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Mission
Standard Member Joined: 13 September 2014 Location: Madison. MS Status: Offline Points: 2291 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 8-9-1 Form: LWLLLN |
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Posted: 17 November 2014 at 10:27pm |
Wassup guys. I haven't posted a legit song in a while. This started as a freestyle and became much more intricate as it developed and now, I plan to make it an audio for the last track of my next mixtape. I hope you enjoy it and it does have my typical "bars carry over" format. Enjoy and I welcome any feedback good or bad. as of now, it doesnt have a hook, but i seperated it at parts for ease of reading.
Quite a few references that you guys won't get until I do expos and release my next mixtape. But for the record, my new tape is called "Now or Never"
-------------------- THE PETITION So truck it. Cuz they all probably expecting me to come in here With some soft ass love song bout how my heart was just blunted To be honest I love it. The stereotype of hearin' Mission, Poetry through lyricism hear it and you know I stunted Spend time without a budget but the way my spirit's living Even with a clearer vision I can't see defeat coming, So For the ones who think I'm only good for crying bout girls Hold up, I mean crying bout A girl since I've basically thrown Aside any other ones in the world... For the ones who say I'm tryna be that Tuscan leather nigga With the funny looking smile and rap/R&B mixture I say F. U. K. back up and insert a C before the K and then just Add a U right after. I make a scene but I'm no actor A great rapper and the fact that I'm white is no factor Call me stupid, but if you think I'ma respond to that Or pick up the phone and answer I still wouldn't be Able to hear you over the laughter. Of success Spent yesterday at church recording with my crew In a sound booth with 10 people watching but thats What you gotta do. When you on a come up without The elevator so you take the stairs and I ain't Never taken back when people standing there just staring I see it as one chance to prove I'm worth 20 dollars And if I ever drop an album I don't know what I'll call it Prolly something with a reference to the struggle I been through All the places like all those 22 states that I been to, I been True to my faith with no debate you know I'm straight I got a Concert planned for February if you carry on without a Thought to how you really feel you're really just pretending maybe I'm wrong for telling all of ya'll my dreams and my pretentions and In case I failed to mention that I love her till my death then let me Say it for the record not for guiness but remembrence, the Message is so deep it needs an expedition just to get it, I might Look like I'm demented but I simply can't accept that she don't Wanna let it happen... And I got a track with that exact title... Wave goodbye as if I'm witnessing the last tidal, New season but the players ain't that different we still With the same biz that made the realest spitters distant Bars for days but all the liquor has influenced how we say them Used to be about the women now it's just bout how we bang em Oh shiz, mission just got real the heck are you kids gonna do about it? Nothin. I mean heck you can't even vote on a quality audio battle With actual skills and punches you lost your touch I'm wondering How you ever found it, and I'm confounded by When you tell me that "there's always someone better" alot Then I guess if Ima a find the one for me I'll have to be wedded to GOD! And that exclamation point was absolutely necessary Truck if I'm an emissary all this crap's a mess to carry Left for dead and buried in the rubble of my ashes cuz I Burned my only chances of ever having Savannah, Can I Just be real with all of you for a second, I made a Track for her and told her everything I felt and then I Made it clear that I meant it, cuz I sent it in an email titled "Just Read" and said "just listen", Rest of that day I was restless, Waited for a day got on my email just to check it then I Saw she had replied and better know I quickly read it, when it Opened first thing that I saw was I DONT HAvE ANY then I Stopped and backtracked started in from the beginning and You can guess it already, said we can still be friends, I made my Life an open book and she just wrote THE END, just wow.... She said that she ain't feeling nothin for me, said she supports my dream But dreams ain't getting nothin for me, cuz she was my dream And still is, still friends but to tell the truth we never really were I mean I'd try to start a convo bout what happened in her week but All it ever ended up as was us talking about me... Who's to blame, when neither party makes an effort, I'm kinda wondering if maybe she had someone else who left her And I don't mean her dad, I mean a boy she had a thing for But when she thought she gave enough he'd always seem to need more Maybe it was just a guy she liked in junior high And things just didn't work out, and then she felt crucified And I'm just guessing but if you just give it time it might make Sense why she's been living life so overprotective. Then I come along acting so overaggressive and just bombard Her with my feelings and these awkward confessions But pressure is on my head to make my words worth every letter Cuz I know that she's the one and I will never find one better Time and conversation girl I already said it cuz thats All it really takes to make and build a lasting friendship so Im asking you right now, to let go of the past, and Screw that other dude cuz he ain't nothin next to Zach I give you my word when I say I'll never let you go,you need Support? I'll drop the mic and light the torch as we go forward Just stop, right now, don't judge me and don't analyze I'm more mature I care bout you a whole lot more than half the guys They want your heart and body but you have my love at half the price Throwing out suggestions like conventions just to pass the time Im not asking you to love me, at least not yet I just want you to open up and let me help you were you're hurtin' You're too quiet and behind that smile I can see a pain that You're tryin' to suppress but your attempt just isn't workin I'm not clueless, not stupid, just young and overdriven I just wish you understood the reason that I'm even in it I don't want to take from you, I want to give you all I can If you ask I'll do whatever it takes to make it happen I'm only asking that you make a decision to build a friendship Nothing more if you don't want but nothing less then what you're best is I'm not just here to flatter you, wait, hey, are you listenin? Ok, I was just checkin' in the case your mind was driftin' Drums beating in my heart and that's just word to your sister It's funny how after you burned me you went and bandaged my blister The irony of it all I start to wonder where my faith is, funny How I'm playing bass now and Im getting back to basics So I hope you'll take my offer cuz I'm really tired of waiting for A way into your life when every other route is taken. don't Leave me in the rearview, don't let fear control you Open a new chapter and quit trippin off the old you I ain't even gotta say I love cuz I already told you Guarantee I'll do for you the things that others wont do And I was gonna wait to tell you how I felt until we hit December But I simply couldn't wait because, It now, or never |
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daydizzle89
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Definitely felt an audio vibe to this. Long as fuck but was a decent read. I think this piece could a been killer with more intricate vocabulary and a more complex scheme. Still was good and flowed well.
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Stupendipidous
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Have to agree with dizzle this defo felt like it was written for audio and reading it doesn't do it justice looking at it on the page some parts don't seem to rhyme for me maybe it was the way in which it was typed I'm not sure also because u write this in your own accent I think it would probs come across better when heard it defo had a killer flow and a crazy rhyme scheme I really liked this piece good feeling good imagery well written really good drop man enjoyed it keep it up
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Mission
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thanks for the feed guys. its definitely better as audio, im actually waiting to see if elite will make me a beat for it. cuz i have an idea of how it will sound and itll be crazy
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Mission
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uppin for feedback and cuz i spent 5 hours on this shit
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Slips_138
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Good job here mission. This flowed really well allthrouout.i liked the topic. Usaully someone u love is always something everyone can relate to to feel your rhymes so thumbs up on that. But good job. Keep it. This was some good shit.
Peace. ✌ |
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Mission
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good looks slips. this is gonna get editd some more and be an audio track for my next tape
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E.V.P.
Standard Member Joined: 05 September 2014 Location: Toronto Status: Offline Points: 535 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 7-4-0 Form: WWLLWL |
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Even if this were meant for audio, you could've came with better material.. I found that alot of your verse had decent flow despite it being a little all over the place.. The thing that really hurt this piece was all the forced rhymes.
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Mission
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thanks Evp, well the rhymes dont sound forced if u hear the flow i have for it, but as usual my flow doesnt always translate well to text, im trying lol
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IZIAH
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long drop here, but this was good, keep it up mission, i like your style and lyrics.
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~Insight The Inspired~
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Mission
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good looks bro. cant wait to put this to audio
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