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BiggStankDogg
Veteran Joined: 22 May 2004 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 1832 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: #7 Stats: 35-8-0 Form: LLWWWW |
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Posted: 24 August 2004 at 9:09pm |
My opponent is Flawless Prepare to meet the He-Man of rappin', I'm battlin' cats till I waste up their 9 lives Stage 2 = Lambs to the slaughter... Welcome to the Fight Club of rhymin', and I'm Tyler Durden hittin' with quick-fists Stage 3 = Faggots... |
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Fear the Bow of the Silent Archer |
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Demonic
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sick verse man im likein this drop havent seen the other guys yet but that'll more or less rip lol nice drop man
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King Jehu
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lol, you funny MF... good shit.
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Insert something rappy here
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-Orion-
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Funny, mocks 'em. hit's 'em hard, rhyme scheme is simpler, wordplay you both had, not sure where that goes, you both flowed OK but I think you take flow as well. All in all, you have your work cut out for you, because he's the Admin on this so-called "neutral" site, so I think he'll take it. My opinion? You run each other pretty close, if you'd have thrown some more rhymes in there it'd have been yours for certain. |
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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King Jehu
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...says the guy with the wins |
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Insert something rappy here
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BiggStankDogg
Veteran Joined: 22 May 2004 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 1832 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: #7 Stats: 35-8-0 Form: LLWWWW |
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Yeah, I was gonna tweak it a bit, but I just got a shitload of work dumped on me, and I had no time for touch up. Still, I have a feeling if I dropped the golden verse on that ass, I'd still lose because we're at the station waiting for the Dickride Express to drop off the voters. I think you're right -Orion-, it could have been more lyrical... Any other feedback?...
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BRIGGZY
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i didnt wanna flood the battle n yeah im from Stage Three but i liked this drop..flow was tight nice punchlines and humor was crazy..Should be a hot battle Flawless got skills too so good 2 c who takes this 1 PeAce |
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Cuba
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Yeh it was a nice contrast in styles...BSD had a simpler verse but he came hard, his opponent had a dope verse 2 tho, so that cud go either way... But its nice to see someone with the ability to punch without having complexity around it...since a lot of people try to be more complex with there shit, its nice to see a difference... |
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20theTruth
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yeh itz ben sed but da verse did seem Alot simpler but the punchez and humor overriden that ish so even tho rhymez aint at onpoint da fuckin wordplay and str8 up jokez had me crackkin up so yeh ima hafta hand to u 1upz payce1 - 20 ´´the truth´´
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