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    Posted: 01 November 2020 at 11:35am
There's some shade in brothers scene I seen it swayin' up in leaves
But see I ain't succumb to beast I mean I came to sun the thieves
Through blame or blundered treason G. Don't fuckin' preach to me
I ain't no cousin leechin' peachy. Rather eat a peach

Don't start, I'm after secret keys I'm huntin' catchin' unawares
Blunt 'n' snatch in underwear in hatches up the stairs
Ain't fuckin' laxin' up in here we come to tax this upper chair
This motherfackin', cuck-infested, pack of unprepared

Go suck a fat one Uncle Fester if you ain't about the remedy
Say or shout an anything while you're layin' down on every dream
Prayin' out to heavenly all like "hey I found out everything"
Your face is gout like very green, you're just makin' out all scary g

What you say is nowt to merry me, I been raxxxin' from 'em riches
I been smackin' up temp'ratures, feedin' smack to hotter bitches
Readin' MAD since I was britches, I seen man 'n' op get diff'rent
Matter fact it's what you listen to that matters not the written
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Red-B Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 November 2020 at 5:31am
Sheesh... bro the rhyme schemes are absolutely insane! Super dope drop i would love to hear you on some audio tracks brotha! Also the multi-syllabic rhymes are on point. Keep dropping!
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This was a dope little freestyle. The flow is great and seems like it would be pretty good on audio. It has a good structure of multisyllabic rhyming and doesn't err on that point. Overall good piece
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dope flow and rhyme scheme

3rd stanza was the hardest when i tried audio, but all the stanzas are butter
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Ok, so this verse came off to me as an inward looking piece, it seems to ask questions
to those who read it, it highlights commons struggles that most at some point see or
feel within themselves, and because of that fact, it also had this kind of participation
aspect about it, where the reader finds its depths at their pace, which then heightens
flow because the minimal wording effect kicks in, i thought that to be a clever inclusion,
nice piece which to be real truthful i enjoyed reading alot..peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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