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Jay Homicide
Standard Member Joined: 11 November 2009 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 1329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-3-0 Form: WWLWWW |
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Posted: 05 April 2016 at 11:10pm |
So you wait until someone leaves to diss them? That's the kinda shit you on boy? I told Neek I wouldn't do this but shit, Lord forgive me...
Day’s on some graphic shit, his violence so damagin’ Kinda shit you might just find from an acid trip He’ll prolly go ahead an’ switch your eyes for a mannequins Use psychic powers to rip your spine out without grabbin’ it Your lungs he’ll fuckin cut open an’ line ‘em with cancer sticks The flesh he’ll stretch an’ leaved lined out as bandages Eye lids he’ll slash ‘em with… Okay, time out We’re now 8 lines in an’ what did we find out? Nothin’. There’s no content there, sure it’ll get a reaction But on the real, who’s readin’ and thinks it’ll happen? See I did that to prove point, nothin’ but a worthless stanza You’ve got an originality problem, and it’s your perfect answer Like, I’ll pick a body part then some weapons I’m efficient wit’ He’s officially reversed the phrase: Same Day, different shit I’m tellin’ your straight, it’s not poppin’ it’s a cheap ploy A decoy to hide a lack of talent, strong words from a weak voice I’ll teach boy, I’m gully with it. You’re the bitch an’ moan type Pat him on the back an’ tell him he did good cos we know he’s a hoe type Cos you got at Chain for sayin’ he’d quit the site… After you quit the site That’s a prime example of exactly why you’re a bitch inside But let’s address that, you were gone for less than a week I mean that alone mentally suggests that you’re weak Fam’ll cop a 40 then I’ll just pour some out for Day Another Hollywood diva, that couldn’t escape the allure of LA Clear to see that you lack commitment to your statements Homie’s just a pussy an’ I’ll convict him on that basis Now, switchin’ to that rape shit… That gave us some questions Like do you constantly hear the words ‘Minors, and danger prevention’ If you go within 10 feet of a school will you get placed in detention Is there a legal requirement to alert the neighbours you’re present For real dude, would you show your friends a fam that piece with pride? Would you expect them to give you dabs, an’ think it’s tight? Course not, so why’d he air it out here? Well from my insight We use the web as an outlet for things we can’t do in our private life So what’re you sayin’ fam? If you have pride in your words Fuck it, print it off an’ put it on display next time you’re at work Otherwise quit cryin’ like a bitch, an’ accept your mistake, kid An’ I’m only gonna do this once, cos that’s enough of the Day wasted |
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daydizzle89
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Slow down bitch boy. I threw shots at the clowns while they were here. I gotch punk bitch. U butthurt and havnt even clowned you yet
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Neek
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Goodness Gracious...
this is why Homi the peoples champ. im cooler than a ac with Dizz but this was wildly ruthless. I know you said one and done. but I think yall tussling would be good. insert praise emoji. |
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#Bananas
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Exoduzt
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DAMN....This might be the hardest I ever saw Jay come to be honest. Especially with all the shit that happened with CHAIN Jay just came in and represented. Much respect for that. Your flow wasn't just more polished than usual it was pretty much flawless. Your flow was always your strong point but this was different. I like how you opened up in the beginning and then flipped it. That was really creative and you executed it nicely, but at the same time came personal and aggressive. Amazing diss verse to be honest. I hope it's not the last one as I would like to see you guys go back and forth.
Dope shit Jay...good to see you posting again
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Nigma
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Just passing through but had to check this out, that Same day, different shit bar was nutty and the piece overall was on point. Strong (relevant) message and crisp delivery. Was calling you a hypocrite with your first few bars, then realized you were clowning me
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Jay Homicide
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Appreciate the feedback dudes, good looking out.
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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I missed this.. Along with a lot of other diss tracks. Don't have the time anymore for a long breakdown
That was dope! |
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#Bananas
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Beans
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yo this was dope Jay. havent read much from you but this was nice. your opening angle was dope . dizzle the homie but this was nice.
stay up
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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Cuba
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Some absolutely brutal shots in here...mixed with the signature approach (you know what I'm gonna say because I say it every time you drop, still fresh). Same day different shit been highlighted but I loved the venom in the next part too, cheap ploy...decoy...strong words from a weak voice. I was like, god damn I wish I could hit just raw/pure like that. Originality problem was dope & going even further back I thought that opening segment was dope as well, really advanced way to diss. Hollywood diva was heavy and had that venom seeping through it. Only bit I thought was a bit off point was calling him a pedo as I don't really think that's true so it lacked that usual air of 'real talk' you have and it came off half hearted to me like you don't really believe it yourself. I did like the shame element though & the closer was basically perfect way to end a diss.
All in all this was pretty high level shit to be honest...you should drop more. |
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intrikit
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"Pat him on the back an’ tell him he did good cos we know he’s a hoe type"
That line was dope. You dropped alot of bars most of it was solid. Definitely a clever diss. |
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Rutter knows best
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This was dirty. Jay. That opening clown just set the tone for the piece and you new it was gonna be brutal.
Hit the nail I the head with the content. Shit that's true always resonates the strongest. That's why this worked so well, This has the perfect balence of plays and personals. You were just talking to him. This is like man vs boy. Your a writers writer jay and fucking dug this. |
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#bananas
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Jay Homicide
Standard Member Joined: 11 November 2009 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 1329 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-3-0 Form: WWLWWW |
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Thanks again for the feed!
I'm hoping to be more active, just depends how much free time I get and how much I feel like writing tbh. Nice that there's a demand for what I do though. |
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nomedic
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Yo
This was fire from start to finish you hit this off from so many angles I was intrigued to see how you put together the concepts to form personals this was fire my fave part was the intro it had that loaded lux vs hollow theme in it lol dope |
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Stalin
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This was a hot diss that weak voice line was killer. I loved how you got real personal with it too, putting the shit up at work. This was a real personal diss. Great shit jay. Good to see you got chain back too, fam.
NLEI!!! |
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+Sick-Witted+
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