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Who-Is-You?
Groupie Joined: 03 October 2017 Status: Offline Points: 89 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-0-0 Form: WW |
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Posted: 09 October 2017 at 12:23am |
Heard this site's full of "sick writers" .. but before believin it, I wanna see the shit, and be content thinkin it wasn't "dickriders" ... misconstrued. So where ... ?? cos believe me, I swear, I'm being as fair, as can be .. from what I can see, this damned ol freak .. show of LA don't even compare ... Ironically, it's like you're failing geometry. The way y'all honestly confuse writers-block with ya being a square Come here y'all got rules like the law, what an odd coincidence. cos it's like gettin jumped by the pOlice, with all these bars I hit you with. Some you lames rappin bout spraying magazines. Why wouldn't I wanna diss you?? matter fact, be like a disgruntled Times customer, cos you don't really want an issue. Don't mean to reference a recent tragic event cos it's so shitty But you don't wanna take the gamble, keep your gold penny cos you'll bet your happy ass, in the aftermath they'll wonder how one man simply killed so many .. I come thru like them storms. Texas, Florida. Y'all couldn't scatter any faster. Have LA looking like the next place that got hit with a natural disaster ... |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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Mad potential
You wouldn't be able to do this if you didn't have a well developed skill set I reckon you could go in hard on a diss if you really tried Maybe a little on the cheese factor around about the Law part but I can overlook that.... Welcome to LA man keep hitting on us and no doubt you will wake up a giant before too long, This legendary place could use some more people like yourself to help revive it Keep up player |
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Who-Is-You?
Groupie Joined: 03 October 2017 Status: Offline Points: 89 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-0-0 Form: WW |
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Thanks bro
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Absolute Abomination
Standard Member Joined: 15 May 2015 Location: Australia Status: Offline Points: 556 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-3-0 Form: LLWW |
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Seems like your strength is wordplay and maintaining an end-of-the-line rhyme structure. Don't see many internals which really hinders the flow.
Keep at it.
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Show me a fortress and I'll show you a ruin.
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Ness
Newbie Joined: 25 September 2017 Status: Offline Points: 10 |
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@who-is-you? Idealizt???
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