my bars emit
that fierce fire from an arsonist narcissist
the flame burn MCs until straight surgery
no fake curtesy I need to break curfew see
in a state of emergency the scene is declining
that seems to be whining please dont remind me
I fill empty halls like a scene from The Shining


free styling rhyming and reviving forums
tiring poems have peeps dying of boredom
trying be awesome to belong in the kingdom
new recruits giving veterans PTSD syndrome
them foes getting banned is a righteous act
now trifling acts contemplate fighting back
returning with double accounts twice as wack
thats misery, trickery and bickering all moody
but if Im brooding I find it rather soothing
to just punch somebody, call it a mood swing


several blows permanently damaging temporal lobes
shining like emerald glow on you basement dwellers
blatant failures being misled by red herrings
think the board is slow - check your bearings
or try nuance, fix your glasses, get new ones
people flexing on my text equals sub-humans
selfish crooks aiming to maintain a well kept look
catch em at the bookstore reading self-help books
spotted as marks, chumps who get robbed in the park
put the glock to my heart only make a shot in the dark
mobbed from the start, greeted with relentless silence
punches lack any point, bars literally senseless violence


dunno why these cats thinking they some rap kingpins
getting pissed on by everybody, time to let facts sink in
coming to complexity, Con's taking it to new places
crafting intricate lines, they can barely tie shoe laces
if we battled, they'd be too traumatized to remember it
crack their craniums and give em fractured memories
im the type to unleash mortars on any mortal scum
you're basically a straw person packing a water gun
leave em slaughtered and gone, all bastards decayed
have kids passing away so I can be dancing on graves
blasting facades, no turning back when Im busting facts
leave noobs hanging, only to use them as puncing bags

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Concrete Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 02 September 2013 Location: Oslo Status: Offline Points: 1418 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 33-6-0 Form: WWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Concrete Report Post Likes(1) Quote Reply Topic: Onslaught Redux Posted: 25 May 2020 at 7:40pm
	still sick with it on a wicked quick visit got slick wit to kick shit and rip vicious on frigid bitches unlike heat my bars emit that fierce fire from an arsonist narcissist the flame burn MCs until straight surgery no fake curtesy I need to break curfew see in a state of emergency the scene is declining that seems to be whining please dont remind me I fill empty halls like a scene from The Shining free styling rhyming and reviving forums tiring poems have peeps dying of boredom trying be awesome to belong in the kingdom new recruits giving veterans PTSD syndrome them foes getting banned is a righteous act now trifling acts contemplate fighting back returning with double accounts twice as wack thats misery, trickery and bickering all moody but if Im brooding I find it rather soothing to just punch somebody, call it a mood swing several blows permanently damaging temporal lobes shining like emerald glow on you basement dwellers blatant failures being misled by red herrings think the board is slow - check your bearings or try nuance, fix your glasses, get new ones people flexing on my text equals sub-humans selfish crooks aiming to maintain a well kept look catch em at the bookstore reading self-help books spotted as marks, chumps who get robbed in the park put the glock to my heart only make a shot in the dark mobbed from the start, greeted with relentless silence punches lack any point, bars literally senseless violence dunno why these cats thinking they some rap kingpins getting pissed on by everybody, time to let facts sink in coming to complexity, Con's taking it to new places crafting intricate lines, they can barely tie shoe laces if we battled, they'd be too traumatized to remember it crack their craniums and give em fractured memories im the type to unleash mortars on any mortal scum you're basically a straw person packing a water gun leave em slaughtered and gone, all bastards decayed have kids passing away so I can be dancing on graves blasting facades, no turning back when Im busting facts leave noobs hanging, only to use them as puncing bags

D-NoS Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 10 October 2014 Location: UK-Wales Status: Offline Points: 207 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-6-0 Form: LLLLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote D-NoS Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 06 June 2020 at 3:30pm
	Solid asf , interesting lyrics , sweet self-hype piece , dope .
	https://dnos.bandcamp.com https://soundcloud.com/dnos_aka_dicey

Crimson Juice Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Crimson Juice Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 07 June 2020 at 10:20am
	Well,i'm not going to type up paragraphs here saying this and that,but what i will type is this had a very mature approach for a self hype verse, it had meaningful content backed up with blunted and to the point similes, and the putting it into segments gave it a building up effect,Ripe verse Mr Concrete, enjoyed this one.. peace.
	"You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance".

spume corrupt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote spume corrupt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 04 July 2020 at 1:28am
	Wow That was a brilliant read, easy to see why you had that belt brother I just felt whilst reading that you could go on for ages without getting repetitive I know you probably just knocked this together in a couple of hours and that’s why the quality is inspiring to me Won’t break down bars because I trust you already know I found the whole thing dope Nice to see you can still flex the pen main


Schematic Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 08 November 2014 Status: Offline Points: 130 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote Schematic Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 14 July 2020 at 12:10am

	http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/rapper-t-vs-schematic-horrorcore-02_topic45919.html

Concrete Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 02 September 2013 Location: Oslo Status: Offline Points: 1418 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 33-6-0 Form: WWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Concrete Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 12 August 2020 at 8:15pm
	Salute for the words spume & Crim, and especially the advanced feed from Mr Scematic, thats how its done.

Alien365 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 31 December 2020 Status: Offline Points: 11	Post Options Post Reply Quote Alien365 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 04 February 2021 at 3:13am
	Another freestyle. Liked the wordplay on the mood swing line. This was a solid display of the elements, structure is there and definitely some witty lines included. You have great flow in text and your subject matter is interesting as in where the lyrics are headed, so far you bring in nice references. Dope drop.