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    Posted: 20 January 2010 at 9:31pm
Yo...

I used to dream of a career and marrying young,
Now look at me...  It's what a lifetime of dallying's brung,
Battling on the internet... writing some rhymes,
¿Who woulda knew that I used to have the life and the times...?
Music was like a drug... and using it helped,
To the point where I abused it and I should do something else,
I even fell out of love with fucking music itself,
When I saw Apollo fall and Orion losin' his belt,
And I felt like it was time for Señor Perfecto to leave,
To forget what it means to me and let go of the beef,
Cos I bet most of you read this and call it a classic,
And get all overdramatic over my extraordinary asset,
Okay... you're a fanatic and couldn't have been more diplomatic,
But it's because of you bastards that this place is boring and placid,
Now it's normally tragic... this text shit... cos nobody gets it,
I suggested Vets stick around and not have so many exit,
Start writing their next spit... til somebody checks it,
¡Yeah, it's complex... sick...!  They'll even quote the best bits,
And you're dyslexic if you think that this verse is untitled,
I'm untilted...  Guilty... I killed it... I'm unrivaled...

Adios...Evil Smile
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Mackie Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 20 January 2010 at 10:25pm
haha, i was gunna quote a line till the quote a line line lol n i thought it was untitled

good shit
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Stalin Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 20 January 2010 at 10:30pm
pretty solid verse, I must say some of the rhymes werent great.  I think u even had a mismatched one in there.. you're better than that Thumbs Down.  Some nice concepts.. untilted shit was funny.  Get more active man
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote rapdisup Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 20 January 2010 at 10:36pm
i liked tha music wasa drug line that was coolio not tha best piece ive seen from you but ya had flow going on an t was a nice read i knew wen i opened it that ya wudnt name a pice untitled tho haha so i guess ya predictable in that sense,however tha verse werent wat i expected so  keep dropping stil like reading ya shyt even tho ya think i got beef wit you haha stay up
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Awesome.
Insert something rappy here
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Well I liked it... my kind of shit
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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Good shit. Enjoyed it.






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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Cuba Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 21 January 2010 at 12:33pm
This was sick...really liked some of the subtleties in there as well, like when you started using higher quality multis @ "extraordinary asset", that was quality (because the multi is the extraordinary asset, for those that missed it)

Got your point across with smooth flow...how it should be

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Originally posted by -Orion- -Orion- wrote:

Well I liked it... my kind of shit


Name drops go a long way huh? I joke, I joke, I kid, I kid!

This was nice Senor, I also mistook it for Untitled lol
Shit got abit weird when you were talking bout LA like things happening on here were making you depressed, maybe I got the wrong end of the stick. Loved this though, nice to see you dropping in the OM again!
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This was really good, you have a unique way of writing.
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