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Lord Puente
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Posted: 20 April 2017 at 4:25am |
https://soundcloud.com/user37035975/kotam-modest [KOTAM] - Modest. im a rap god bustin' outta Asgard coming at you raw like im fucking with the mask off kill your whole squad, im more beast than a sasquatch tearin' off your jaw, you've already spit your last vox I be writing fire like im striking on a matchbox since i was a child, buried kids in the sandbox quickly cut your throat, hide your body like you a mascot leaving pussies bloodied these rappers forgot their tampons --------- supreme regime, half human half machine, out swim ya, while im swimmin' upstream and im known to lower self esteem pissin' off kids in this LA latrine you know i spit it hot, gonna need sunscreen droppin' bigger bombs than mister Trumps seen weve been cutting down the crop and I rose as the cream then selected the rest as my team ------------------ I stand behind my bars without prison in sight yall be sugar coated, rapper's delight and its looking like its 'bout lunch time yall lookin' scrumptious, (I) gonna need a glass of white wine sprinkle some sea salt and a tad of dried thyme add the butter and the pepper freshly grind roast ya up and I quickly get to dine throw that bowl up like its field goal time if im coolin' on the street best believe I got that heat if im squaring these m c's its wit my genius energy ive been bearing Albert E's flows at least a century aint a single better than me in recent memories my squad is made of stars, neek, cuba and Lord P yall be walkin' while we runin the site's audio scene adios, sayonara, foes fall, hasta manana el latino de Habana with dreams Americana -------------
Edited by Lord Puente - 20 April 2017 at 4:30am |
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Sammy
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lmao! this was entertaining as fuck, son! reminds me of old school eminem with the different adlib personality. lyrics dope. if i had to give any type of constructive thoughts its enunciation. I suffer from the exact same thing, so we actually on the same boat. when ur syllables are in quick succession, the words tend to slurr; like it wasn't clear. other than that dope addition tot he kotam. and way to bring the audio side back, puta!
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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Fml. Had feed. Pressed clear form. Lost it all.
Tldr version: dope, enunciation could some work as Sammy said. Voice fit beat really well. |
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#Bananas
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Lord Puente
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Thanks for it the feedback fellas. And endeavor, you can't just go around saying that on all your feeds, people catch on..
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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This is the first time, you deviant. Mostly I say posted from mobile.
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#Bananas
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rhetorical
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hahah this shit was dope fam. loved all the random singing in between verses, some dope bars, good flow. Yea, i can hear a few spots where enunciation suffered, but the lyrics helped ya out there. good execution and a nice presence bro. . just a really fun overall listen.
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Slip
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This was actually pretty dope you did a deadly job on the mix #replayvalue
Kind of reminded me of Mad Child a little bit,, nice drop |
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See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so warn the mother fucking people |
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Lord Puente
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@rhet, yea this ended up being a fun track to record. Decided to have some fun with all the adlibs and voices. Thanks for the feed man, appreciate it.
@slip, I'm not even good at mixing lol, I rely on having a good recording lol. This has a a million pieces to intro and outro. Had bunch of gaps in it and I went back and started filling them up. Appreciate the listen and feed. Glad y'all enjoyed it! Hope to see y'all in the kotam this month or next ! |
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Kairo
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You already know how I feel about this one. I think this is one of, if not the, best audio you've sent me. So much swag, aggression, and bravado. Killlllled it. I agree with Sammy, the only thing I'd say is work on your enunciation in some parts. Everything else is gold.
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Cuba
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Lmao...you are a fucking hero bro. For real. You seem to step your game up everytime. This was awesome man.
I agree with some of the enunication talk but you had major major pluses in this one. Full of personality and character. Hugely entertaining. Love it. |
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Lord Puente
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appreciate the feed fellas, only hope to keep improving.
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spume corrupt
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Those as libs were dope LP
Flow was fluids Latrine had me lol Sugar coated/ rappers delight was adding that clever thought process I was really feeling the grimey touches in the vocals And Bringing a couple food type bars was reppin the munch you are famed for Never heard you before fam, would be cool to see a polished track from you in its fullness This closed out too soon Keep on it bruv |
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Elite
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You are really comin into your own on the mic. I remember just a couple months ago when you first started steady droppin AMs you were very raw and uncut, but you really are growin as in artist in the way you present yourself on the mic. Youre flow and delivery have really improved ten fold, and your bars are just your bars. You always delivered lyrically.
Overall, this is only another display of how much youre growing. Youre starting to unleash your potential and im anticipating to see where youre at in another couple months. This is one of the better KOTAMS ive heard thus far. Big big props. Peace |
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Lord Puente
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thanks for the feed guys
spume, fuck off, its a three minute song, how much longer you want it to be?!?!?! elite, thanks man, I just gotta keep climbing! you must be about to drop a fire kotam on the last day of the month!
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Deathonađź’Ž
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Ouufff this shit reminds me so much of atmosphere x Eminem x AZ , the beat is fuking mental !!!!! This should easily Pass over 500 likes, old school funky trickster type of beat , y'all went all out with the funny ass small diologs inbtween verses
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Rutter knows best
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This was dope ( Up to about 2.10 then i was just like shut the fuck up Lp ). This week was flex pieces and this was a proper flex piece i gotta give you that you had the a rounded concept going in most lines. Your presence and delivery had character you get your personality across in this. The rhymes weren't that complex and but they were constant and in the right places. My least favorite part was when you went off talking about food again but it wasn't bad or anything. Overall very entertaining. The ad libs gave it an extra kick. Although fatal wound always gonna sound weird. Your best work so far i'd say just by a cunt hair.
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#bananas
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King Jehu
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Señor Bridge
I love that it sounds like you're clearly having fun with this. It was definitely entertaining. The vocals were a bit overloud for me, but it fits the type of verse and delivery. Regarding the enunciation issue people have brought up, here's something more concrete since I'm procrastinating from something important: When you say "kill your whole squad, im more beast than a sasquatch," I think taking out the "I'm" and letting the "squad" part breathe (it's a long syllable, like "raw" in the previous bar) could help the bar flow better. Your brain may not try to choke the end of the bar if you're relaxed enough to let the syllables breathe. You already did it in this line: "quickly cut your throat, hide your body like you a mascot" when you omitted the "you." and in "yall lookin' scrumptious, (I) gonna need a glass of white wine" when you omitted the "I'm" You can rap it as written, but the flow changes and it would have sounded more forced instead of how smooth it sounded. In the second to last bar, I would have started the line later in the bar and taken out "foes fall." Not sure it needs to be there. I believe that anytime you can remove syllables without losing meaning, go for it. |
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Insert something rappy here
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Lord Puente
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Elite, spume, Rutter, Jesus, thank you all for the feedback, much appreciated. I'll focus more on clarity next time, thanks for the advice.
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Lord Puente
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phone auto corrected... don't let your head blow up too quick jehu
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King Jehu
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