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King Jehu
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Posted: 02 March 2006 at 12:26pm |
Dear Bryan, it's hard to write a letter like this
When you wouldn't agree that things would be better like this but how do I explain to my son when he's fifteen That I'm not his real dad? he'll ask what all this means How does your mother cope with being disgraced and being reminded of rape by just seeing your face These questions sound selfish, and that might be true But her pain would be passed down, and most likely you will have to deal with it too, and that's not manageable You're a product of the worst crime imaginable Shit, shouldn't have called you that, I'm confused right now I feel weak, can't speak, I'm kinda blue right now We talked to your grandparents, they all agreed That it'd be shameful to have you, cause all would see and I don't want you having issues from the way you were conceived or brought up by teen parents, not ready to be Don't be angry, you see what this cold world does but maybe you'll return one day as the product of our love And not this... please don't blame your mother Or hate the name "Bryan" if it ever became your brother's We either keep you here to suffer or we plant our own seeds We just want to give our kids a fair chance to succeed To say all I wanna say, I haven't got the rhymes maybe now was just not your time... and I'm so sorry... |
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Insert something rappy here
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Demonic
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Shits deep as a fucka, Good flow throughout... worked the hold story into rhymeing real nice ... Heavy drop ... props
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NepentheZ
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Thats deep to the grave ... is this a true story? personal .? if so ... then its too sick man, if not, its still fuckin deep
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I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
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Junior Shade
Superior Member Aka UnaBomber Joined: 07 June 2005 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 5015 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 55-14-6 Form: LWWWLW |
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Holy fuck.. Good shit Jehu.. Deep as the earths core.. Mad props duke..
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Cuba
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Thats sick man, i kinda guessed the endin around the grandparents line but still, uno how its done
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G-Pfeif
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great drop... deep shit, real personal (whether its true to u or not)... good flow throughout
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"I'll put a Loss to ya name like a Mexican City" "Ill Put an L to ya EGO like them building blocks" |
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-Orion-
Veteran Joined: 08 April 2004 Location: DisturbinLondon Status: Offline Points: 9598 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: #1 Stats: 90-4-1 Form: WWWWNW |
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Yea that's crazy no question... nice concept, crafted pretty much perfectly and you never made it wholly obvious what the piece was either, which I loved... This is a classic... Flow wasn't quite floweriffic, I think if you ever record though, this should be one of your first choices, patch up wording where possible and it'll be crazy... peace |
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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I-kontinue
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Lmao. Im sorry but i found this funny.(prolly cuz i assumed it wasnt a real story while readin it)lol im soo fuckin sorry but honesty's the best policy. good piece. i liked the flow. everything was on point for me. 1.
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Kay B
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I hate repeating what everyone's already said but ima do it anyway lol
Dope peice man, couldnt really find any fautls it in. It clearly had alot of feelin behind it and was real deep.....good job man |
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