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Cuba
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Posted: 19 February 2014 at 11:42pm |
From a battle with LuckyD, topic was Exile...
Exile means to be away from one's home, while either being explicitly refused permission to return and/or being threatened with imprisonment or death upon return. It can be a form of punishment and solitude. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cuban_exile http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Operation_Peter_Pan The raft... Exhalation, the raft we float on is rickety Parents wave wistfully Cheek where they were kissing me glistening Still warm from tears rippling Wonder will I ever see them again Will I recover, my hearts grieving in pain Feeling the strain, breathing's inane The taste of salt seeping in veins Then they were gone Swallowed by the horizon And we were left in the arms of Poseidon I later read in the library of Greeks in sagas Being eaten by demons from the sea in their armour And I see flashbacks of Peter and Martha Still feel the pain of them not reaching the harbour Living with those secrets of karma On a new land Where they look at you like you had the features of Martians... Fidel... "Fucking Americans! In league with their Catholic henchmen!! Spreading a veil a fear, snatching our children, tactical tension!" Castro scattered the charts to the floor Harsh to the core since he started the war Flattened his spine, laying back breathing Explicitly seething, implicitly scheming "Listen to me clearly" he said finally, calm, impassive "We now regard as Fascist any who farmed this cattle" The message was cryptic, but I understood precisely So we herded up collaborators, undertook it nightly "Political prisoners should be spared from destitution" They were lined up in the square and executed Don't dare to test the ruthless... La madre.. Death squads roaming through shacks Foaming for flesh, goading, like Ronin with 'aks Who's coping with that? How else were we supposed to react? Hold my rosary slack and praying to Saints Nicholas and Elizabeth since my baby was taken away Aching, ashamed, rage is encaged, naked with hate Let them crash down my door waving their blades! The fact I'm religious makes them suspicious No place for faith in a state that's envisaged As a Communist prison, where ya yell and ya scream A nightmare across the coast from that American Dream Spreads like a violent storm, descendants of a Mayan spawn They play chess with ideals and expect my child as pawn? So I made my decision, it's a tough one to live with Beg my sons forgiveness, but couldn't turn my love to witness I'll watch over him, I promise little Pedro As they charge through the door gripping pistols then... Miami... I was one of the lucky ones, loving foster parents But I still sit on the beach late at night to stare at The horizon, feel like a cog in a machine Freezing fog blotting my peace Lost and deceived, rotting at me Drop my rosary beads What's the cost of this dream? The sky is the limit? They're printing these tshirts like this guy is idyllic Che Guevara, I'm despising the gimmick And a flaming sambuca can't brighten my spirit A paradise I can't visit, a life that is..but it isn't I stroll down the strip, brimmed with bandanas Across the foreheads of little gang bangers This is Havana? Where they're snorting the blow Imported the snow without snorkels on boats They're living bravado, they conquer and boast But, mi amigo, I just want to be home... Comprende? |
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Cuba
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JBrenn
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you're from england right??? your not cuban??? WTF how did you hit this out the park? lol Imagery off the fucking chain from the swallowed by the horizon on was sick.. how you create imagery the way you do using short bars and rhyming stayed on par.... you really know your shit cubes!
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Lucky D
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Yeah this was a well written piece that clearly was better than mine. Always dope with the descriptive rhymes and flowed well. If ya ever want to go again I'm up for it.
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J504
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Ok, this was dope as fuck. First off, very poetic feel to it lyrically and with wordings. Also, the different angles you took here really makes it feel original. This is one of those instant classics for me, I knew right away.
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U.N.L.M.
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The breaks, the vibe, the wording, etc just all added to such a complete work of art...the continuation of concepts throughout the piece really showed you put the necessary touches on this (for example, a line saying your religious and then later dropping the rosary beads...stuff like that is just top-notch)... this was dope as hell...Metaphors worked so well within this piece...The opening set was truly ill, really painted a picture/set the scene well for the rest of the verse to complete...The "swallowed by the horizon" and "left in the arms of Poseidon" was really nice...Then, the whole nightmare/american dream concept was dope...bringing back the horizon in the last set and the rosary bead/sky is the limit bar was tight...I can't praise this enough, but I don't want your ego to swell so I'll just say good drop and well done |
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The Law
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This drop was just insane from the beginning to the finish.
The wording was perfectly executed, the imagery and the emotion Everything was there with this piece. Definitely was an original piece, and I loved how you did some real research for this and integrated it into your drop. Makes that originality shine a bit more as well. There was way too many damn quotables to quote so I will just say that I really enjoyed this piece and it was an awesome drop.
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