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 Topic: Search....(some abstract shit)Posted: 18 February 2007 at 12:07pm |
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Some hustle 'coz of the thirst for the juice to grind,
Others tussle just to find the words in the booth to rhyme,
The search for the truth we find,but often you lose your mind,
While finding your soul,the troops is lined while the youth reclines,
Try to boost your mind but confused the rhymes,you choose to shine,
Even if you lose,you find,we all pay our dues to time,
So is this truth defined or is it just the way it might seem,
What we do in rhymes,shit we bust and say,just a rhyme scheme?
Is it but a pipe dream or are these visions outside of the matrix?
Symbolic of the light seen,what we spittin' is about defining the great mix,
In rhymin' the state splits,multi-dimensional reality suspended in space,
With grindin' the faith slips,with lateral tension,gravity must bend into place,
It tends to amaze,if you ain't careful,you get harrowed with time,
So enter the place if you dare to,but gotta know how narrow's the line,
Between the truth and the lies,the lines and the rhymes,
That decides if the youth can survive through the grind of the times.
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Posted: 18 February 2007 at 12:13pm |
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Nice Verse, Pretty Strange/Unique Piece Here Haha. Some Pretty Hot Metaphors In There, Especialy The First Line.Flow Was Good Throughout, Was Feelin The Extended Rhymescheme, Overall It Was A Nice, Short Piece, Good To See You Droppin, Stay Active Yo.
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Posted: 18 February 2007 at 4:37pm |
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I thought this had some really nice multis...flow was pretty tight throughout...would like to see how ya other shit is...keep up 1...
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Posted: 19 February 2007 at 9:20am |
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g'd looks on the feedback yall...plan on dropping a lot more on here...
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Posted: 19 February 2007 at 9:29am |
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Smoe instances of rhyme taking priority over meaning, but other than that this was a nice drop, you obviously know how to rhyme, stay up
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Posted: 19 February 2007 at 11:12am |
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ya this was real nice..flow was real nice and you had good multis...like to see more of your stuff so stay active..
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Posted: 20 February 2007 at 12:55pm |
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g'd looks on the feedback...
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