Open Mic: Need More Words - WD#3

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   an aquatic legend, whose heart beats as the sea pulsates,
the one who transforms gravel to trenches beneath his full weight,
a concise binary object eons beyond what humanity could make,
as they ran out of words to describe, right before their eyes Lord Puente took shape..
... and god damn he looked great!
The end

Edited by Lord Puente - 26 March 2018 at 2:52am

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Lord Puente Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Lord Puente Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Need More Words - WD#3 Posted: 26 March 2018 at 2:04am
	an aquatic legend, whose heart beats as the sea pulsates, the one who transforms gravel to trenches beneath his full weight, a concise binary object eons beyond what humanity could make, as they ran out of words to describe, right before their eyes Lord Puente took shape.. ... and god damn he looked great! The end Edited by Lord Puente - 26 March 2018 at 2:52am


SELF ACTIVATE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote SELF ACTIVATE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 2:50am
	Well. You did that. Jam-packed the entire glossary of words into only a few lines. It was short. It was sharp. And it was smooth, bro. You are truly an aquatic legend. Somewhere in between the mighty Kraken and the Little Mermaid. Lol. Good shit, LP. I dug it

daydizzle89 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote daydizzle89 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 1:12pm
	This was nice my man. liked how you fit it in 5 bars. Dope work here. Great use of the vocabulary and the flow was shlacky

Neek Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Neek Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 2:20pm
	I am dead at little mermaid tho. he meant youre ariel.. cause you stay over these kids. anywhom. I liked your original ender alot more. cheerio and pip pip to you sir.
	#Bananas

Lord Puente Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Lord Puente Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 3:53pm
	Appreciate the feed fellas


Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2223 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 5:27pm
	all jokes aside, man the strides you've made since a couple years ago is insane. mad props bro. an aquatic legend, whose heart beats as the sea pulsates, dope. so much nuance in this line. all kind of angles you can applied to that. thats on some craftsman shit. not sure if u went into it just kind of flexercising but it came out very precise and clean. the verse utilized all the words in a mere 5 lines but was able to say quite a bit. its ultimately a brag piece, i get it, but the wording and measurement was seamless. nice, shit, foolio


Lord Puente Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Lord Puente Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 5:58pm
	All the words are in the first 3 lines, the extra 2 were for no damn reason.


spume corrupt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote spume corrupt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 March 2018 at 10:46pm
	It was short But I had to laugh at the close up That shit was funny man and made this read enjoyable Lolz still laughing at that swagger fest of a finish Appreciate you didn’t even take this seriously , but in a real nonchalant kinda way you had a little dopeness in there