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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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Posted: 27 April 2013 at 4:34pm |
Bothered to write this for the tournament so thought i'd put it up for people to see, any feedback appreciated................
Checked the sig, Jon fisted his Nanny her fanny got dealt now he fuckin knows how it feels to be the granny himself? I'll damage his health fatally if old age dont beat me to it dude got house slipper drops an pots a tea to keep his movement I'd leave him ruined, punchdrunk to the point he cant stand me He' S-not good, he's mainly Shittt! So just Miss teh Han key I mean whats the plan G, you take a title back to Basingstoke? crazy joke, when you get managed like QPR....H aint raising hope I'll fuckin blaze this bloke, punch holes till the bitch is hamming hammered 9inch nails thru skulls, thats how I picture Hanging My scriptures banging this og senseless, got skills ta murder I been hittin him with ice old flows! Ironically he's the silver surrfer I will merk this old faggot despite the fact we need the queer I dont do respect shitt, so it's just a quick exit he's leading here He aint even near this level! I've kept moving and hitting him I said he was a Mr Hankey b4, and now I've proved it by shitting him .......................................................................................... Expo: HanG is burning a lot of candles ya know! Managed like QPR....H = Redknapp......(He cant save em from going down) just a quick exit he's leading here.....HanG is the Lead mod |
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J504
Banned Joined: 08 June 2010 Status: Offline Points: 5385 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 25-0-0 Form: WWWWWW |
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Damn bro, that first bar had me rolling, lol!
Really dug the plays throughout this one, defintely that spume style that I've always dug since day 1. You can hit hard and still got that grime and jokes. The picture hanging line and silver surfer play were top shelf! well done on this one, fam
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BIG GAME
Newbie Joined: 16 April 2010 Status: Offline Points: 4322 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 29-4-0 Form: WLWWLW |
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Yea this was a mean verse! Good to see a truly solid verse, they don't come around a lot. Closer was cool, but I was liking the closer too. Just something about the flow of it made it that much more effective. Solid verse though. Good shit.
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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All due respect to HanGing, we all know he's the bossman here!!!!!
J5 my main I knew you would like this one fam!! Bg thanks for looking bro...................Respect lads,
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Manc
Superior Member Joined: 02 April 2010 Status: Offline Points: 7032 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 82-4-2 Form: WWWWNW |
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I'm confused I don't see no pillows - nor do I see any beds - SO WHY THE FUCK IS THIS BEING SLEPT ON ???
Tut tut - c'mon now lads. I see all this feed on shitty newbie drops n this aint being touched much? Anywayz.... Opener LMAO!!! Dayum bro - thats sum nasty arse punch there lol. Loved that bit. LOL at the second bar. Typical English man there haha. Mr Hankey OHHHHHHH lol - mad shit. Now this next bar - people need to realise what you just did there - cuz for me, that's one of the best lines I've ever seen on ere. QPR manager being Harry Redknapp - that whole play was fuckin A1. Hard to top shit like that. Now I dunno if you made a NIN play in that next bar - but that was dope!! Lol at that Silver Surfer line. Like the way ya threw the OLD FLOWS part in there. Clever stuff bro. Damn - the exit line - sheesh. I genuinely can't fault one single line yet. Closer was jokes lol. Loved the humour. One of the strongest battle verses I've seen on ere yano. No shit. No Mr Hankey lol I'd of loved to ave seen his reply to this, cuz I reckon it'd take sum serious beating to top that. All killer - NO FILLER!!! Newbies should use this as an example of HOW YOU WRITE A BATTLE VERSE.
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CHAIN
Standard Member Joined: 14 November 2006 Status: Offline Points: 2769 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 8-4-0 Form: LWWLWW |
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Manc
Superior Member Joined: 02 April 2010 Status: Offline Points: 7032 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 82-4-2 Form: WWWWNW |
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CHAIN, I loved this verse. Nuttin wrong with expressing my appreciation for the art is there bro? I'm just in a long winded feed/vote type of mood today seein as I have the time to pay attention properly.
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
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Dope verse. For the most part it is very consistant. I did think the punch level dropped off a bit after the hanging the picture line. It's not that the bars after that weren't good either, just that they weren't up to the level your top part of the verse was. I did like the personal attempt on him being the lead mod though.
My favorite lines were the snot and picture hanging lines. Overall, I enjoyed this drop from beginning to end. I look forward to reading more battles/OM's from you.
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