Open Mic: Survive the Fire

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    Posted: 03 January 2017 at 1:38am
I was a crumbled up, half burnt, disregarded throw away,
Told to overcome, readapt, self assess and grow today,
You'd find the old me neck deep in needles & poor judgement calls,
Using massive failures to pick myself up as others fall,
Addicted to pin my sorrows on those who stuck around me,
I was desolate like a game of hide and seek ended without me,
It was certain I yearned to need & receive love from one another,
Others laughed & split like a magic trick; They never made it past the cover,
But nobody reads when the light's out or grieves when it's right now,
My decisions stand impaired like driving after a night out,
Could anyone save me? Not a chance to see the sun rise,
The devil as the driver screaming "This is where fun dies,"
Shoot it up, arm extended, clinch your fist; Flow is strong,
Pack your bags to move along & deep inside you know it's wrong,
Conscious bothers me to ask the names of angels I have killed,
The faceless victims of my passion past & present thrills,
When will I think about my family & how I end up in their prayers,
When will I think about my wife & her pain of equal shares,
Why do we only know right when we've seen wrong transpire?,
Why are the weakest people tempted by the strongest desires?,
I'll sit upon my perch and first my family will know,
How a nurse can cure the pain the but agony will grow,
With a letter how it hurts & they'll never understand,
How I'm in a better place with a taste of sun & sand,
Then I see them on a knoll staring with a tired face,
So I'll toss the notice slowly into the fire place,
Reaching the bottom, an empty whiskey; Ease to sleep, nobody with me,
Begin to climb through tired times, Survive the fire, however risky,
Embrace the life you're gifted and the places you may drift to,
A saving grace will lift you from obstacles you twist through.

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first drop i've read from you homie and it got depth , real deep
easy to read kept me flowing with it the whole way threw


Then I see them on a knoll staring with a tired face,
So I'll toss the notice slowly into the fire place,
Reaching the bottom, an empty whiskey; Ease to sleep, nobody with me,
Begin to climb through tired times, Survive the fire, however risky,
Embrace the life you're gifted and the places you may drift to,
A saving grace will lift you from obstacles you twist through.


^^^^ that ending tho,, bro you got some skills
keep it up

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When will I think about my family & how I end up in their prayers,
When will I think about my wife & her pain of equal shares,
Why do we only know right when we've seen wrong transpire?,
Why are the weakest people tempted by the strongest desires?,

^^That was dope as fuck....  I love the flow and set up on them lines....  Good imagery and a hard landing..... great work.....


Reaching the bottom, an empty whiskey; Ease to sleep, nobody with me,
Begin to climb through tired times, Survive the fire, however risky,
Embrace the life you're gifted and the places you may drift to,
A saving grace will lift you from obstacles you twist through.

^^A dope ending as well....  nice imagery again..... Flow was on point, and wording was nice....


Overall this piece started off pretty slow, but picked up a lot.....  Turned out to be a pretty raw drop..... Other then the verse you've done for our collab this is the only other thing I've seen from you, and I've like what I've seen so far...... Can't wait til you get your post count up so I can see your skills on the battlefield..... You most definately have potential of becoming a good asset here on L.A......  Good drop and I'm looking forward to seeing more from you.......
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Thanks fellas
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