Open Mic: FUCK THE WORLD!

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   this is my lyrical assault 
i stay on the frontline
killer mind psycho shittin on the bible
im alive though with sniper scopes and idols
death at my arrival strive yo
bye hoes with high hopes
no suicidal tendencies homicidal remedys
do or die pressured heavily
demons in my head bustin on the mic heavenly
blasphemous strategist activist
just blastin clips no actor shit
back at it attackin quick
no naggin or braggin 
all about action im proned on the rooftop 
too rock those knots dosed off 
holdin my aim steadily 
i keep it ready G
killin it got heads crackin trappin and laughin 
still no braggin or naggin 
all about action 
this big beast rips flesh and necks
with struggle fuck you ill hunt you
stay def hate me i love your negative energy greatly
i love bitches that say no screamin in my brain rape me 
im been on this crooked style since wolf gang ran wild 
looks like an odd future so KILL THEM ALL

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6The6Beast6 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 10 September 2012 Location: Baldwin Park Status: Offline Points: 14	Post Options Post Reply Quote 6The6Beast6 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: FUCK THE WORLD! Posted: 17 August 2013 at 6:43pm
	this is my lyrical assault i stay on the frontline killer mind psycho shittin on the bible im alive though with sniper scopes and idols death at my arrival strive yo bye hoes with high hopes no suicidal tendencies homicidal remedys do or die pressured heavily demons in my head bustin on the mic heavenly blasphemous strategist activist just blastin clips no actor shit back at it attackin quick no naggin or braggin all about action im proned on the rooftop too rock those knots dosed off holdin my aim steadily i keep it ready G killin it got heads crackin trappin and laughin still no braggin or naggin all about action this big beast rips flesh and necks with struggle fuck you ill hunt you stay def hate me i love your negative energy greatly i love bitches that say no screamin in my brain rape me im been on this crooked style since wolf gang ran wild looks like an odd future so KILL THEM ALL
	"I Need That Rothschild Money My Top Is Sunny I Seen The Light You Blocked It From Me But I Found My Way To The Top, Im Comin Cause I Smack That Bass Like A Rockstar Drummer"

Mr. House Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 11 July 2013 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 343 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 13-3-0 Form: WWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Mr. House Report Post Likes(1) Quote Reply Posted: 17 August 2013 at 6:55pm
	Good use of multies, I thought it flowed quite nicely as well. Probably could have some more content in it overall but this was good. Definitely keep it up!

6The6Beast6 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 10 September 2012 Location: Baldwin Park Status: Offline Points: 14	Post Options Post Reply Quote 6The6Beast6 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 17 August 2013 at 7:23pm
	thanks for the feedback
	"I Need That Rothschild Money My Top Is Sunny I Seen The Light You Blocked It From Me But I Found My Way To The Top, Im Comin Cause I Smack That Bass Like A Rockstar Drummer"

JBrenn Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 03 May 2006 Status: Offline Points: 3757 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-26-0 Form: WWLWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote JBrenn Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 17 August 2013 at 7:40pm
	joined in 2012 with 10 post are you even active enough to get feed back? anyway ill do my best.. Flow was choppy your syllables were all over the place... i didnt see any wp or any metas.... work on your structure and content.... this was you just saying shit... i honestly wasnt feeling it at all that this drop was like reading a dr.zuese book... rymning isnt rapping... isnt poetry... use some heart in your post make me believe what your writing! stay active though... keep dropping! you'll find a style that fits you.