Open Mic: Syllable surgery

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    Posted: 09 December 2016 at 10:03pm
My hibernation is over, bars are awaking
Y'all about to witness a star in the making
My magnetism the reason those polar's exist
A moment of clarity provokes a solar eclipse
Going against me? Intergalactic-ally catastrophic 
My words savage planets and shatter comets
Causing travesty to galaxies, disdain for the resistance
One determined sentence'll perish an alien existence
Y'all crazy and delinquent, criminally inferior
Yet lack the conviction to cripple my exterior
Only a rhymer? A life sentence I am serving
Fooling those who think Mensa's life affirming
Yeah it's been an odyssey, getting crossed like a HAL speech 
But did you see cu-brick when cut like a Stanley?
Oscar worthy wordplay, well beyond "jolly good"
Your scripts are all poon like you'd written em for Bollywood
Plus the Layer Cake is classified like it's craigslist
Y'all begging me for tips like a mother fucking vagrant
I always kept it real, word is bond, no Connery
Like a 9/11 conspiracy, can't comprehend a foe bombing me
Go execute a jester if you can't stand for this mockery
Y'all words back me up like a mother fucking glossary
I stay above your type, like quoting an apostrophe
So incisive when I write it's like conducting a lobotomy
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote The Inventor Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 December 2016 at 2:06am
This was a great piece right here. Love the flow,rhyme schemes,and wordplay.My top two favorite lines were "Like a 9/11 conspiracy,can't comprehend a foe bombing me" and "I stay above your type, like an apastrophe." Great work.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Sky Scrapur Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 December 2016 at 7:41am
“I stay above your type..“ haha so many quotables

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"My magnetism the reason those polar's exist
A moment of clarity provokes a solar eclipse"
 
"Causing travesty to galaxies, disdain for the resistance
One determined sentence'll perish an alien existence"
 
"Like a 9/11 conspiracy, can't comprehend a foe bombing me"
 
"Y'all words back me up like a mother fucking glossary
I stay above your type, like quoting an apostrophe
So incisive when I write it's like conducting a lobotomy"
 
 
these are all dope as fuck. all quotables.
 
I didn't particurly care for how this verse started, but solid way to end the verse. really other than the beginning and the intergalactically catastrophic line, I loved the rest. I see you doing mod shit most of the time but never really drop anything. this was dope af, you should start dropping some more fire.
 
 
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well its about time!

cool o.g. swag tone going on here. that magnetism and eclipse line was crazy. Not really much to say as this was like a freestyle. still glad to see u dropping again, boss man. collabo, now!


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Nice to see a verse from you. 'HAL speech' and 'apostrophe' lines were some highlights. I also enjoyed the 'comet' reference. I loved the smoothness and straightforwardness of this throughout. Looking forward to reading more from you. 
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Elite Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 11 December 2016 at 9:28pm
Tried posting feed twice and my internet kept acting up both times so ill keep this brief.

Stanley kubrick and alien existence bars were hot as fuck. Def the highlights of this one. I spit this entire piece in an Immortal Technique voice/flow, idk why, but it made it all the more sick lmao.

Great to see you dropping in the OM again, this shit was raw. Hopefully you keep it up! Would like to see you spit more often.
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I want to reply to that rap, but I can't. Every topic where I try to talk you lock and then threaten to ban me. It's like walking on eggshells around here. I need 20 posts but I'm not sure what I'm supposed to do. I can critique you I guess, but you seem kind of abusive and against criticism.

Either way, props for the apostrophe and glossary metaphors. Those were slick.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote SELF ACTIVATE Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 12 December 2016 at 12:04am
This was pretty impressive, man.

I loved the tone of the piece as well as its pacing. It read none relenting. Every line had lyrics -- punch after punch. Some of which were crazy. I always wondered what you were capable of as a writer. Now I know you can hang with the best of us. Nice little exhibition of skill and lyrical prowess. It was a fun read from start-to-finish. Peace.
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The first 8 sentences were the highlight
http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/rapper-t-vs-schematic-horrorcore-02_topic45919.html
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Was gonna jump on this and reprimand the Schemer for dragging up old shit
But then I saw your 9/11 play Cuba
Obviously he is now off the hook and it is your good self who must be subject to said disapproval
Quite frankly I’m flabbergasted

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Cuba Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 28 February 2018 at 10:04pm
I would humbly submit making a play out of conspiracy theories & how they persist is somewhat more relevant than making a play out of the event itself...

But I don't need to explain that, obviously.
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