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Goryo.
Groupie Joined: 28 June 2016 Status: Offline Points: 431 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-0 Form: LWLWLW |
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Posted: 20 March 2017 at 2:18pm |
Quick rust shaking punchy glory glory hallelujah bullshit. Might re-do sometime but yeah, I'll hit you all back with feed since I'm active again on this. Beyond a measurement, you ain't reachin my height fools A sick animal, there ain't a 'vet' with the right tools I flow like Vesuvius, spit the groovy shit Or bury clowns underground, recreate the movie 'It' Don't be dubious, dudes got heads like boulders n hard necks Till they see 'Gore on fire' like a smouldering car wreck Assuring you faggot bitches your luck'll be gone quick Dodge the heart break, kid, like you're duckin a Shawn kick I'm fuckin a blonde bitch, and seeing she's getting bored 'I'm tryin my best here, the fuck are you fretting for!?' Pulls out the 50 Shades, askin 'do me in this way' I choked her to death and now she truly is 'Miss Grey' No choice in the matter here, you gotta respect Gory Jumpin from droppin heat to ridiculous sex stories Don't care if a vet's strong, releasing a flex song Guns are under your pillow the way your 'pieces get slept on'
Edited by Goryo. - 20 March 2017 at 2:36pm |
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SELF ACTIVATE
Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
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Lol
My type of shit bro. You had a little bit of every thing in this joint: technique, punches, and comedy. The content was wild and random and your flex prowess were on full display. Not the most lyrical I ever seen you drop, but still entertaining and worthy of a read and some feed. Good shit Gor'. I fucks wit it. Peace... |
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Lord Puente
Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW |
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bro, this was a nice drop, I like the rhyme schemes you have done here and you had a lot of dope lines in here, this was really dope. im glad to see you back on the site, you were really the only other member I followed from when we joined, me you and a few others joined all within the same month or so. I also have to agree with self on that this is the best that ive read from you, so you've def improved since when you first joined. keep writing.
also now that your back, not only would I like to see more drops from you, but also you putting your skill and knowledge to use by providing others with feedback. we all got to eat. id also like to see you try to cross over to audio and do both audio and text drops, as I think youll find success with both.
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Goryo.
Groupie Joined: 28 June 2016 Status: Offline Points: 431 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-0 Form: LWLWLW |
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Thanks for the feed guys. Lord, good to see you doing your bit. Don't worry as long as I'm active I'll be leaving steady feed. As far as audio is concerned I have no intention to do any, used to do some like 10 years ago but it just wasn't worth the effort for me.
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iLL ScriptureZ
Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW |
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Beyond a measurement, you ain't reachin my height fools A sick animal, there ain't a 'vet' with the right tools I flow like Vesuvius, spit the groovy shit Or bury clowns underground, recreate the movie 'It' Nice start to the piece. I'm diggin it so far. Not to be a dick but I vaguely remember your other pieces but so far I'm liking what I am reading. Don't be dubious, dudes got heads like boulders n hard necks Till they see 'Gore on fire' like a smouldering car wreck Assuring you faggot bitches your luck'll be gone quick Dodge the heart break, kid, like you're duckin a Shawn kick I'm fuckin a blonde bitch, and seeing she's getting bored 'I'm tryin my best here, the fuck are you fretting for!?' Still consistent with the opener. I thought the gettin' bored line was hella funny. I wished the second bar of the sequence was harder. Pulls out the 50 Shades, askin 'do me in this way' I choked her to death and now she truly is 'Miss Grey' No choice in the matter here, you gotta respect Gory Jumpin from droppin heat to ridiculous sex stories Don't care if a vet's strong, releasing a flex song Guns are under your pillow the way your 'pieces get slept on' That Miss grey line was toughhhhhh. I liked the closer as well. Nice simple, strong piece here. I have no real critique other than the one mentioned above. Solid work here
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