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Jaz-Cat 
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 Topic: Trailblazer (keystyle session 2)Posted: 27 February 2017 at 6:26pm |
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Off da top, no mistakes niggas. Let's do it
Grew up wit da fam in Africa, I left da trailblazer... Kickin' em vipers like them thefts snatched nail glazers... Whispers tunin' us to be prepped flat sail pacers... Minds pulled in deep-sea limits, slept da frail vapors... Jaz-Cat finna bump da flips... Protect ya noodles 'fore da heat clutched da bricks... Seen niggaz grab levi's up, James Brown on 'em hotties... Where I'm from wit pen, we ain't clowned on 'em shotties... Once got slashed 'round da bag, coldness crept up... Peeps finna checked da ice knowin' da boldness stepped up... Ol' chess checked up as we da OGs, goldness repped up... Popped, da "crimson juice" streamed, da whole mess blessed us... Olá amigos, que de fazendo in da streets? I ain't Dumbledore... Kids ain't spoiled wit things they cry and mumble fo'... Whuppin' bars wit ma cousins, da spirit I been fightin' fo'... Been down under da sirens fo' ma life in '94... Mind transfused wit reflections like Einstein, dawg... Banged da spot up, we blazin' da trail of Heisenberg... Trailblazers slayed da zone... Snacks in breads like you was in da crib stayed at home... Da breeze finna swung da callin' like you played alone... Some chica frontin' packs wit ya, her strings laid ya bone... Hiphip hop back in da packs, we rolling... Some niggaz finna 411 da spots like his wife been stolen... Stampede on 'em trails we blazed up, peeps blend they pen... Yellowbone African I once been, sent back in 2010... Ain't quittin' when death finna snap on me... Like I was blessed to stand up and make ma fam say "That homie"... I'ma bounce, keystyle off, trailblazer Old-school |
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Posted: 28 February 2017 at 9:16pm |
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I am certainly from the old school. I grew up on artists like cool moe dee, Rakim, MC Lyte, Public Enemy, Fat Boys, etc. . .
heres the thing. I like listening to old school rap because it brings back a sense of nostalgia. Almost like revisiting my childhood. . . but what you give us isnt even old school Old School rap used to be about positivity. The message for kids was to stay in school. Get educated. Even weed was wack as far as rappers were concerned back in the day. It was uplifting, and if aggressive, it wasn't about popping caps and killing people. regardless, old school needs to be respected as it laid the foundation. But it also needs to be left in the past. modern rhyming techniques are far superior to anything that was old school and people should be in a forward progressing motion. Not falling back on played rhyme schemes and mindless content just to keep their dream of being an 80's B-boy or a 90's gangta rapper alive. Respecting and paying tribute to an era is one thing, not moving beyond it is another. Blend it and let it influence your style. . because i promise, your not going to bring it back lol pzzz
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Posted: 28 February 2017 at 10:42pm |
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I don't think your dumb,I typed you are mute only.. Anyways this was heaps better than your last piece for me,directed well too,the vibe to be truthful had more aggression attached also,and gave this verse a gritty and edgy feel,still not a fan of your broken words/display though,but hey es Lo que es,overall I liked it as the disses were slightly better here and aimed,your contents were decent via them being current,you vocab is also in that realm to be honest (when the swagger is ignored,my opinion only there),the thing is I feel this style of text breaks flow,which in turn dampens the read from being fluid,as it cause a reader to concentrate that bit harder for no extra gains,all in all an enjoyable read..peace. ..peace. |
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