Open Mic: ...S'good Dizz...

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I've seen this before being the buddy-buddy type
You know.. choppin' it up in tiny chat somethin' light
Put numbers on ya lady head since you good with money right?
Hold you accountable for the death of ya lovely wife
If this guy flows ether, I don't see it, no blind fold either
What I'm dishin' leave him deeper than Chicago pizza
Keep it Gustavo, old head fuelin', you a fossil D
An artist with a pump & turn ya face to a Picasso piece 
Over that Macho steeze, tired of you actin' Savage
Ya career? I see ya heart failin' as that act is crashin'
You wrestle with bein' 100, I'm keepin' it pure
Its hard for you to relate to the evil & gore
Which is ironic, right? Since you write embracin' "evils core"
Knockin' me 'til you realize I'm the face that answers evils door
The difference between us Dizzy, is night & day 
You talk about doin' shit, I actually take a life away
You ain't 'bout ruthless shit, I actually execute the shit
How you talk 'bout Duzt, looks like you think Ex is cute & shit
...Ahh... I get it! You got some Sworded in you
...Look how a failed abortion did you..
You recycle bars it's a fact, cuz you tried to cut the fat
But even with a decent job you can't afford a Ginsu
You're overlooked cuz all of ya horror shit's skewed
& for the simple fact we can tell you have darker issues
I don't like when spittin' about sons & daughters ensues
What goes around comes around just wait 'til karma gets you
Your child will be raped, taped & shanked slowly with blades
& you're forced to watch their pupils widen as you're cryin'
& their souls have escaped... but that's for another day 
My suspension was suspect, like your obsession with H4ZE
Claimin' somethin' you don't live, both ya directions have strayed
Though you elevated I knew you'd eventually cave 
To the inner you that's not good enough when pens put to page
Bars over everything Dizz, this is what a homi is
I put less effort into this verse than you prolly did
Told me it was key'd on a Molly trip
But a diss from iLL sick enough to make a Nazi sick
You have a flawed weakness & this aint the bomb piece Dizz
Just enough to leave sun burnt like a long beach trip
I'll leave it at that, you not my dawg - eat shit
Run over this little bitch like Todd Heaps kid

#bodybag

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iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: ...S'good Dizz... Posted: 20 April 2017 at 5:45pm
	I've seen this before being the buddy-buddy type You know.. choppin' it up in tiny chat somethin' light Put numbers on ya lady head since you good with money right? Hold you accountable for the death of ya lovely wife If this guy flows ether, I don't see it, no blind fold either What I'm dishin' leave him deeper than Chicago pizza Keep it Gustavo, old head fuelin', you a fossil D An artist with a pump & turn ya face to a Picasso piece Over that Macho steeze, tired of you actin' Savage Ya career? I see ya heart failin' as that act is crashin' You wrestle with bein' 100, I'm keepin' it pure Its hard for you to relate to the evil & gore Which is ironic, right? Since you write embracin' "evils core" Knockin' me 'til you realize I'm the face that answers evils door The difference between us Dizzy, is night & day You talk about doin' shit, I actually take a life away You ain't 'bout ruthless shit, I actually execute the shit How you talk 'bout Duzt, looks like you think Ex is cute & shit ...Ahh... I get it! You got some Sworded in you ...Look how a failed abortion did you.. You recycle bars it's a fact, cuz you tried to cut the fat But even with a decent job you can't afford a Ginsu You're overlooked cuz all of ya horror shit's skewed & for the simple fact we can tell you have darker issues I don't like when spittin' about sons & daughters ensues What goes around comes around just wait 'til karma gets you Your child will be raped, taped & shanked slowly with blades & you're forced to watch their pupils widen as you're cryin' & their souls have escaped... but that's for another day My suspension was suspect, like your obsession with H4ZE Claimin' somethin' you don't live, both ya directions have strayed Though you elevated I knew you'd eventually cave To the inner you that's not good enough when pens put to page Bars over everything Dizz, this is what a homi is I put less effort into this verse than you prolly did Told me it was key'd on a Molly trip But a diss from iLL sick enough to make a Nazi sick You have a flawed weakness & this aint the bomb piece Dizz Just enough to leave sun burnt like a long beach trip I'll leave it at that, you not my dawg - eat shit Run over this little bitch like Todd Heaps kid #bodybag

spume corrupt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote spume corrupt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 20 April 2017 at 6:34pm
	Wow That was a sophisticated grown up response Rhymes, flow everything Dope as fuck considering you obviously threw it together quickly OM back and forth... It's like an adrenaline shot to this place


daydizzle89 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote daydizzle89 Report Post Likes(1) Quote Reply Posted: 20 April 2017 at 6:39pm
	fucksake guy. why so mean man? This is not cool bro. This was basic. Those lines were used on me already. Fuck outta here with this. Im reporting you for offsite personals. You low balled me. Now lets look at this.... f this guy flows ether, I don't see it, no blind fold either What I'm dishin' leave him deeper than Chicago pizza ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ Fucking shit. Dont bring up the deep dish sonz. Keep it Gustavo, old head fuelin', you a fossil D An artist with a pump & turn ya face to a Picasso piece ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ This is dope here. Nice setup and punch. ...Ahh... I get it! You got some Sworded in you ...Look how a failed abortion did you.. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ Fucking nasty shit here. That punch was pretty fucked up Overall this shit was pretty savage. Fact you wrote some new shit on me was defo refreshing. There was a lot of quotable here and the concepts were on point. You still a biter though. Live with it man

Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2223 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 20 April 2017 at 10:33pm
	sure day's piece was controversial but this is what i was hoping would come out of it lol. regardless of "taste" i think as spume said, its a nice shot of adrenaline for the site. onto this verse i fuck with the tone here man. it's like a nigga who knows he's ill (no pun intended) and showing what CAN happen. there's a certain apathetic attitude in this verse, mainly due to the lanugage usage lol. there was a glimps of vile near the end with the "pupil widened" couplet. of course like any diss piece there's wordplays, punches and all that. i really like this. it had that boss feel like "this is a warning. becareful." kind of attitude. good shit, son!


iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 21 April 2017 at 1:31pm
	Appreciate the feedback.. Sammy you hit the nail on the head.

Crimson Juice Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Crimson Juice Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 21 April 2017 at 7:14pm
	Nice to read a reply which i'm sure will be 1 of many,you opened up well here i thought, You came off as sort of calm but meaningful,not forceful but like stay in your place bitch vibe,you had some really good lines within this verse also,which doubled up as concepts in their own right,the dishing/deep/pizza and fossil/fuel/pump,a real nice display of comparison words coupled with wordplay/similes entow,just to name a few, nice touch and quite creative too,plus on the whole it related to Dizzle well,it was on the personal but not damaging side,with a good sprinkle of truth to it in parts,(about his style of writing to highlight just one),a good reply and a solid read for the neutral ..peace.
	"You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance".

The Rap Daemon Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 August 2015 Location: Purgatory Status: Offline Points: 1108 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-14-0 Form: LWLWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote The Rap Daemon Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 22 April 2017 at 12:41am
	Oh my - this was fucking manic! Flow was so damn smooth and aggressive. Tbh - I'm not even gonna bother talking about the technical aspects of this verse because they were all spot on. I've seen a lot of number/money plays but this was done so well. 2nd bar literally had me wanting to hype like in a live battle, and the bar that followed was very good as well with that deep dish Chicago Pizza play. Really great way to just highlight how much you're gonna ruin this guy. That suspect hit as well, hot damn! I'm surprised that a piece of this quality came so quick tbh, and to have little to no filler in the response which many people including myself can easily fall into doing makes this even more of an impressive drop.
	Faggot

Goryo. Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 28 June 2016 Status: Offline Points: 431 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-0 Form: LWLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Goryo. Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 24 April 2017 at 2:57pm
	I was meaning to leave feed on this. First of all, like others have mentioned it didn't have an overly aggressive tone and in this case it made the verse what it was. Had that 'I ain't gonna sweat you' vibe which can be more effective than all guns blazing if executed right, which it was. I see Dizz said it was basic and I agree (to a certain extent) but making something basic and hard hitting at the same time is a skill in itself. It doesn't have to be sprinkled with random wordplay and 8 syllable multis every line. The multis were consistent and and smooth throughout which I was expecting anyway so no issues there. The punchlines were simple and snappy, nothing ostentatious just clean and clear hits. I think the whole thing was well balanced and went up the gears at a good pace. Nothing bad to say about this.

iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 24 April 2017 at 3:13pm
	Thanks for the feedback Crim, Rap, Goryo. I think a lot of the wordplay/personals went over some peoples heads to be honest.