Open Mic: Paintings of Truth- IZIAH

I know I haven't been on here for so long... but heres a taste of what I've written... just read my emotions through these heartfelt words.

Paint a picture of a child hood, theres so much grief
all you'll see nobody helping a poor kid with a belief
that someday he'll be a star, nobody cares about him
he's hopeless, cant cope with the stress as everyone doubts him
so he shouts this message, to the heavens above-
"all I want is kindness and the ability to love"
and that's what he's granted, he doesn't realize its a curse too
cuz everybody he trys to help just makes him hurt too
"they'll just burn you"- that's what most people said
"But I can't give up!", "then you'll just be dead"
having conversations with his social workers who hate him
now he's calling this world a bitch, it just degrades him
all this pain from his abuse taints him so he trys his best
now he's depressed, wondering if he can get this shit off his chest
but he knows, if he writes his story and his painful sorrows
that people would understand him, and so he lives for tomorrow

We all go through struggles and pain,
heres a story of kids who almost feel the same
but theres a difference between their crys
one lives... and sadly one dies...

Paint a picture of a child hood, theres so much pain
all you'll see is a girl struggling to live with change
her mom died at 30 years of age, only 6 when she lost her
now she's got to live with a drunk, abusive and rude father
it bothers her so much so as she grows up she cuts her wrists
puts on a fake smile cuz she knows life's such a bitch
she's stuck in this whirlpool of bad depression
now she's getting with so many boys there's no confessions
messing up with them so they start calling her a whore
what they don't know is she just wants love, nothing more
and one day she cuts her wrists so bad she almost dies
her blood in the bathtub filled with sadness and demise
waking up in the hospital she crys with agony and pain
thinking over the distress she believes god's to blame
ashamed of it she cuts and makes sure she relieves the sorrow
and now she's with her mom, she'll never be able to see tomorrow

We all go through struggles and pain,
believe the story of these kids who never feel the same
the boy has to live with the thoughts of her crys
and so he wrote this story of the girl he loved who died...

remember nothing in this world is as it seems...
L.A helped me write, my own struggles helped me become who I am.
I found my voice through lyrics of inspiration.
All I ask is who ever reads this, remember these lyrics,
and follow your dream and don't give up in dark situations...
The light is at the end of the tunnel...
It's up to you to make the choices that shed a glimpse of it..
And spark a hope.

-IZIAH (aka- Insight The Inspired).

Yeah i liked this. Great story telling skills and the rhymes were nice. Had a sort of Plan B feel to it when i spittin it lol.

thanks for the positive feed guys.

sky scrapur- it says "cutting WRISTS" throughout the whole verse. not writs. lol
but thanks for the feed man. apreciate it.

thanks jbrenn, i'm glad you can see my elevation.

Iziah this was a really well written piece. You have many segments in here that stood out to me. Liked the way you ended it. I really enjoyed this. Keep dropping!

thanks guys! i really apreciate it!
i worked hard on this, glad it payed off :)

no problem chain, i'm glad you still read it and fed it.

The storyline was precise that held some interesting content. I myself always enjoy a good story with some raw emotion behind it. I believe everyone already clarified it above, but I only suggest don't be afraid to present some extra detail. The mind is endless. Keep writing scholarly!

thanks again guys, means alot