Open Mic: Horrible

Yo AB wat up, I'm seeing some vast improvements in your writing skills
since the last time ive read something from you witch was not recently enjoyed the way you kept the flow nice and smooth was a breeze to read
Also diggin the time period your coming from here to with some decent references,s'all good

I liked this piece here,your flow was solid and made this overall a pacey read,this
was due to in part your line lengths also,i was also feeling your word choices too,
(an art in its own right really),plus when its done right adds an extra layer to a drop,
it resonates depth too so props there,within this piece you had some nice subject
matter,the incorporations/references where old meets new and Mythology meets
Religion,seemed to blend together well,like an option or a alternative route for the
readers preference,and the linear fashion of this verse crafted a time scale for its
progression so the reader stayed on track,plus it was littered with the stamp of
selfhype as well,enjoyed the read worth 7 minutes of anybody time...peace.      

Not that I didn't like something I jus felt like this piece stands out as a big impovement

Thanks Neek. The walk on water line was basically a "I'm inhuman" statement while linking to the myth of Jesus walking on water, staying relevant to Poseidon's seas, saying if I have a flaw I turn it into a strength, and it connects to the iceberg line. I'm sure most or all of that didn't go over your head just explaining my thought process in case you or anyone else missed something in it. I will admit that's my least favourite line too, in terms of how I wrote it. Flow seems off to the rest of the verse given its a long line and the middle (I walk on water) doesn't directly rhyme with anything near it.