Open Mic: The Hero Next Door

This was dope scotty filled with multis good transitions an a plot twist all in all a nice read would of liked it a lil bit longer maybe in the begining talk more about what u dove into in the end about how u started the fire in the basement nice to see you dropping opens now. Its been a while since ive had the time to even get on here keep up the good worl sir

oh shit so the firefighter staged the fire? thats crazy. I'm going to over-analyze the message a little bit. I feel, more than ever, shit like this can actually happen lol. with social media being the new gods, people would do anything for recognition and notoriety. I like the crux of the story. but i mostly dug the progression. the unassuming and very ideal first half in directly contrast with the dark unveiling .. then finally the ironic ending ha. pretty cool bro. Rhyming was crisp, imo.

Towards the end your rhythm and multis picked up nice. Flow to me was a little rocky in the beginning but as when i write a text piece, i in my mind create my own "beat" if you will so with text for me to just know the flow and pronunciation of your words is un realistic so can't be to harsh on that. 

Now that was perfectly done...its like reading a very short novel of a multirhyme obsessed author who has a thing increasing the thrill of a plot with everyline...very interesting Scotty, never a dull moment in the whole verse...so real when you read it i even got a bit scared that the fire might kill the hero....and the twist of the plot just had me admiring the creative imagination...picture well painted of a story well told...nice one G

Scotty you actually surprise me when it comes to topicals.  For not posting much you certainly can paint a picture with your words.  Your story telling is pretty on point.  I'd really like for you to post more topicals and to keep getting at it.  When it comes to your rhymes they aren't as bad as I thought they were gonna be.  You proved that in our battle most recently.  If you could find some time keep writing and trying to get that rhyme scheme down.  I feel thats where you need to improve on most is your scheme. I dont know why some people are saying "perfectly done" and sugar coating your nuts.  The story was cool and if you keep writing and working on that scheme you could actually get to a new level.   People need to drop real feed and stop brown nosing..but for real scotty i like your story telling would you be down for a collab?

The end of the this is the best def.

You started off a bit slow and I wasn't really feeling it, I enjoyed that the story was very guided, but in the last half you really picked up the multi's and had better wording. The topic chosen and how it's presented is great, I think if the start had been as strong as the finish it would have been amazing.

Still a good drop.

Exo, I completely agree with you - The irony of which, is that I would actually prefer honest feed.