Open Mic: Miracle Cure

Dark mang. I like dark tho

This was ok axy. A lot better then some of your other rubbish. I think what you need to learn is the pronunciations of proper English vocabulary. Your slants always seem to be forced and that messes the flow up a lot of the times. Its not "Lee-mow" is "Limb-mo". Its a small difference that can affect your flow big time. The story and concepts were all over the place. When you are all over the place with these things you throw the reader off and they usually get uninterested with the verse because there is no direction. What happens when I read this type of work I start questioning everything and I loose focus on the rhymes, the word placements and all of that type of stuff. It bothers me and I want to stop reading. I read through this and think you have the ideas but your English developed enough to drop a solid piece.