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Cuba
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Posted: 09 December 2016 at 10:03pm |
My hibernation is over, bars are awaking Y'all about to witness a star in the making My magnetism the reason those polar's exist A moment of clarity provokes a solar eclipse Going against me? Intergalactic-ally catastrophic My words savage planets and shatter comets Causing travesty to galaxies, disdain for the resistance One determined sentence'll perish an alien existence Y'all crazy and delinquent, criminally inferior Yet lack the conviction to cripple my exterior Only a rhymer? A life sentence I am serving Fooling those who think Mensa's life affirming Yeah it's been an odyssey, getting crossed like a HAL speech But did you see cu-brick when cut like a Stanley? Oscar worthy wordplay, well beyond "jolly good" Your scripts are all poon like you'd written em for Bollywood Plus the Layer Cake is classified like it's craigslist Y'all begging me for tips like a mother fucking vagrant I always kept it real, word is bond, no Connery Like a 9/11 conspiracy, can't comprehend a foe bombing me Go execute a jester if you can't stand for this mockery Y'all words back me up like a mother fucking glossary I stay above your type, like quoting an apostrophe So incisive when I write it's like conducting a lobotomy
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The Inventor
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This was a great piece right here. Love the flow,rhyme schemes,and wordplay.My top two favorite lines were "Like a 9/11 conspiracy,can't comprehend a foe bombing me" and "I stay above your type, like an apastrophe." Great work.
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Sky Scrapur
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“I stay above your type..“ haha so many quotables
I miss battling |
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Lord Puente
Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW |
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"My magnetism the reason those polar's exist A moment of clarity provokes a solar eclipse" One determined sentence'll perish an alien existence" "Like a 9/11 conspiracy, can't comprehend a foe bombing me" "Y'all words back me up like a mother fucking glossary I stay above your type, like quoting an apostrophe So incisive when I write it's like conducting a lobotomy" these are all dope as fuck. all quotables. I didn't particurly care for how this verse started, but solid way to end the verse. really other than the beginning and the intergalactically catastrophic line, I loved the rest. I see you doing mod shit most of the time but never really drop anything. this was dope af, you should start dropping some more fire. |
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Sammy
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well its about time!
cool o.g. swag tone going on here. that magnetism and eclipse line was crazy. Not really much to say as this was like a freestyle. still glad to see u dropping again, boss man. collabo, now!
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alicewonder
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Nice to see a verse from you. 'HAL speech' and 'apostrophe' lines were some highlights. I also enjoyed the 'comet' reference. I loved the smoothness and straightforwardness of this throughout. Looking forward to reading more from you.
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Elite
Superior Member Joined: 16 February 2014 Location: US Status: Offline Points: 3340 Crew: eNtiTy Audio Rank: #4 Stats: 5-0-0 Form: WWWW |
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Tried posting feed twice and my internet kept acting up both times so ill keep this brief.
Stanley kubrick and alien existence bars were hot as fuck. Def the highlights of this one. I spit this entire piece in an Immortal Technique voice/flow, idk why, but it made it all the more sick lmao. Great to see you dropping in the OM again, this shit was raw. Hopefully you keep it up! Would like to see you spit more often. |
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JacksHammeringThem
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I want to reply to that rap, but I can't. Every topic where I try to talk you lock and then threaten to ban me. It's like walking on eggshells around here. I need 20 posts but I'm not sure what I'm supposed to do. I can critique you I guess, but you seem kind of abusive and against criticism. Either way, props for the apostrophe and glossary metaphors. Those were slick.
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SELF ACTIVATE
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This was pretty impressive, man.
I loved the tone of the piece as well as its pacing. It read none relenting. Every line had lyrics -- punch after punch. Some of which were crazy. I always wondered what you were capable of as a writer. Now I know you can hang with the best of us. Nice little exhibition of skill and lyrical prowess. It was a fun read from start-to-finish. Peace. |
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Schematic
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The first 8 sentences were the highlight
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http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/rapper-t-vs-schematic-horrorcore-02_topic45919.html
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spume corrupt
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Was gonna jump on this and reprimand the Schemer for dragging up old shit
But then I saw your 9/11 play Cuba Obviously he is now off the hook and it is your good self who must be subject to said disapproval Quite frankly I’m flabbergasted |
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Cuba
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I would humbly submit making a play out of conspiracy theories & how they persist is somewhat more relevant than making a play out of the event itself...
But I don't need to explain that, obviously. |
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