Open Mic: Hate If you Feel That

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    Posted: 07 June 2016 at 4:36am
Intent on invention, an incident's my mention,
In debt of deception, never met my reflection,

West Coast LA Reppin, left most Dre Day steppin,
Its a may-day weapon, Pray thay heaven, 
May thy lesson..See then Reckon

What am im seeing right here, smoke clears there's no cheers,
Feel like a Pisano with no beers, Dr. Manhattan there's no years,
You can only be, NO close, or SO near, to this energy here,
A model of communication, while you in a bottle of lubircation,

Could give a fuck less, who sucks and who's sick, I'll judge for myself, 
Keep all your rubricks, I already know who you'll pick,
Some Grudge for the Wealth, 
There's always somebody else,

As of late, Lately it's too late to see, 
But I'm gratefully waiting, 
Pacing,...Statement fully Explainaing,

Then causally walk off like BP, I just laugh when mothafuckas hate me,  




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This is all around dope. I'm still not the one to pick out mistakes! But I am curious if this is supposed to be read slow or if I am just not reading right! I can spit it double I just pause and drag in my own way! Still an inspiration..
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each stanza has a diffrent rhyme scheme and flow. Thx for the feed. 
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