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    Posted: 19 February 2014 at 3:52pm
whats the problem? are you stupid?
do you just not think? or is just not computing?
you all stink of bullshit, spout ya gibberish 
and pretend like ya pens exclusive
act like you got the noose to noose shit
i find it properly cringe enducing
watchin yous constantly spew pink an putrid
only takes a quick view an look kid, im puking
im bemused with your limp solution
but by all means gimp, i ain here to hate
feel free to talk a steamin heap of foolish, 
but dont forget throw a salute to houston 
while you lay, an think of judas,
yeah its beautiful, great... bullshit...
ill jus sit back and laugh amused with
your half arsed attempt to do this,
little lingering nuiscance, thas you kid
know what happens? it belittle's us, 
you drags em from the light into dusk
as you fill the air up with the stench of repute 
and smoggy scent of dubious
an its all so you can feel the love,
when you rim ya tutors..
wass that? watch my back?
what.. has another win been looted,
the atmospheres horrid, you let your sins pollute it
and now we all swim in sewage
i dont even give a fuck like i used to 
cause this whole things been ruined
i guess it all hinged on you kid
another one of the many to jus skim an suit it
in pursuit of another win  thatl permute the unit
i aint one start shit, an dont front, you knew this 
so dont you ever think that im muted
im armed to the roof with words
a arsenal of verbal uzi's n lugars
it bursts from mouth like phlegm an mucus
im lashin out, with a not so suttle tinge of ruthless
fill the syringe with fluid, i wont sleep,
in lieu of your petty excuses
they loose with a side of dim and stupid
none of you can even spit in sync with music
nah, ya just shmooze the dude you cool with 
for views with obtuse sugar coated feed
like, man thats so sweet, its juicing
i leave you bruised with shrewd hits
cause iv had up my chin with ur bullshit
an as we sink into it, it oozes
into the mindset of every new debutant
better start callin me vet man
ill get these dogs leashed n neuteurd
i dont care for this bitchy noob fest
nah, so ill bid you adeui kids
the break down from fake clowns
its useless, i rock a mid truthfellness
so you might find it a little unusual
think this aint about you? it probably is
jus check active users man.. i aint droppin a list,
you know what the problem is?
yous addicted to the soap operas
quick to call him god, an post a vote as a offering
wait for the knock from grim, il set ya death up
cause a morticians gotta live...
watch you suffocate
your so far up an arse its cock to shin
watch the king, box em in, 
you all botched an ming, 
watch them ring round to slate me
like cold callers pushin a roofing saving..
im through debating wit you silly fucks
i dont bother with the naughty step
i get the belt out the vinegar an score your head
dont worry bro, i wont make you write lines, 
ya texts already forced...
thats the end of class. 
is there any questions?
have you any thoughts?
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I liked the short bar style you used here.  You actually nailed it to be honest.  That flow worked really well here.  but Who are you talking about?  I loved how you stayed steady without dropping off at all. 

Nice drop FO



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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Titu Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 19 February 2014 at 8:56pm
Good shit... Some tight ass bars but flow was a bit hard for me.
Its aimed at?? Just wonderin'
Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.

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lol if you think its about you it is basically




and most likely who ever rated this one star
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A definite 5 star... I rated it yeterday but cos I was only on my phone I left feed til today...

A great drop nice short line style and it works well wih he flow. It has emotion and passion in it. Some many quotable lines it was really good... Props
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Exoduzt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 20 February 2014 at 2:01pm
I dont think its about me at all..was just asking

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of course its not lol. its dissing any riders/haters really i cba to name names theres more than a few atm
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"yous addicted to the soap operas
quick to call him god, an post a vote as a offering
wait for the knock from grim, il set ya death up
cause a morticians gotta live..."_Fuck Off

^ That's some awe inspiring shit my friend.


I enjoyed the topic, the emotion  the similes, the metaphores, the imagery and the use of inners and multi's through out the whole piece.

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This is the most intricate diss verse I've seen in a LONG time. Honestly, huge props on this one.. I haven't been feeding many pieces lately (an im sorry, it aint cool) but this one caught my attention. OMOTM? idk, too early maybe but this is that dope.
But for real, this is about me. That gimp reference.
Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
Though you never even had the chance to witness it
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Liked how this went. Had a freestyle feel. 

There were so many major emotions here, that a main structure would've really limited it. 

So to do a loose piece like this, and keep a good flow, is impressive man. 

im lashin out, with a not so suttle tinge of ruthless
fill the syringe with fluid, i wont sleep,
in lieu of your petty excuses
they loose with a side of dim and stupid
none of you can even spit in sync with music
nah, ya just shmooze the dude you cool with  

^ Highlight for me. 


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yeah this was originally a audio verse, hence the many many typo's lol, cause i know most of it by heart from going over the beat so many times i didnt really pay attention to spelling, even some of the wording is different to what i thought it was lmao. but it seemed apt to drop at the time. ty all for reading and feedback. respect
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