Open Mic: Prophet

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   The prophet of rap has descended on earth
ready to curse, bury with words n venomous verbs
a centuries worth of worthless, wannabes n penniless turds
but smilies first im like Moses on a melody
i split and severe beats instead of separate seas
im splitting centuries of petty weak, enemies 
thinking there a threat to me
hanging from his neck like an accessory....
tell them please even with weaponry, they couldn't bury me
im a legacy an entity possesses me to dead emcees,
messiah of metaphors make them follow me like destiny,

my mind is scripted with scriptures of killer lyricism
the same demons you fear im eating dinner with em
i crush boulders with thoughts of critics criticism with in an instant
committing miracles which biblical scholars couldn't ridicule
its pitiful i disintegrate ignorance using multiple syllables 
what you feel to do, you brain capacity is minuscule
i was sent from god.. you couldn't even finish school
its typical you drip and drool im the missing jewel 
invincible, my school of thought is the lyrical essence
behind teaching them lessons on building a sentence
until they feel the progression if im feeling aggressive
i kill them and bless em... let me breath for a second.....

still need to finsih

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Imm-edi-ate Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 11 July 2014 Location: United Kingdom Status: Offline Points: 115	Post Options Post Reply Quote Imm-edi-ate Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Prophet Posted: 08 August 2014 at 1:56am
	The prophet of rap has descended on earth ready to curse, bury with words n venomous verbs a centuries worth of worthless, wannabes n penniless turds but smilies first im like Moses on a melody i split and severe beats instead of separate seas im splitting centuries of petty weak, enemies thinking there a threat to me hanging from his neck like an accessory.... tell them please even with weaponry, they couldn't bury me im a legacy an entity possesses me to dead emcees, messiah of metaphors make them follow me like destiny, my mind is scripted with scriptures of killer lyricism the same demons you fear im eating dinner with em i crush boulders with thoughts of critics criticism with in an instant committing miracles which biblical scholars couldn't ridicule its pitiful i disintegrate ignorance using multiple syllables what you feel to do, you brain capacity is minuscule i was sent from god.. you couldn't even finish school its typical you drip and drool im the missing jewel invincible, my school of thought is the lyrical essence behind teaching them lessons on building a sentence until they feel the progression if im feeling aggressive i kill them and bless em... let me breath for a second..... still need to finsih

Nigma Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision	Post Options Post Reply Quote Nigma Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 5:56am
	hey man some good rhyming here. decent grasp of multisyllable shit. your words bounce together well when reading. content seemed scattered and you didnt really build towards anything so that would be my biggest critique.


nomedic Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 11 January 2014 Location: South Africa Status: Offline Points: 1578 Crew: Hunger Games Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 35-25-0 Form: WWLLWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote nomedic Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 11:48am
	Cool drop the multi's were used well i liked the concept alot my favourite line was the moses line and you had some decent wordplay but the thing that stood out here was the flow bro nice drop

daydizzle89 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote daydizzle89 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 2:04pm
	Cocept was nice. Nice multi's, structure was in place, wordplays were relevant. Nice drop brothaman. You got some skill

Imm-edi-ate Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 11 July 2014 Location: United Kingdom Status: Offline Points: 115	Post Options Post Reply Quote Imm-edi-ate Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 4:05pm
	thanks for the feeds nigma- i get what you mean but i feel if i finished the whole piece you would of understood it better but it something im working on. nomedic- thats what i try make significant in my verses the flow im glad you could flow with it dizzle- thanks for the feed bro much appreciated

Junior Shade Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Aka UnaBomber Joined: 07 June 2005 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 5015 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 55-14-6 Form: LWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Junior Shade Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 4:08pm
	I liked this duke, so real nice bars, linked was nice flow. Some of the words you linked where banging too! Well done


Imm-edi-ate Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 11 July 2014 Location: United Kingdom Status: Offline Points: 115	Post Options Post Reply Quote Imm-edi-ate Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 4:32pm
	thanks bro im glad you liked it, thanks for the feed.

Ghul Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Banned Joined: 04 July 2014 Location: Pittsburgh Status: Offline Points: 262	Post Options Post Reply Quote Ghul Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 5:21pm
	Rhyme-wise you've got this shit down, good job on that part. If this is a brag piece which it seems like I thought it was good. Nice flow too, I have no major critiques really, good stuff.


Imm-edi-ate Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 11 July 2014 Location: United Kingdom Status: Offline Points: 115	Post Options Post Reply Quote Imm-edi-ate Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 August 2014 at 7:28pm
	thanks ghul i concentrate more on the flow and rhyming side of things, i think i need to work on the story telling part but i guess you could say it was.