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dalinquent
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Posted: 26 February 2010 at 4:14am |
So I've been working on the album like crazy and I figured, what the hell... Might a well leak sumfin... Since, I'm not willing to leak any actual tracks, I decided to leak the lyrics to one instead... As you can prolly tell, the working title for the song is 'Broken Heart'
In addition, I'm only posting the first 2 verses... Figured I may as well save the surprises/twist in the conclusion for those who buy the album Enjoy Verse - Salvatore She was like 5'2, Light skin, Eyes blue Mines' brown, We don't match but our vibes do Defied rules, Going nuts like a cashew Pulled shorty to the side, Let me at you She responded "Excuse, uhm, That's rude" "I bet all the lady be saying your that dude" "But you not that cool", "Better chill it papi" I could've walked away, But I was feeling mami So I swallowed my pride, Like "Do u have a second?" "I ain't tryna be disrespectful, Just ask a question" She said, "Cool, long as you don't ask for sex" and I said, "Maybe, we could start with a name" She uttered "Destiny, But my friends be calling me Fate" Responded, "What you think about me calling you late?" Replied "Wait, Now your taking things a little too far" Said, "Well, I'm Sal", She said, "Oh I know who you are" "You from around the way, Hear you known fa ya bars" "And the way that you treat the ladies, You broken some hearts" "I know ya type, Next you gonna wanna show me ya house" I said, "Naw, But I was really kinda hoping you'd smile" Hook - Salvatore Cupid shot me with an arrow, But it must of been broken Cause my heart's in a box and I feel its closing My love's at the door saying talk to me bay Either talk or she's walking away But I don't what to do when we standing face to face Cause the way you got me feeling is like I'm running in a race Got my heart beating fast, And I'm thinking bout my past And I'm wondering whether we last Verse - Salvatore She said to me, "You think you're charming and such" "But... Don't be surprise that I'm not warm to ya touch" Had me like "Whoa, What?? Shorty you thinking too much" "You think I want ya body, But all I need is ya trust" "We can play spades with the cards up, Jay said that" She interupted me, like "Don't come with that lame ass rap" I said "Rap, hold it mami, I ain't up in the studio" "And all I'm tryna do is tell you that your beautiful" "You got the cutest nose, Ya smile is bizare" "And I can wish upon ya eyes cause they rival the stars" "Matter of fact, I wish that I could buy you a car" "But right now, I'm on the low and I'm still tryna come up" She was with it, "Like why you think you need to buy me sum stuff" I said "Don't front, I know who you are, I see you around" "Hoppin outta the Lex', Fixing ya dress when you leaving the clown" "Crying, Telling ya friends you think he sleeping around" "She said, "So you thing you know me? You reading me now?" I said, "Girl, You ain't a book... All it takes is a look" "To see that your down, Though you smile, Beneath is a frown" "Cause sex is the reason that he's keeping you round" Hook - Salvatore Cupid shot me with an arrow, But it must of been broken Cause my heart's in a box and I feel its closing My love's at the door saying talk to me bay Either talk or she's walking away But I don't what to do when we standing face to face Cause the way you got me feeling is like I'm running in a race Got my heart beating fast, And I'm thinking bout my past And I'm wondering whether we last |
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Sick-Witted
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This was a pretty good man, lyrics flowed well, looks like it'll be a dope relationship song. I dig the way you told your story here...so when's this project of yours supposed to be completed?
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Sick-Witted->means
I'm clever an ill & my best is revealed when Da pressure is buildin, so step if ya willin But testin da realest Will only lead u down a lonely street 2 ya death cuz I kill it |
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dalinquent
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Release date is May 29th
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Sick-Witted
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ok...cool, put the word around the drop date again..i'll pick up a copy..peace |
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Sick-Witted->means
I'm clever an ill & my best is revealed when Da pressure is buildin, so step if ya willin But testin da realest Will only lead u down a lonely street 2 ya death cuz I kill it |
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I-kontinue
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It's okay. Very cliche though, and that was the downfall. Nothing stood out... Just a very generic boy hollering at a girl... No clever speech from either side or nothin' like that. It was straight cause it tells a cohesive story while rhyming which some can't do, but that was about it for me... Maybe the 3rd verse twist you're holding away will make it better, but the story itself has been boring so far. I keeps it honest. Peace, Dal...
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