Open Mic: Representing the People..

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    Posted: 22 January 2010 at 7:37pm
Inspired by a recent song I heard..

Just flowin' ya know.. been a while..

So,

Speakin' the truth, representing the people..
Young guns, middle age'd, old an' feeble..
It's real.. Security, love, warmth there needful..
But instead we let the outcasts turn to a needle..
Britan's evil, we stride straight past the homeless..
No warmth or love their left just hopeless..
Please focus for a moment, an' think of the guy..
Who lost his wife to breast cancer in the blink of an eye..
Then got made redundant by someone in the sky..
Booted out an' left jobless, he can't even ask why..
We joke, we lie, we fight, we whine..
But I feel for the mother who lost her son on the front line..
It's time's like this where you can have your soul stole..
Remember its not the single mom's fault she got thrown on the dole..
This whole things gone to far, overlooked a Goverment of cheats..
But no-one failed to not notice the beggers in the streets..

Good or bad comments welcome..

Out..
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This sort of seemed too poetic to call a rap, but I liked it. It was well composed, only thing lacking was good use of multies, but they are unessential in this type of verse.

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Thanks man..
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Uppin' anyone.. Will feed your drops too!..
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Kay B Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 January 2010 at 10:34pm
Reminded me of akala for some reason haha....Nice shit though, good message and it flowed well, good to see u back
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Thanks man, will holla at your latest piece..
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Like this - really good message - really well worded.  The simplicity of the verse adds power to the words.
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Thanks hanging, much appreciated..
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Calibra Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 January 2010 at 11:34pm
You dropped an Open? Didn't even realize lol
 
Agree with hanGing, flow was nice, was listening to a beat at the time and it worked for me. Good content and like hanGing said it's simplicity added to it's strength. One thing I will say is though, you're English dude and I know for fact you don't call your Mum Mom, so cut that shit out now lol
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LMFAO.. Thats so wierd, I always type Mom an' so other people mentioned it on Facebook the other day an' said exactly what you just said..

Thanks for checkin' it out though man..
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote MFJJ86 Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 January 2010 at 2:06am

This was nice liked it through out

I still don't know why people
Say things remind them of poems
when most of the time people
Liked Tupac when that's how he did it
other then that this was a Nice Drop
Liked the word play and word choice
keep them coming Aight
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Quality stuff man, digging it...hadn't even noticed you'd dropped this month!
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Haha.. Thanks man..
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