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    Posted: 17 November 2014 at 10:27pm
Wassup guys. I haven't posted a legit song in a while. This started as a freestyle and became much more intricate as it developed and now, I plan to make it an audio for the last track of my next mixtape. I hope you enjoy it and it does have my typical "bars carry over" format. Enjoy and I welcome any feedback good or bad. as of now, it doesnt have a hook, but i seperated it at parts for ease of reading.
Quite a few references that you guys won't get until I do expos and release my next mixtape. But for the record, my new tape is called "Now or Never"
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 THE PETITION

So truck it. Cuz they all probably expecting me to come in here 
With some soft ass love song bout how my heart was just blunted
To be honest I love it. The stereotype of hearin' Mission,
Poetry through lyricism hear it and you know I stunted
Spend time without a budget but the way my spirit's living
Even with a clearer vision I can't see defeat coming, So
For the ones who think I'm only good for crying bout girls
Hold up, I mean crying bout A girl since I've basically thrown
Aside any other ones in the world...
For the ones who say I'm tryna be that Tuscan leather nigga
With the funny looking smile and rap/R&B mixture I say
F. U. K. back up and insert a C before the K and then just
Add a U right after. I make a scene but I'm no actor
A great rapper and the fact that I'm white is no factor
Call me stupid, but if you think I'ma respond to that 
Or pick up the phone and answer I still wouldn't be
Able to hear you over the laughter. Of success
Spent yesterday at church recording with my crew
In a sound booth with 10 people watching but thats
What you gotta do. When you on a come up without
The elevator so you take the stairs and I ain't 
Never taken back when people standing there just staring
I see it as one chance to prove I'm worth 20 dollars
And if I ever drop an album I don't know what I'll call it
Prolly something with a reference to the struggle I been through
All the places like all those 22 states that I been to, I been
True to my faith with no debate you know I'm straight I got a
Concert planned for February if you carry on without a 
Thought to how you really feel you're really just pretending maybe
I'm wrong for telling all of ya'll my dreams and my pretentions and 
In case I failed to mention that I love her till my death then let me
Say it for the record not for guiness but remembrence, the
Message is so deep it needs an expedition just to get it, I might
Look like I'm demented but I simply can't accept that she don't
Wanna let it happen...

And I got a track with that exact title...
Wave goodbye as if I'm witnessing the last tidal,
New season but the players ain't that different we still
With the same biz that made the realest spitters distant
Bars for days but all the liquor has influenced how we say them
Used to be about the women now it's just bout how we bang em
Oh shiz, mission just got real the heck are you kids gonna do about it?
Nothin. I mean heck you can't even vote on a quality audio battle
With actual skills and punches you lost your touch I'm wondering
How you ever found it, and I'm confounded by
When you tell me that "there's always someone better" alot
Then I guess if Ima a find the one for me I'll have to be wedded to GOD!
And that exclamation point was absolutely necessary 
Truck if I'm an emissary all this crap's a mess to carry
Left for dead and buried in the rubble of my ashes cuz I
Burned my only chances of ever having Savannah, Can I
Just be real with all of you for a second, I made a
Track for her and told her everything I felt and then I
Made it clear that I meant it, cuz I sent it in an email titled
"Just Read" and said "just listen", Rest of that day I was restless, 
Waited for a day got on my email just to check it then I
Saw she had replied and better know I quickly read it, when it
Opened first thing that I saw was I DONT HAvE ANY then I
Stopped and backtracked started in from the beginning and
You can guess it already, said we can still be friends, I made my
Life an open book and she just wrote THE END, just wow....

She said that she ain't feeling nothin for me, said she supports my dream
But dreams ain't getting nothin for me, cuz she was my dream
And still is, still friends but to tell the truth we never really were
I mean I'd try to start a convo bout what happened in her week but
All it ever ended up as was us talking about me...
Who's to blame, when neither party makes an effort, 
I'm kinda wondering if maybe she had someone else who left her
And I don't mean her dad, I mean a boy she had a thing for
But when she thought she gave enough he'd always seem to need more
Maybe it was just a guy she liked in junior high
And things just didn't work out, and then she felt crucified
And I'm just guessing but if you just give it time it might make
Sense why she's been living life so overprotective. Then
I come along acting so overaggressive and just bombard
Her with my feelings and these awkward confessions
But pressure is on my head to make my words worth every letter
Cuz I know that she's the one and I will never find one better
Time and conversation girl I already said it cuz thats
All it really takes to make and build a lasting friendship so
Im asking you right now, to let go of the past, and
Screw that other dude cuz he ain't nothin next to Zach
I give you my word when I say I'll never let you go,you need
Support? I'll drop the mic and light the torch as we go forward

Just stop, right now, don't judge me and don't analyze
I'm more mature I care bout you a whole lot more than half the guys
They want your heart and body but you have my love at half the price
Throwing out suggestions like conventions just to pass the time
Im not asking you to love me, at least not yet
I just want you to open up and let me help you were you're hurtin'
You're too quiet and behind that smile I can see a pain that
You're tryin' to suppress but your attempt just isn't workin
I'm not clueless, not stupid, just young and overdriven
I just wish you understood the reason that I'm even in it
I don't want to take from you, I want to give you all I can
If you ask I'll do whatever it takes to make it happen
I'm only asking that you make a decision to build a friendship
Nothing more if you don't want but nothing less then what you're best is

I'm not just here to flatter you, wait, hey, are you listenin?
Ok, I was just checkin' in the case your mind was driftin'
Drums beating in my heart and that's just word to your sister
It's funny how after you burned me you went and bandaged my blister
The irony of it all I start to wonder where my faith is, funny
How I'm playing bass now and Im getting back to basics
So I hope you'll take my offer cuz I'm really tired of waiting for
A way into your life when every other route is taken. don't
Leave me in the rearview, don't let fear control you
Open a new chapter and quit trippin off the old you
I ain't even gotta say I love cuz I already told you
Guarantee I'll do for you the things that others wont do
And I was gonna wait to tell you how I felt until we hit December
But I simply couldn't wait because, It now, or never

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Definitely felt an audio vibe to this. Long as fuck but was a decent read. I think this piece could a been killer with more intricate vocabulary and a more complex scheme. Still was good and flowed well.
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Have to agree with dizzle this defo felt like it was written for audio and reading it doesn't do it justice looking at it on the page some parts don't seem to rhyme for me maybe it was the way in which it was typed I'm not sure also because u write this in your own accent I think it would probs come across better when heard it defo had a killer flow and a crazy rhyme scheme I really liked this piece good feeling good imagery well written really good drop man enjoyed it keep it up
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thanks for the feed guys. its definitely better as audio, im actually waiting to see if elite will make me a beat for it. cuz i have an idea of how it will sound and itll be crazy
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uppin for feedback and cuz i spent 5 hours on this shit
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Good job here mission. This flowed really well allthrouout.i liked the topic. Usaully someone u love is always something everyone can relate to to feel your rhymes so thumbs up on that. But good job. Keep it. This was some good shit.
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good looks slips. this is gonna get editd some more and be an audio track for my next tape
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Even if this were meant for audio, you could've came with better material.. I found that alot of your verse had decent flow despite it being a little all over the place.. The thing that really hurt this piece was all the forced rhymes.
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thanks Evp, well the rhymes dont sound forced if u hear the flow i have for it, but as usual my flow doesnt always translate well to text, im trying lol
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long drop here, but this was good, keep it up mission, i like your style and lyrics.
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good looks bro. cant wait to put this to audio
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