Open Mic: Airport

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   I'm in an airport right now waiting for my flight, I legit haven't written anything in 5+ years. Let's see how this goes.
In a bar I sit, waiting on wings an' a beer
Sitting with a doll for my daughter, they think that I'm queer
no homo though, nothing wrong with gay sex
but I'm as straight as an arrow, bum love ain't Nep
They say it's been a minute, but I can still flow text
the day I return is the day that we also see some old heads
I swear it looks suspicious, but this happens plenty of times
and now I sit in OM dropping these elementary rhymes
to plenty of guys who know me but don't KNOW me
dudes, my wings are here, fuck this piece, blow me. 

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NepentheZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member ... { 26 } ... Joined: 11 October 2004 Location: Yea..Cake. Man Status: Offline Points: 7727 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-32-1 Form: WWLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote NepentheZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Airport Posted: 01 February 2016 at 10:31pm
	I'm in an airport right now waiting for my flight, I legit haven't written anything in 5+ years. Let's see how this goes. In a bar I sit, waiting on wings an' a beer Sitting with a doll for my daughter, they think that I'm queer no homo though, nothing wrong with gay sex but I'm as straight as an arrow, bum love ain't Nep They say it's been a minute, but I can still flow text the day I return is the day that we also see some old heads I swear it looks suspicious, but this happens plenty of times and now I sit in OM dropping these elementary rhymes to plenty of guys who know me but don't KNOW me dudes, my wings are here, fuck this piece, blow me.
	I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying...

daydizzle89 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote daydizzle89 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 01 February 2016 at 10:34pm
	Bum love aint nep= dead Hahahah nice to shake the rust off

Neek Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Neek Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 01 February 2016 at 10:37pm
	I think the walking paradox was a nice play.. I found the narrative to be surprisingly well done.. at first glance, it reads like some random dude in an airport bar waiting on apps and a pint..but then the random guilt comes into play..and its interesting.. like watching a movie and someone gives a random codes with the instructions 'thisll come in handy some day'... but then at the end..all the homo erotic guilt makes sense as he reveals hes really been in a gay bar this whole time and upon recieving his food he realizes its 2016..its ok to be yourself... even if youre a boy who likes boys. real dramatic piece for your first drop nep metaphor city..you havnt lost a step. :D p.s do you and cal still shower together or nah?
	#Bananas

NepentheZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member ... { 26 } ... Joined: 11 October 2004 Location: Yea..Cake. Man Status: Offline Points: 7727 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-32-1 Form: WWLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote NepentheZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 01 February 2016 at 10:39pm
	Thanks day / Neek. I wouldn't miss a shower without Cal. He soaps me in all the right places.
	I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying...

Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2223 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 01 February 2016 at 11:11pm
	bum love aint nep, lol!! nice quick key bro. not much i can say except that i enjoyed it. drop more!


Nigma Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision	Post Options Post Reply Quote Nigma Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 01 February 2016 at 11:15pm
	First off who the fuck is Cal? lol I enjoyed this for what it was since it was so transparent. Was your first piece in while written to shake off the rust and given an almost accurate depiction of your current life (Bum love bit is still up for debate) This gave insight to your writing style and tendencies. Your style reminds a lot of Cuba, no offence. Had me goin back to check some of your older stuff too. Anyways, I'm happy to see you've taken the initiative to get the rust off, that's the first step towards full blown addiction. Have a safe flight and we'll seeya on the other side.


Cuba Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Cuba Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 02 February 2016 at 7:15pm
	Cal = Calibrizzle aka Calibra. Nep, myself & Cal were in a crew called New Era. We were official. & Nep idolises my swag, so obviously heavily influenced by me. I love how both you & DTK both showed up and just dropped for the sake of it...this was cool, good throw away drop. With your signature style of putting an extra unstressed syllable into a multi that you easily could've reworded to take it out but you didn't coz you wanted that extra syllable like a baller. Haha. Funny how you never really lose your style, even when you aren't mixing in all those super subtle but really clever wordplay/metaphor combos that you used to slot in (pause) Good to see you back man, we have load of stuff going on that you should keep an eye on...dip in & out of (no homo) so to speak.