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    Posted: 19 February 2015 at 11:36pm

CHAIN:


I was…

Born with a penchant for being mad petulant 
Pesky with pendants and ornaments to pester men. 
Portable extensions of my ego are irrelevant 
I’m the people’s president whoring for attention. 
Gorgeous, pretentious, of course I am the envy of…
The system hating on them foreigners with pensions. 
Word to my countrymen working for a cup of rum
Back in the jungle in Fords with no suspension. 
Ask a bad bitch if I’m the source of all contention 
That bitch will tell you I’m a sorcerer’s invention. 
Corner store attendant, pass me the aux cord 
Blasting that Pac singing choruses of vengeance. 
Feeling like Suge Knight warring in them trenches
Doing pirouettes in these vortices of tension. 
Never letting lust morph into repentance 
‘cause a sexy slut’s horniness won’t bend him. 
Demented, I court her with porno flick intentions 
Even if she’s 46 in floral printed denim. 
Me, I’m an ox at a porcelain convention
Cops gotta send me to Mordor for detention. 

..war 


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I'm a war monger my style just so hard and putrid...
I'll spark a movement of a bunch of sharks thats crusin'...
Leave heart contusions from sharp intrusions...
Dont start the feuding, and try to rip apart the truth when
I'll leave you EXposed all for my dark amusement!...
I'm so savage exposin' ya souls canvass...
yall are below average cus yall so after this troll magnet...
I'm a fucking legend yall are some known faggots!...
I'm top of my class like I have the jacket with a letter...
I'm a master, fuck a vet, they should practice to get better!...
Little shots at me? Please I'm still alive and kickin'..
I'm the truth speaker you can't deny whats written...
Can't get inside my wisdom I leave no surviving victim...
While liars act like killers for hire until my fire hits em!...
I'm deep with the rhyme while yall  on the steepest decline...
I caught all of you so you might want to keep it in mind...
Bitches in the chat talkin bad bout ILL, how you gonna deny it when
As soon as Scriptz comes back the same cats are getting high again...
Yall some pussies and all of you have been infected...
At least I said it to his face and I bet that he respects it...









 



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I'll give this proper feed tomorrow. This was sick as shit. Chain, that is an insane scheme and Ex your usage of words is dank. Good shit. The concept was sick

Tbc....
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This was a good read... Chains, Your flow was impeccable... really enjoy that about your verse... I have no fucking clue what you were talking about but it flow smoothly and was easy to read... Exo, your verse was almost the opposite of Chains... I understood every thing your were saying but the flow wasn't nearly as flawless. Thats not to saying it was bad, jus that it wasn't as good... Overall tho, this was a cool piece to read
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CHAIN - man its really refreshing to read a verse from you. you know i really dig your style & you put words together, and really just put rhymes together like a motherfucker. thats something I always look for in pieces. lines that rhyme & make me think "damn i wouldnt have thought to put that together". I can count on you for that every drop you give me. The way you hold a multi and beat it to death is impressive. I've done it countless times & it sounds horrible, you have a fluidity to it. definitely something to admire. 

Exo - you're getting more aggressive in your shit. diggin that grimy shit. we both love that grimy gutter shit and it seems your starting to really say fuck it & come to the dark side of writing lol we welcome you ahaha, you're verse was a message really. addressing the site and the recent shit thats been happening. at least activity is up lol, rhymes were put together nicely, straighten legendary writing here. You're last 4 bars are respect, I definitely wanna know about the chat room... 
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This was highly entertaining. I learn from top artists around the globe. It helps my evolution. Props and stay sharp and deadly. AR
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good looks on the replies...much appreciated

CHAIN I'll drop some feed on your verse in a little bit..dope verse man always a pleasure collabin' with ya

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Technically this was on point guys. Don't expect anything less off this collab but you didn't disappoint. Ex your verse was direct and clear, was straight to the point. Where as Chain your was more of a flex verse but they still went nice next to each other. Props, a good read.
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Chain - Another great read on your end. I thought the HG verse ya did definitely had more stand out stuff as far as one liners. But the way you worded everything together, with the follow through lines like envy of, and aux cords bars and still be able to make it smooth takes skill. I thought your vocab, and multi's/internals in general were at a high level in this verse as well. It's always a high quality read on your end. 

Exo - dope stuff on your end as well. I can say the same to you as I said to chain about the high level vocab and multi's and internals that really pushed your verse along well. I love the last few bars you had to close it off on the note about ILL. Troll magnet line was pretty humorous as well. 

The whole collab just had a nice aggressive feel to it. Exo and Chain is definitely a good combination. 
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Chain. Got his own thing going on,  a valuable trait on here


Born with a penchant for being mad petulant 
Pesky with pendants and ornaments to pester men.

Dope flow, the content may be a bit wacky but it sounds
really fresh 


Portable extensions of my ego are irrelevant 
I’m the people’s president whoring for attention. 
Gorgeous, pretentious, of course I am the envy of…
The system hating on them foreigners with pensions. 

Uncut dope section this one, first line is intriguing, 
the whoring attention\gorgeous pretension transition 
worked really well.



Back in the jungle in Fords with no suspension. 
Ask a bad bitch if I’m the source of all contention 
That bitch will tell you I’m a sorcerer’s invention. 
Corner store attendant, pass me the aux cord 

First line was kinda ? 
Next 3 ones was smooth pimpish talk
and another effortless transition. 
Do I see a crazy pattern here?


Blasting that Pac singing choruses of vengeance. 
Feeling like Suge Knight warring in them trenches
Doing pirouettes in these vortices of tension. 
Never letting lust morph into repentance 


Going all directions here, from Pac t to pirouettes,
kinda out there, but still catchy read


‘cause a sexy slut’s horniness won’t bend him. 
Demented, I court her with porno flick intentions 
Even if she’s 46 in floral printed denim. 

LOL, just LOL

Me, I’m an ox at a porcelain convention
Cops gotta send me to Mordor for detention.

Finshed aights



Obviously not a type of verse where you look for one-liners or badass punches. 
I read this more like train-of-thought braggadocio with a good mix of imagery and 
subtle puns. Either way it's some attention grabbing piece of text


Exo continues..

I'm a war monger my style just so hard and putrid...
I'll spark a movement of a bunch of sharks thats crusin'...
Leave heart contusions from sharp intrusions...
Dont start the feuding, and try to rip apart the truth when
I'll leave you EXposed all for my dark amusement!...

Ok section, going in with a bit more hardcore approach..



I'm so savage exposin' ya souls canvass...
yall are below average cus yall so after this troll magnet...
I'm a fucking legend yall are some known faggots!...

pretty concise and str8 to the point on each bar
no fuzz just cussing em out.


I'm top of my class like I have the jacket with a letter...
I'm a master, fuck a vet, they should practice to get better!...
Little shots at me? Please I'm still alive and kickin'..
I'm the truth speaker you can't deny whats written...
Can't get inside my wisdom I leave no surviving victim...
While liars act like killers for hire until my fire hits em!...


But where is the punchline dawg? Boohoo...
Nah on the realz, I prefer clear and consistent bars like 
this over convulted attempts at punches any day.



I'm deep with the rhyme while yall  on the steepest decline...
I caught all of you so you might want to keep it in mind...
Bitches in the chat talkin bad bout ILL, how you gonna deny it when
As soon as Scriptz comes back the same cats are getting high again...
Yall some pussies and all of you have been infected...
At least I said it to his face and I bet that he respects it...


Yup, this was it, it's always entertaing when peeps get called out.
Ending was and unapologetically highlight


A nice collab here no doubt, attacking from 2 different angles.
What strikes me after reading is how easy and uncomplicated you flex your views.
I think noobs and vets both can learn from clarity of the content here.

Success.



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Good to see you dropping chains, I thought that verse was about as good as it gets.. Well written and that flow didn't miss a step... Props man
EXO - Dope verse fam, throwing shots out and holding your spot well. Every thing came off smooth and lots of aggression... Dope shit both of you..
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good looks on all the replies so far much appreciated

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Chain - this was a mistake


Exo- dope verse man. Shit was wild. Aggression multis and punches were on point
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Chain
 
I love how you tackle a topic you actually write about what a war monger does not what they are like to top that off your flow,schemes ,call backs basically everything in your verse is absolutely outstanding grea
 
Exo
 
your writing process is bent on giving out the truth you don't drop nothing irrelevant its all real talk which I respect the flow was dope as well so as your schemes
 
great work from both of you I'd expect no less since the both of you are sick artists props on the collab
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This is another dope piece here man. Your bars are slick bro. Keep it up.
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^^ did you even read it?  Because there is 2 of us.  IZ you should know better than to drop some shitty ass feed like that

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Chain:
That bitch will tell you I’m a sorcerer’s invention.
Corner store attendant, pass me the aux cord
Blasting that Pac singing choruses of vengeance.
Feeling like Suge Knight warring in them trenches
Doing pirouettes in these vortices of tension.
Never letting lust morph into repentance
^^^^^^^^^^^.....dead...flatline. The wording on this was insane, you executed it with perfection bruh. Serious raw heat. Always comin with fresh concepts and delivery of an angle.

Exo:

I'm top of my class like I have the jacket with a letter...
I'm a master, fuck a vet, they should practice to get better!...
Little shots at me? Please I'm still alive and kickin'..
I'm the truth speaker you can't deny whats written...
Can't get inside my wisdom I leave no surviving victim...
While liars act like killers for hire until my fire hits em!...
^^^^^^^^^.....Enjoyed the scheme of this whole section. Slick wording with a 'back hand slap' punchline feel lol plus you touched on a few issues in LA at the moment which was cool...well rounded verse.

Good collabo fellas
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I did read it exo. And I'm on my phone. And for some reason I don't see chains verse
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Born with a penchant for being mad petulant 
Pesky with pendants and ornaments to pester men. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
I don't know how you chose to use these words to
rhyme. Its sick. Defo nice opener.

Portable extensions of my ego are irrelevant 
I’m the people’s president whoring for attention.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Good shit here, I liked the flow that carried from
the first bar.
 
Gorgeous, pretentious, of course I am the envy of…
The system hating on them foreigners with pensions. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
I like when I see  the usage of an extended line. you
made this work here.

Word to my countrymen working for a cup of rum
Back in the jungle in Fords with no suspension. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Nice, I liked the Jungle in Fords with no suspension
Ask a bad bitch if I’m the source of all contention 
That bitch will tell you I’m a sorcerer’s invention. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Lol, I like. You made bitch work in both lines
by filling the front with a rhyme to give it
multi feeling.
 
Corner store attendant, pass me the aux cord 
Blasting that Pac singing choruses of vengeance. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Nice Pac reference.

Feeling like Suge Knight warring in them trenches
Doing pirouettes in these vortices of tension. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
wow, nice way to expand on the previous bars.

 
Never letting lust morph into repentance 
‘cause a sexy slut’s horniness won’t bend him. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Horniness lol. Like the usage of words so far

 
Demented, I court her with porno flick intentions 
Even if she’s 46 in floral printed denim. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
lmfao, floral printed denim. That's sick shit.

 
Me, I’m an ox at a porcelain convention
Cops gotta send me to Mordor for detention. 
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Nice ending.
 
Overall Chain - I read very few drops that you have and this was good as shit. I mean your flow and usage of words is top notch. Some words when I first started to read didn't seem like they would even
rhyme. Defo some good shit here.
 
 
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I'm a war monger my style just so hard and putrid...
I'll spark a movement of a bunch of sharks thats crusin'...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Liked the sharks line. Slick
 
Leave heart contusions from sharp intrusions...
Dont start the feuding, and try to rip apart the truth when
I'll leave you EXposed all for my dark amusement!...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Loving the multis and flow
 
 
I'm so savage exposin' ya souls canvass...
yall are below average cus yall so after this troll magnet...
I'm a fucking legend yall are some known faggots!...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Faggots? are you the same per.... NVMD. Im liking the
multis so far. Good shit brethren
 
I'm top of my class like I have the jacket with a letter...
I'm a master, fuck a vet, they should practice to get better!...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Liked this. slick with that jacket line and letter. Good shit here.
 
Little shots at me? Please I'm still alive and kickin'..
I'm the truth speaker you can't deny whats written...
Can't get inside my wisdom I leave no surviving victim...
While liars act like killers for hire until my fire hits em!...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Damn, liking the internals and end rhymes.
 
I'm deep with the rhyme while yall  on the steepest decline...
I caught all of you so you might want to keep it in mind...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Not feeling the last line. Seemed kind of filler. Still the flow
is untouched
 
Bitches in the chat talkin bad bout ILL, how you gonna deny it when
As soon as Scriptz comes back the same cats are getting high again...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Lol, ehhh. Not a bad line. I was feeling the "HIGH AGAIN" . I think
you could have worded that better of substituted it.
 
Yall some pussies and all of you have been infected...
At least I said it to his face and I bet that he respects it...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Not bad, I think you could have used infected and translated that to the
second line
 
overall Exo- This was a nice piece, your flow was on point and you had some really relevant bars in here. Good shit brothaman.
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Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
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Some savage metaphors in there Chain, Mordor was boss & porcelain convention was styling.

Great internals Exo, come to expect really...always set that standard for yourself. I loved that stuff on Ill, that was sharp.

I pretty much echo Law's thoughts...you're both high quality writers, this didn't feel anywhere near full throttle from either of you but it was eminently readable, which I think says a lot in itself...you just automatically put out high quality material.
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