Open Mic: Skeleton Ki

It's easy to see that no one's weaker than Ki

This actor 'can't remember his lines'? That's funny, cos neither can we!!

Drops nice pics with his verses but still wack as an artist

This Dr.Who fan couldn't be 'out of this world' if he was trapped in the tardis

So stop frontin like you're hard cos mass destructions on the cards

I'ma leave you chopped up ...

...just like the structure of your bars

My punches leaving scars as I wreck him with ease

You know the 'joints' I drop are tougher than an elephants knees

So why you steppin to me? Have some respect for PB

Or you'll be going fucking nowhere when I break your skeleton Ki

Nothing on your CV but tons of foolish credentials

Just lookin at that uni you went to would prove that you're mental

And I'ma steal that girl you like cos I'm one hell of a charmer

How the fuck you gon 'attract her (a tractor)' when you dress like a farmer

You say I'm 'tired'? Yea I am, of the same old shit...

I'm sick of reading your tame punches everyday son cos they don't hit

You've been here long enough to know that you're wack kid

Totally hopeless at battlin' and thinks he's dope cos he's active

He's a joke and a faggot, we know this lyricist lacks threat

He couldn't be involved in a 'killer play' if he auditioned for Hamlet!
Nothing flows in his verses, his persona is worthless
So I'll leave Spirez crashing and burning like explosions in churches...

What's up PB, I thought this was an enjoyable piece broseph. My intelligence quotient hypothesizes that this wasn't exactly a legitimate keystyle, more so a quick write of concepts you had brainstormed. I could be wrong, but I doubt it.  I enjoy how strict you are with your multi rhymes, gives it a smooth touch that some rappers around here are slack on. I enjoyed how you approached this diss from several angles with metas/similes, and a variety of other literary devices. One thing I disliked throughout the verse was how blatantly you spelled out the wordplays. To me that came across like a crossword puzzle with the answers lightly stenciled, completely takes the fun out of reading for wordplay with it's made so obvious. It's as though you're catering to morons and I feel that people should have to work to comprehend the dopest parts of the verse. That was the only theme I disliked throughout the verse, now I'll break down so quotes that I felt deserved a comment/critique.

Felt the 'fucking' was out of place. I know you were trying to keep the syllables balanced but I feel adding profanity that adds little to the line is almost lazy and could definitely be ironed out. I realize that this was a (semi) keystyle but best not to create bad habits for yourself.

Although, as addressed by Law, this only made sense in one context, I feel the worded was dope enough for it to stand alone. It would obviously have a tremendously increased wow-effect if it were to have two segregated meanings but I don't have a problem with it how it was. Read more as a line alluding to a tractor in relation to dressing like a farmer then it did as an intentional double entendre. 

Alongside the tractor line, the elephant joint line, and whatever other ones I'm forgetting, these are examples of lines I feel would come across as being more memorable if the wordplay was was in quotes. You word things well enough that the reader should be able to figure it out, and when you allow someone to figure it out on their own it will be much more memorable to them.

Last thing I'll mention, I really enjoy how you stray away from played rhymes schemes and use unique multies. Solid piece broseph, take care.

That's the difference between audio and text IMO, and it all boils down to personal preference.