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RedNosePit 
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 Topic: Bravado OverDosePosted: 18 January 2014 at 10:15am |
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I'm known for bravado pieces, do you got ah thesis?
Why this is not a decent presented staccato sequence? I bottled lethal amounts of this secret distinctive sound Now I just fling around these linguistic instinctive nouns In sync with beats as I scream M.O.B.H.C really loud Guilty of killing crowds with my illness like a contagion No one is safe when I go ape shit, no elevation just levitation I'm the real super man when I fly into the top five conversation I barbeque beef but sometimes I fry an emcee's whole reputation You got to adapt to survive or be prepared for ya resignation Captivate and surprise, use your words like weapons of destruction I'm driving this train of multi syllables rhymes like a fuckin conductor I'm knifing this game, assaulting fools pride with a flow that is butter I've grown from the gutter and blown up into a wolf that'll gut ya I'm blessin you with my appearance on your track for serious hits I spit myself into a delirous fit, black out, rip the emcee nearest to fist Give him a lisp so that he can't deliver a diss to a superior pit Now that I sit in the H.Q. of M.O.B.H.C. a fire is lit under my Ass believe Soon I will be impossible to beat when unleashed like a catastrophe I'm the God of bravado, role model to those that will follow my mastery |
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Nigma
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Posted: 18 January 2014 at 12:42pm |
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Yo lets drop a bravado piece together. Was diggin this and think our styles would go well together. Only thing this was missing was a standout bar that readers walk away remembering however everything else is on point. Digging your flow and how strict you get with the schemes, read fluidly. Good shit broseph, hit me up with a pm if you wanna get something poppin collab wise
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RedNosePit
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Posted: 18 January 2014 at 12:48pm |
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I assume by a stand out by you mean punch lines or wordplay.
You'll all see me expand into that area in time. I'm just a scheme junky. Appreciate the looks. |
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Nigma
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Posted: 18 January 2014 at 12:54pm |
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By standout I mean any well put together literary device. I hear you on the scheme junky tho, thats my bread and butter
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RedNosePit
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Posted: 18 January 2014 at 12:58pm |
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Peep the 10 other drops I have. There's like three or four topicals I have.
Perhaps you'll find what your looking for in them besides schemes. |
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RedNosePit
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Posted: 21 January 2014 at 2:51am |
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Bump
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U.N.L.M.
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Posted: 22 January 2014 at 4:02am |
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I liked your opening bars best...enjoyed the "staccato sequence" alliteration and then the rhyme/wording in that second bar...I enjoyed the rest as well, but the opening two bars were my favorites and are what hooked me into reading the rest...Enjoyable read, you're clearly a very very good writer, well done with this drop
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RedNosePit
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Posted: 22 January 2014 at 5:52am |
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Appreciate the looks
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RedNosePit
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Posted: 01 February 2014 at 7:55am |
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Bump...
I'll rtf |
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Posted: 01 February 2014 at 8:43am |
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This shit is being slept on for real where everyone at? Flow is sick on
On point throughout. I like the smooth transition of your lines, it comes Out crazy smooth. Dope shit as a bravado piece. Can't wait to see more Of this mang. Stay up |
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Allow me to retort, you cowards is just learnin the shit we been teachin
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Posted: 01 February 2014 at 11:57am |
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you clearly bodied this b, keep droppin that Venom
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RedNosePit
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Posted: 01 February 2014 at 11:54pm |
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Appreciate it.
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