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dalinquent 
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 Topic: Another little bullshit rap...Its decentPosted: 09 August 2005 at 2:47pm |
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Feedback would be nice
this another form of the spiritual, lyrical shit i'm giving you the way im spooning ya bitch you'll think im eating some cereal// and really its a mysterical the way that i can do this shit cause the punches i throw will make you think that i was throwing fist// yea really dude, the way i do this rap shit is a mystery cause i blast, and be taking niggas to class like history// and nigga thought i was weak til i fucked up the obstacles now they see me and get inspired like nothing's impossible// and if i call you a bitch im just saying that you sweet as fuck and its no wrong way to eat ya lyrics just like reese cups// i use to think becoming a legend was just a myth until i developed the method just like Cliford Smith// beside...the shit that i'm giving you is light you thrist its like i just had to give the sprite// and if you bite me one time stealing my shit i don't care i just know that you feeling my shit// syke, u try that shit thinking it won't be stressed and imma end you career like T.V.'s Adam West
Im that nigga...Damn. Give me feedback on this shit... |
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Posted: 09 August 2005 at 3:43pm |
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Its Ok...Nothing Special, Basic Rhyming, But You Got Potential, I See You Dropping Alot
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dalinquent
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Posted: 09 August 2005 at 3:45pm |
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I said it was a bullshit rap...check out my other shit too
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Posted: 09 August 2005 at 4:10pm |
Yeah But You Also Said Its Decent  |
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dalinquent
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Posted: 09 August 2005 at 4:11pm |
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you also said it was decent, so what you saying
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Posted: 09 August 2005 at 6:30pm |
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Its decent
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Posted: 09 August 2005 at 10:51pm |
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Decent: flow... wordplay... effort... Overall: a decent little bullshit rap... Adios... |
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dalinquent
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Posted: 09 August 2005 at 10:54pm |
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check out my better shit... look at the rest of my shit like more bars, etc. |
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Posted: 10 August 2005 at 11:09am |
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LMFAO at Senor...
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Posted: 11 August 2005 at 2:46am |
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i actually thought this wasnt too bad...
the rhymes you used were simple, but presented it pretty raw... just work on punches, and how you word em. cuz you said "like t.v's adam west" it shoulda been "raps adam west". just the way punches like that are usually worded. its like me saying... Im The Patriots Of Rap, Aint Nobody Beatin me" decent drop tho. keep it up |
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POP POPPITY WHAT, I Know Yall Aint Poppin At Us
Cuz One or Two Punches Will Leave You TALKIN LIKE SEAN CONNERY DOES 
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Posted: 13 August 2005 at 1:03pm |
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no it shudnt be raps adam west, unless adam west is a rapper...it wasnt a metaphor it was a simile so u wudnt say that, the patriots of rap is a metaphor so thats why it goes like that, to be honest i actually liked the drop tho...wasnt anythin great but dude didnt profess it to be, showed good knowledge of rhymin and similes which a lot of people lack and while the plays weren't mind blowin they weren't wack either, they were all pretty nice actually....and dude had flow and nice multis so i conclude it wasnt a bad little drop at all, tho i agree wit Senor that the content cud have been better but fuck it, it was more like a freestyle than a topical rap...it is what it is
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