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    Posted: 10 January 2014 at 2:12am
Decapitated my own skull, spun it on the earths axis
Scattered my remains but my heart stayed in the first casket
I spun like a record searching for gOd..
But he wasn't found, yet I was birthed catholic?
Reincarnated my own spirit which re emerged savage
Stirring up stink with gods that smelled like burned cabbage
Spreading hate..which simmered down and turned sadness
Stuck my hands out to block out the sun! In turn blackness..
..
I sit comfortably in my emptiness reminiscing a soft pillow
While the reaper catches my tears like the roots of a tall willow
I am death, I am light, I am the answer to your question
I've given you all the answers yet you ask for more sessions
My saneness lies within the fact that I'm completely off the deep end
Your perfect life has been a great big game of pretend
The blood sucking leeches will start emerging from the silt
Raging war on your success by burning all you've built
So snap out of the light, nothing could do you worse
I'll be spinning on my axis out in the universe
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Nice feel to this good read I got a decent visual on this. The 2nd part was smoother and better in the flow are where as the 1st part used very nice vocabulary
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Thanks a lot, man. I haven't written an open like this in a while
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"My saneness lies within the fact that I'm completely off the deep end
Your perfect life has been a great big game of pretend
The blood sucking leeches will start emerging from the silt
Raging war on your success by burning all you've built
So snap out of the light, nothing could do you worse
I'll be spinning on my axis out in the universe"
 
 
 
 
Nasty dtk.. and to think I thought I was good
Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
Though you never even had the chance to witness it
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What up Smooth?

Yo Dress, this was sick. I always love your end rhyming, you stay bringing some creative shit like this with it. But yeah you know I enjoyed the sick vibe this had, just raw subject matter, out there shit. First couple bars had me like woah.

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That opener is sick...great way to hook you in...The opener in that second set was also great...Really enjoyed the feel of this drop right here like the others said...Hopefully there's a part 2 titled "Up is down". 
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Damn Dtk nice vocab and flow was on some other shit… nicely done fam!
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Thanks a lot guys, a lot of dope heads feeding this
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Originally posted by DressToKill DressToKill wrote:

Decapitated my own skull, spun it on the earths axis
Scattered my remains but my heart stayed in the first casket
I like the opener here. Pretty grimey. A lot of different avenues one could have taken from here.


I spun like a record searching for gOd..
But he wasn't found, yet I was birthed catholic?
Reincarnated my own spirit which re emerged savage
Stirring up stink with gods that smelled like burned cabbage
Spreading hate..which simmered down and turned sadness
Stuck my hands out to block out the sun! In turn blackness..
..
I sit comfortably in my emptiness reminiscing a soft pillow
While the reaper catches my tears like the roots of a tall willow
↑ Another dope set that stuck out to me. Just the way you describing shit.
Has that dark poetic vibe too it. Nice.



I am death, I am light, I am the answer to your question
I've given you all the answers yet you ask for more sessions
My saneness lies within the fact that I'm completely off the deep end
Your perfect life has been a great big game of pretend
The blood sucking leeches will start emerging from the silt
Raging war on your success by burning all you've built
So snap out of the light, nothing could do you worse
I'll be spinning on my axis out in the universe


Most of this was pretty good. I pointed out the dopest sets.
In my opinion your transitions were a little rougher in this drop
Compared to the last I fed of yours...but still good writing.
Perhaps that's something you can work on next drop.
I don't doubt its within your ability.
Overall enjoyable read.
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The flow and multies in that first verse were sick and the metaphors in the second were very vivid, nice work dress
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Thanks a million guys, love the feed and advice
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Best bar is definitely the opener, sick shit right there. Had good imagery
throughout the verse and kept that dark minded theme which was cool.
Good use of wording and flow on that reaper line too, shit dope. Stay up
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote The Law Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 January 2014 at 9:47pm
This was dope as hell. 
Seems like everyone else listed all their dope lines and favorites so I will stray from doing that.
^ I enjoyed and was sucked in the whole piece anyways
Flow and multi's on point and smooth for the reader.

There really isn't much I can say about this other than it was a dope drop. 
Axis bars were crack too. 
and I agree with UNLM that a part two Up is Down would be pretty dope. 
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Definitely feelin this drop man your wordplay was on point and it all just fell into place nicely....props man
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I loved it. It was a sick piece overall, because of the content.
End rhymes were also on the top imo

Creative shit,bro. The best part was the first one imo..
Stay blessed.
Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.

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Thanks a lot guys, I'll have to do the sequel like UNLM suggested
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I was feel'n this part right here, sounds hard as fuck....

The blood sucking leeches will start emerging from the silt
Raging war on your success by burning all you've built
So snap out of the light, nothing could do you worse
I'll be spinning on my axis out in the universe

This came out nice fam, you was flex'n with them internals and alliteration.
Part 2....ill be look'n

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