Open Mic: e =

i'm an american.
possibly,selfish,fat- an embarrassment.
well. what do YOU Say?
being that there's a dot U.K.
i suppose i could warp my accent- and play the games that You play.

you Brits "got it easy".
this Shit's not that easy. i Bend Rhymes
ten times over.
i Can Drive Sober
but i kinda wanna die,and take along with me?,my Chevy Nova.
so i chug alcohol and drive on the wrong side'a the road,or on the shoulder.
i'm a lyrical soldier.. my American friends callme a robot.
my rhymes. are so hot, my circuitry is overloading
got some plane tickets- the circus show- is coming over..
it's Partially Magic
how my text-styles can cross the Atlantic
and after i leave Britain?- i'll visit the Baltics- per haps Africa.

have u heard enough Self aggrandizing?
why didju Come this far? Close That Web Site Thing..
i guess that's Hip-Hop.
lemme search my calendar for when this Shit Stops!!
uh,
yeah..there's a lot a topics. i usually just pick one and drop it.
politics. Gun Rhymes. drug crimes. &love lives.
pop culture- young rappers- "stunting"- Flaunting Ice.
..if i had money I would Too- i'm "something nice".
..anyway,
This-is-how i Write..
..i red some things Here
alotta good shit- but alotta shite.
all in all: i Like The Site. cuz i like ta type.


Edited by emcee squared - 08 August 2015 at 2:07am

Though I see some potential, you need a lot of improvement. The structure and grammar's all over the place, and I couldn't tell if you were boasting about America or your rap skills. For example, the first stanza's just you taking a couple shots at the UK. This verse would've been more aggressive if you used that theme all the way through. The second stanza's more along the lines of brag swag than you taking shots at the UK. While the third stanza was completely off-topic, it had more substance over the first few bars. I say keep practicing and you could get very far.

thanks as well Geddis.

mvc,
I kind of whipped this up focusing on the rhymes over the content.

I think Brits have an "easier go" at bending rhymes. Not so much taking pot-shots lol.

I wrote this in a British accent, which I'm not bad at tbh. Not great, but not bad.

will try to feed some here next weekend.

JBrenn wrote: wow the ignorance in this is so over whelming.....

Please elaborate.
I guess I assumed that most people here were from UK, but as I look at ppl's locations it seems to be quite a healthy mix.

Is that the ignorance you refer to?
Or something else?

Thanks