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Kosmosis
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Posted: 28 June 2013 at 9:03pm |
Yo GABA GABA! Lemme tinker off in your neurotransmitters
And bomb on phony devils and some Euro bland spitters You love your mental prisons, shit you built them all yourselves And I can tell a lot about a human by whatever lines their shelves My character is well defined and I love the freedom of the certainty I love to see other’s insecurities try to prove my rhymes absurdity “YOUR DAD.” Maybe you have heard of me? Who cares about this world’s stuff, I got a mansion in Eternity I bruise ovaries when I am smashing, giving cervix surgery I aint gotta be the best, I am actually the worst perfectly My advice is their atoning. I am toting, spitting hot, spitting dope I mean Microexpressions behind the pharmaceutical culture...known to dream The difference between resources and resourcefulness The therapy age forgot decisions shape destiny’s course for us So zombie out son…pop dem meds and then makes some tweets about it…. I laugh at psychological defenses, I chuckle at masked deceptions The lies we tell ourselves are truly our most dangerous weapons No man has all the answers, no man has it figured all out The man that says that he has, is truthfully riddled with doubt This planet’s leaders are ridiculous. Arm chair quarterbacks are even worse GOD aint gotta have called for people to speak for hours un rehearsed The doctor talks more than listens. The politician listens to the lobbyists Show me what a man does when he is all alone, and I will show u what his hobby is Show me how he handles NO and I will show you who he really is u have not started to live until u face death, would u be willing to kill to save a life? I will be free with my every breath, and every day I am blessed with is gave to fight. |
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TeQuiLaSunRiSe
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nice drop, good content throughout. it flowed perfectly.
Two critiques which I hope you will take into consideration. 1. Don't use green font. 2. on the "dope i mean" line, I think you should have used a play on the prescription drug Dopamine, since you were already exhibiting similar content througout the verse. Good shit though, definitely a good read.
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POP POPPITY WHAT, I Know Yall Aint Poppin At Us
Cuz One or Two Punches Will Leave You TALKIN LIKE SEAN CONNERY DOES |
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J504
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Damn son, that doctor/politician line was fire. Highlight for me, I was like woah!
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Kosmosis
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Tequila. I was trying to make it dopamine. You also missed seratonin in the same line.
Thanks for the feed guys. Yeah jerome I am so burnt out woth politics especially after watching a doc on netflixabout lobbyists. |
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fuckoff
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ZEITGEIST is dope
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Kosmosis
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Why?
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TeQuiLaSunRiSe
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ahh, didn't know you made the reference. Good shit
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POP POPPITY WHAT, I Know Yall Aint Poppin At Us
Cuz One or Two Punches Will Leave You TALKIN LIKE SEAN CONNERY DOES |
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J504
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I meant to add that I actually liked that whole bar. It was a clean multi, flowed nice and content wise it was fire.
Cause that next line was on some real shit too. Feeling it. |
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Kosmosis
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Thanks fellas I appreciate it.
Tequila: sometimes I right in red lol Jerome: yeah bro we talked aboit it years ago: u only your real self whem you by yourself....you aont your real self when you are in a psych program lol. |
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