Open Mic: Life - The Grand Show

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Life- The Grand Show


What if I told you this life is a big movie
that's written and directed by men in suits, and news teams?
 Do You think, the Dallas sniper was blown to smithereen?
Just like Bin Ladin was thrown in the sea, which we didn't see?
Now so sensibly, some racist shit "plays out" and we mistake it for real life.
Get pissed and feel hype, then become part of the plot but too anxious to realize.
So we feel like, we should burn our cities and rob our neighbors
while we scream fuck the system, yet do them all a favor.
Too busy being a pawn to realize they fooled ya?
How many people in the states do ya know that died from ebola?
How many people in the states do you know that was killed by ISiS?
Would you believe that the vaccine shot, is actually what conceals the virus
Do you too think like this? Like how we never know who the anti Christ is
but every - time we guess, it's someone that plays the hand that guides us?
Is it weird, conspiracy-theorists are blamed "exaggerated",
yet, every public figure who tried to warn us became assassinated?
Elders reminiscing on wishing for technology to come around,
and now that it's here, all you hear, is how it's clear it's just to dumb us down.
What if I said Iraq was full of oil and our government wants to get a piece
so our gov literally, staged terror attacks, to justify war with the middle east?
would you consider these, thoughts, or sit around and doubt my word?
Life - it's one big show. never role out what sounds absurd...

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first things first..shake that virus.


What if I told you this life is a big movie
that's written and directed by men in suits, and news teams?
Do You think, the Dallas sniper was blown to smithereen?
Just like Bin Ladin was thrown in the sea, which we didn't see?

yeah, im no tinfoil hat super theorist, Self can attest to that..but I found it odd they used a 'robotic bomb' to kill the sniper. definitely caught me as odd.

Now so sensibly, some racist shit "plays out" and we mistake it for real life.
Get pissed and feel hype, then become part of the plot but don't even realize.
So we feel like, we should burn our cities and rob our neighbors
while we scream fuck the system, yet do them all a favor.

interesting take. im following.


Too busy being a pawn to realize they fooled ya?
How many people in the states do ya know that died from ebola?
How many people in the states do you know that was killed by ISiS?
Would you believe that the vaccine shot, is actually what conceals the virus?

this is definitely gettin tinfoily, but not in a cringe fashion. and people get UPSET when I say im ok with the government introducing aids. the world needs population control. and folks wanna use stem cells to live forever and clone themselves and we overcrowded like a mothafucka as is.. but I get the point. the government is not your friend and is intended to be FOR the people. but im just saying...

Do you too think like this? Like how we never know who the anti Christ is
but every - time we guess, it's someone that plays the hand that guides us?
Is it weird, conspiracy-theorists are blamed "exaggerated",
yet, every public figure who tried to warn us became assassinated?

edward snowden still chillin.

Elders reminiscing on wishing for technology to come around,
and now that it's here, all you hear, is how it's clear it's just to dumb us down.
What if I said Iraq was full of oil and our government wants to get a piece
so our gov literally, staged terror attacks, to justify war with the middle east?
would you consider these, thoughts, or sit around and doubt my word?
Life - it's one big show. never role out what sounds absurd...

fair advice.. I definitely give each one a thought. youd really love Self Activates shit. he throws these out every now and again. but I get that everything is agenda based, wether it was planned or is done so after the fact is a bit irrelevant. you just have to question everything fairly, imo. are there crisis actors? maybe? but the crowd these things are meant for are too naive to question your theories as much as they are to question 'reality.'

was a fun piece. I liked the dallas segment probably best.
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Annihilator, I enjoyed this piece alot! The opener really hooked me:

"What if I told you this life is a big movie
that's written and directed by men in suits, and news teams?"
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
When I read this I was like "Oh, shit!" as I knew I was in for
one of these type of pieces (which isn't a bad thing)

And here's another bar that caught my attention that I agree with:

"What if I said Iraq was full of oil and our government wants to get a piece
so our gov literally, staged terror attacks, to justify war with the middle east?"
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Loved this bar right here! I also believe this as well & that is why one of my favorites

Overall, I enjoyed this.

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I like the message and direction you went with here. You need to shy away from using the same word to rhyme with. You clearly are a highly adept writer. I enjoyed this passage regardless. You had a mystique way of approaching the world's issues and our own here in america. You have some good points where you question and challenge the reader to think on a deep scale of the under lying issues of the things plaguing our world. I liked the Dallas sniper bit. The bin Laden bit was nicely worded just wasn't keen on sea/see rhyme scheme. You had some slant rhyming which is ok shows versatility such as the ebola bar. I truly loved the elder/technology/dumb us down bit. That was the highlight for me personally. I am on my phone sorry I can get more into this and break it down. But I enjoyed it. I overlook alot of mishaps for the message your getting across
You will be a force soon enough.
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