Open Mic: Dear Bryan...

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    Posted: 02 March 2006 at 12:26pm
Dear Bryan, it's hard to write a letter like this
When you wouldn't agree that things would be better like this
but how do I explain to my son when he's fifteen
That I'm not his real dad? he'll ask what all this means
How does your mother cope with being disgraced
and being reminded of rape by just seeing your face
These questions sound selfish, and that might be true
But her pain would be passed down, and most likely you
will have to deal with it too, and that's not manageable
You're a product of the worst crime imaginable
Shit, shouldn't have called you that, I'm confused right now
I feel weak, can't speak, I'm kinda blue right now
We talked to your grandparents, they all agreed
That it'd be shameful to have you, cause all would see
and I don't want you having issues from the way you were conceived
or brought up by teen parents, not ready to be
Don't be angry, you see what this cold world does
but maybe you'll return one day as the product of our love
And not this... please don't blame your mother
Or hate the name "Bryan" if it ever became your brother's
We either keep you here to suffer or we plant our own seeds
We just want to give our kids a fair chance to succeed
To say all I wanna say, I haven't got the rhymes
maybe now was just not your time...

and I'm so sorry...
Insert something rappy here
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Shits deep as a fucka, Good flow throughout... worked the hold story into rhymeing real nice ... Heavy drop ... props


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Thats deep to the grave ... is this a true story? personal .? if so ... then its too sick man, if not, its still fuckin deep






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Holy fuck.. Good shit Jehu.. Deep as the earths core.. Mad props duke..

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Thats sick man, i kinda guessed the endin around the grandparents line but still, uno how its done
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great drop... deep shit, real personal (whether its true to u or not)... good flow throughout
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Yea that's crazy no question... nice concept, crafted pretty much perfectly and you never made it wholly obvious what the piece was either, which I loved... This is a classic... Flow wasn't quite floweriffic, I think if you ever record though, this should be one of your first choices, patch up wording where possible and it'll be crazy...

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Lmao. Im sorry but i found this funny.(prolly cuz i assumed it wasnt a real story while readin it)lol im soo fuckin sorry but honesty's the best policy. good piece. i liked the flow. everything was on point for me. 1.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Kay B Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 02 March 2006 at 6:50pm
I hate repeating what everyone's already said but ima do it anyway lol

Dope peice man, couldnt really find any fautls it in. It clearly had alot of feelin behind it and was real deep.....good job man
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