Open Mic: Notepads & Roachclips (CHAIN & Que)

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    Posted: 02 October 2013 at 2:02am
Long overdue !!
Fonzerelli and the Quantum !! Street meets the Beast!!
The MetaMonstah and the Metaphysical Alchemist!!
Letssss Dooooo Thissss!!!



Notepads & Roachclips
CHAIN & Que

I cosign the sounds of dope rhyme pronouncers
Over soul loops, that’s that old time nostalgia
Rushes of adrenaline, my blood was pumping insulin
Just like the feeling when the po-9 surrounds ya
Yes, I played the sickest songs, bitch, the base was ichiban
The shit made a nigga wanna clothesline a bouncer
It put me on game, so I told lies to counselors
That’s word to my very first lo-fi encounter…
Of the third kind with the tapes, heard the boom…
Bap-tize my groove and it groomed me in the booth
I grew into a beast and the bounce became my boo
I bounced on them hoes that were bounded by the rules
‘Bout it Bout it blew up, I was bound to get the blues
Right after I stopped choosing Bowser over boobs
Booze and bootlegs, forget the YouTube links
Only Built 4 Cuban gave us new school limps
Too cool for sports ‘cause I repped the 4 pillars
The monolith I liked was for metaphor killers
Record store villain in jaundice colored Timbs
Back when the Compact Discs sold like Bubba’s shrimp
I was bucking at the birds with BB guns, I aired it out
Longer than the cracks in the leather of my parents’ couch
A fair amount of time was spent on sculpturing my sonnets
I cared about designing what was ultimately honest
The culture was demonic to some when they summed it up
Fleeting like a summer crush but it did summon us
I sonned a bunch of ‘em, I was protégé-ing niggas
Way before the fashion world procreated with us
Motivated critters with their blunts sighing backwards
Bonsai in zip locks for punch line dispatchers
The fonts I would spray on the walls were Jurassic
The Fonz wouldn’t lie ‘bout his archive of graf flicks

It’s not just the rap shit…


I would kick facts ‘bout the needles and the slip mats…
Underneath the vinyl, my DJ peoples lived that
Mismatched wristbands and no text battles
I diddy bopped the walk on the road less traveled
Tape deck bibles, them ciphers was church class
Where my brain stormed as cyclones of words clashed
Just like them windmills when b-boys were facing off
Swimming in a whirlpool of flows while we traded bars

...hard
That shit bang fool!!


Who brang you.....the Chain/Que!?
Its Fate..who connected legends wit the text and the names too!!
Rebel?!!!??
I'm smokin upstarts and killin off the main Ku
from the pentagram of darkness yet I'm chillin wit the same crew!!!

Lets GIT IT!!!!!!

You newbs is on Open restriction!
Cease scriptin!!
I'm agitating your Atom's Plasma till Friction becomes an Infliction!!
It is so written!
Hemorrhage black fluid due to stomach rippin
Vomit Coagulated Comments and Succumb to your Spittin!
newbs use vocab!! But I Command it !!
Use it to Crush big objects and splice Granite!!
With speed that'll leave Time slanted!!
You'll know!!
when my palms is closin in ,my hands could Vice a Planet!!
Core EXPLODES!!!!
A trillion corpses on fire bringin light to the dark
Flames.... morph skin to ash ...Scorchin the iciest hearts!
Refuse ta starve !!!....so throwin dice is an art!
If I loooooooooose!!
I'll rip you Titans Apart !!
Nonstop with head shots that'll Stifle ya Smarts!!!!
Smashin thrones with the king still seated!
Call me The Master Drone ! Targets in Kill Box ..Completed!
Ain't no Disillusioned Addict with his Pill Box Depleted
I'm a Pragmatic Savage leavin Real tops Deleted!!!
I"M RAW!!
Wit a voice carrier wave that'll liquify ya eye balls!
Now Mergin wit the metaphoric monstrosity.....
Notebook still in flames full of linguistic atrocities!!
Fonzerellii and the Quantum in the physical, form ferocity!
a Fire and Ice Paradigm with skillz in each property!!
Final Results are Death and Anguish If used properly....!!!!


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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote FD5th Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 02 October 2013 at 2:25am
It was like reading Mos Def spit and then Jus Allah come after, haha. The first verse must have been Chain's...the style was all too familiar. Very smooth with the flow, very descriptive with the imagery and story and very witty with the wording. A lot of different ideas that takes a reader to some glory days if they lived it. I loved it. So much content in there and you were able to mesh it all together in a flawless manner. Really, really dug the verse. Then it switched up with aggression...an all out assault, haha. Although it's written, you have no choice but to feel or put the energy in when reading it. And you know, I didn't even read the part, "Street meets the beast" until after reading the verses. I went straight to reading where the verses began and I still felt that "Street then comes beast" type of vibe so you guys definitely executed what you wanted and how you wanted to right on point. Very cool collab.
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Sick fam, dig'n that Tyrant line lol, feed this after work just wanted to giv ya
a bump and let ya know I see you
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Clap aint shit to say except IMPECCABLE... fuckin loved it
U already know...
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I really liked the rhyme scheme of the first verse. I also liked the narrative feel to it, slice of life. Enjoyed a lot of the images, especially the leather couch. The slow flow was cool.


Whereas the first verse was calm in most ways, the second verse contradicts the stark fuck out of it. The flow becomes fast, things are said aggressively, it's an attack rather than a narrative, and the images are unreal and brutal in an epic way.



The images here are are vivid and literally awesome, like the writer's thoughts were completely uninhibited:

"Hemorrhage black fluid due to stomach rippin 
Vomit Coagulated Comments and Succumb to your Spittin!
newbs use vocab!! But I Command it !! 
Use it to Crush big objects and splice Granite!!
With speed that'll leave Time slanted!!
You'll know!!
when my palms is closin in ,my hands could Vice a Planet!!
Core EXPLODES!!!!
A trillion corpses on fire bringin light to the dark
Flames.... morph skin to ash ...Scorchin the iciest hearts!"






I really liked how you contrasted each other. Nice collaboration.
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Nice drop famz! choices of word phrasings was what made the piece prolific.
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I enjoyed this collab a whole lot. I like the contrast in styles here. As a tandem, it meshed well. The first verse was extremely polished. Very rarely have I been impressed by slant rhymes. Nastalgia/Pronoucer. Gotta appreciate the the abstract ability to pair up words like that. I was digging the scheme work too. You did a great job transition between consistent multis and ABAB sets. The flow was very polished. But by far, my favorite aspect, was the retro vibe of the subject matter. Bowser of boobs? Homie your pulling strings on my heart. The whole verse was just a trip down memory lane. Thanks for that.

And then theres the second verse. I like your style bro. There formating was perfect. I like the switchups in the flow. I could easily imagine the pauses and empasis on certain parts. The way I perceived the flow, was very old fashion. Some cool metaphors. Not much I can fault just a solid verse, and a great compliment to the first vrrse.

Keep writing, I'll keep reading.
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This section was hot bruh, really captured your style...

Of the third kind with the tapes, heard the boom…
Bap-tize my groove and it groomed me in the booth
I grew into a beast and the bounce became my booI
bounced on them hoes that were bounded by the rules‘
Bout it Bout it blew up, I was bound to get the blues

Liked this too, real clever play....

Record store villain in jaundice colored Timbs
Back when the Compact Discs sold like Bubba’s shrimp,
it was a nice set up.

This was the shit right here fam, yur flow was on point....

Core EXPLODES!!!!
A trillion corpses on fire bringin light to the dark
Flames.... morph skin to ash ...Scorchin the iciest hearts!
Refuse ta starve !!!....so throwin dice is an art!
If I loooooooooose!! I'll rip you Titans Apart !
!Nonstop with head shots that'll Stifle ya Smarts!!!!


Great collab, you two mesh real well.....Stay up fam!-BG
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Que and CHAIN?... Wish ya added me as a third person but I think that would of been overkill after reading this drop

CHAIN:

Long overdue !!
Fonzerelli and the Quantum !! Street meets the Beast!!
The MetaMonstah and the Metaphysical Alchemist!!
Letssss Dooooo Thissss!!!



Notepads & Roachclips
CHAIN & Que

"I cosign the sounds of dope rhyme pronouncers
Over soul loops, that’s that old time nostalgia
Rushes of adrenaline, my blood was pumping insulin
Just like the feeling when the po-9 surrounds ya"-----pffff CRACK...that flow....round of applause for that section alone...

‘Bout it Bout it blew up, I was bound to get the blues
Right after I stopped choosing Bowser over boobs ----this actually made me take my raider hat off my head and laugh my ass off.....might be one of the best lines ever in my opinion. just cause I can relate 100%...So awesome.. then the Bubba shrimp line?...damn...

"I was bucking at the birds with BB guns, I aired it out
Longer than the cracks in the leather of my parents’ couch"---is this a joke?....I feel like your one of my boys that used to do this with me back in the day on the couch rite next to me haha...Again the flow and the way you set it up...Damn CHAIN this I can relate to so fucking much it's crazy...not to mention the imagery and wordplay was just so natural...

"A fair amount of time was spent on sculpturing my sonnets
I cared about designing what was ultimately honest
The culture was demonic to some when they summed it up
Fleeting like a summer crush but it did summon us
I sonned a bunch of ‘em, I was protégé-ing niggas
Way before the fashion world procreated with us
Motivated critters with their blunts sighing backwards
Bonsai in zip locks for punch line dispatchers---pfff that last line and the flow above....You stay on that vibe with your lyrics that is just so smooth and they have a vibe/ attitude where its just so easy for you to do...it just comes so naturally it seems..

I would kick facts ‘bout the needles and the slip mats…
Underneath the vinyl, my DJ peoples lived that
Mismatched wristbands and no text battles
I diddy bopped the walk on the road less traveled---damn...the craziness ..the wrist bands and you diddy bopped the walk on the roads less traveled?.....just cheers to your ability to smoothness...I'm wondering where your audio is at??? 

and then Que follows...damn

Que:

That shit bang fool!!


Who brang you.....the Chain/Que!?
Its Fate..who connected legends wit the text and the names too!!
Rebel?!!!??
I'm smokin upstarts and killin off the main Ku
from the pentagram of darkness yet I'm chillin wit the same crew!!!----the flow is crazy...but I know what about to come so I'll save it lol...


It is so written!
Hemorrhage black fluid due to stomach rippin
Vomit Coagulated Comments and Succumb to your Spittin!
newbs use vocab!! But I Command it !!
Use it to Crush big objects and splice Granite!!
With speed that'll leave Time slanted!!
You'll know!!
when my palms is closin in ,my hands could Vice a Planet!!---yeah thats what I'm talking about...that in your face type shit....the way you make your rhyme scheme go with what ya saying is fucking crazy...

that refuse to starve so throwing dice is an art line was awesome...I can relate and I loved it

If I loooooooooose!!
I'll rip you Titans Apart !!
Nonstop with head shots that'll Stifle ya Smarts!!!!
Smashin thrones with the king still seated!
Call me The Master Drone ! Targets in Kill Box ..Completed!---you read the NY post lately?  cus it reflects it lol...That rugged redman flow is just nuts...you basically mastered it to be honest...

I"M RAW!!
Wit a voice carrier wave that'll liquify ya eye balls!
Now Mergin wit the metaphoric monstrosity.....
Notebook still in flames full of linguistic atrocities!!
Fonzerellii and the Quantum in the physical, form ferocity!
a Fire and Ice Paradigm with skillz in each property!!
Final Results are Death and Anguish If used properly....!!!!---holy shit Que...You seem to take your aggressiveness to the next level at the end of all your verses...not that theres not enough aggression in the beginning but you know how to end a verse with some authority...probably the best at it...
























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Overall


Round of applause and I want to be in on the next one

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Right on everybody for the good words. Man....I been waiting for hella long to collab wit the Fonz......right on CHAIN! I figured it could be like a Fire & ICE kinda vibe. Thanks again yall..I gotchoo on votes and feed shortly. And yeah...this LAX thing should be flames. Gotta go and get some Gin and a Beer chaser.

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I gotchoo Exo on the next one too bro!

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Wow @ Bowser over boobs....love how incredible it is when you put a concept together man, like proper intricate at the same time subtle at the same time conveying such a big life change & the reference is fucking sick for a guy of my age as well. Awesome!! Fashion world procreated with us....absolutely insane, wordplay was savage there as well. Cyclones of words clashed, sickness....then extended into dope simile.

Que, haha, I swear man you're like the Busta Rhymes of open mic..I can imagine you sitting there getting crazy animated when you're writing the verse out!! Core EXPLOSIVES!!! Love it!! You bring so much energy into your verses, really great at getting that style across...it's mad the way you bring aggression and that scientific approach at the same time. Really unique combination & loving the Quantum moniker you adopted as well....as you might say FITTING!!!!

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Thanks Cube! With you being a very skilled writer yourself , it means alot bruh.

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This is ridiculous. Chain's wording always astounds me. The references and flow were on-point as always. Don't know what else to say. Liked the last set in this the most i think:

Mismatched wristbands and no text battles
I diddy bopped the walk on the road less traveled
Tape deck bibles, them ciphers was church class
Where my brain stormed as cyclones of words clashed
Just like them windmills when b-boys were facing off
Swimming in a whirlpool of flows while we traded bars

Que, the aggression and energy just oozes out of every.single.verse. It's crazy. That last set was sick as well: 

Notebook still in flames full of linguistic atrocities!!
Fonzerellii and the Quantum in the physical, form ferocity!
a Fire and Ice Paradigm with skillz in each property!!
Final Results are Death and Anguish If used properly....!!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Nigma Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 21 October 2013 at 7:13am
omg I'm so glad I finally read this

I'm fairly sure the first portion was Chain
Bringing that constant heat, you consistantly bring a few things to each of your verses that give it a certain signature pizazz. Love reading your stuff, you'll drop a section of dope alliterations, continue on with the verse, then bring back the same alliterations scheme for a second coming later on. Its something I almost look forward too when I start to read a piece from you, dope shit. Some really dope imagery, the jaundice line was memorable for me, and I felt half way through you really began hitting stride with the multi game as well. Fresh throughout, props.

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That mini pre-verse stanza got me stoked for what was to come. I felt the intro to the verse itself was a bit stale but once you got going you fuckin tooook off. Soon as you started droppin those concepts it was just one after the other, barrage of entertainment. Grip and crush a planet, squishin the core, igniting the population, light in the darkness, fuck yes. Felt the ending didn't seem like an ending really tho, it was dope but just didn't have that 'conclusion' feel to it.

Regardless, this was a delicious read, well done! You both are on a list of people I wanna collab with so hit me up if you're down! 
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Brilliance. 

Record store villain in jaundice colored Timbs
Back when the Compact Discs sold like Bubba’s shrimp - Yes.. Yes.. YES. 

Your flow on the first 2 bars was crack, pure crack CHAIN. 

I'll rip you Titans Apart !!
Nonstop with head shots that'll Stifle ya Smarts!!!!
Smashin thrones with the king still seated!
Call me The Master Drone ! Targets in Kill Box ..Completed!
Ain't no Disillusioned Addict with his Pill Box Depleted
I'm a Pragmatic Savage leavin Real tops Deleted!!! 

Pow, pow, fuckin' pow.. This was fire Que my boy. 


Both of you, massive props for this.
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