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    Posted: 08 February 2014 at 12:29pm
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I gotta get you on my mixtape broseph......shits fire
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I thought this was dope af. You flowed with the beat well. You had nice multis and internals. This was fire.
Keep droppin fire and stay blessed.
 
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Ever more impressive on audio, picked up on more concepts listening to the lyrics then I did reading them. The whole whispering theme was really dope when compared with the whole sleep concept in the beginning and with all the wonderful references throughout. I feel this style brings out the best in you and I hope you transfer a lot of it into your everday writing. Very nice audio voice, the tone you had fit the lyrics flawlessly. Big ups fo
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thanx man preciate the love on this one
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I have to say....for an aussie, you can rock a beat. you have a nice flow, and your presence is alright too. Not for nothing, usually aussies have a disadvantage automatically at rap shit. You're an exception though, clearly.

Thats not to shit on you either.

You know how to hold a pen man. Props.
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this was dope FO. i liked the beat and u flowed fluidly man. good shit.

keep it up!
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real dope stuff here FO. 
Beat had that slow vibe, your delivery and flow was really dope in this. 
Adlibs was on point on this too. 


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thanks mate.


i am most definately not a fuckin aussie btw lmao
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Hell ya man.. at first I was like ehh its alite but you hooked me from beginning to end!! Props!!!
                     
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the flow and delivery was perfect for the beat.

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pretty sick stuff FO, liked the slow rapping in this.. it went well with the beats... didn't find any flaws.. overall solid drop..
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yooo btw goose get at me anytime about that collabo mate. im down
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my eyesll shut eventually
if i keep staring into the empty deep
scenes flicker in my rem
i try remember them.. 
but they never keep
i try to listen
but they whispering

can you hear them whisper?

i hear them whispering...

form an alliance with lucifer
fight with the giants of jupiter
shooting up vials of lighter fluid
an sprucing up, with sprays of arsnic
an heavy splash of barmy
form the cloud of mustard gas
my grandfather passed in
sick bastard, i sack castles
come in the night an bag parcals
from porn to horses, im a arsehole
fuck a turn... imma move my whole arsnal

its a game to me, il tounge medusa
then erase her like gun from the future
dare dispute the facts?
im a jugganaut, of fuckin thought
fill my frontal lobe with useless crap
but its real lucid man, sept, revelation? 
it never really cums like shootin blanks
its beat with no fists, a stupid wank
my whole auras vacant, needs a spruce its dank

they come to me naked, with the loosest thanks
i open my hoarded draws of born whores
they too easy like they forlorn 
to the rock of wars scorn
ill perform the mortal sins
cautioned by those awkward hyms
i was forced to sing 
i scar portions of my limbs
jus to remember the poor sods that iv sinned
my dreams come with a warnin an padlock
an rise up, like water in a damp spot
i thank rot, an not the slop 
served up by the man god,

images of violence
hemarage my iris, 
with ligatures of virus
slike a hug from a wire
kill me with kindness
my form dissapears in smoke n clouds
so i get jack out, like im broken down
im okay with that, tell em, its over now
slip deeper into a coma, drown
walls become stars, water becomes glass
petals become nettles, an the glass becomes shards
im followed by a cunt in a mask
tell him, to fall back, im armed
got a severed wrist that ill slap his melon with
polar expeditions, im trapped in the negative
every scene seems similar, 
never change, its repetitive
im the alien, in a landscape of predators
i cant, land, im always falling
shouting at ego,   
an the cavern that hes crawled in
hes scrawls in blood
i wait for the flood,
to fight poseiden, take his trident
try stay clear of the water, 
its laced with ricin
i stir an gasp but never grasp
the horrors that awake in me
cause they wait till im embraced by sleep

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I liked how you tried to mirror your tone/delivery to the beat...had a really laid back vibe to it (great beat btw)...only thing I'd say is the way you delivered it was kind of monotone without being monotone...like you didn't really advance it or lift it at any stage, think if you're gonna be laid back you've got to try and mix it up a little bit more even if it is relatively subtle (not talking about going Busta Rhymes in the middle!!)

Metaphorically, you are an animal...you actually really remind me of the way I used to write, kind of vague concept, real introspective bouncing thoughts around and being sharp with the lyrical devices...but equally, kind of abstract and kind of difficult to work out if there was anything other than "I'm a bit paranoid" to the verse...nothing wrong with it at all, just saying it's kind of a puzzle at the same time...something you could properly analyse if you wanted to.
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Fucking tune won't go off !!
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i know what you mean about picking it up. i kept wanting to, but struggled with the switch, and ended up jus keeping it at the pace, defiantly try it next time tho. tyyyyy man its much appreciated.
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