Open Mic: The size of it (go repeat this)

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    Posted: 25 April 2018 at 12:20am
If I aim for the heart, bet the full blade gone follow me there
All day....
Ain’t starting no half measure display with my coronary care 
Fall away....
Chest cavity borrowed a spear looking hollowed and bare
Born this way....
Type depravity so out in front, watch tomorrow appear!
Then you’re dying....
Exit the shoulder blades gliding! One hundred it travels in meters 
Swinging by with....
Seconds after, the sledgehammer slides in unravels ya features 
Try and buy this....
Cos I pledge to provide it, rolling up with a barrel of bleach bitch
I’m dirt defining....
Cos the only way to clean up your act, is to bludgeon you speechless
I'm taking mean of the rack so you can suffer this beating 
Shrug it off as your weakness 
Won’t be nothing like acting or busting a secret 
Thug of a boss reaper drop the rocket thesis 
How to land speech on the top proper! Crush it to pieces 
Spitting chemical novichok like a Russian nutter released it
I'm just a fucking elitist!
Seminal beast of the most venomous creatures 
Putting lives at risk from extreme exposure levels
In @the deepest... 
A war’d up poser General! You dream of owning medals
I play for keepers 
See me ride up in this rap cycle. Just put toes to pedals
Sound ya beepers...
Before shots get fired and I start unloading several
You can call them sleepers 
Kick a bullet through your dome, explode ya temple
now you can own a recess 
Even your sentinel God knows that I’m mental....

And you're like "Holy Jesus"
Tell no lies lies with it, you know you need this

And that's the size of it......So go repeat this

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At first, I struggled with this. I wasn't sure if this was a "rap" drop or a "poetic" drop. I think it was in the delivery. But then, I went back and gave it a second go. I grabbed the delivery and it's different. As you went on, it got better. 

Quote Cos I pledge to provide it, rolling up with a barrel of bleach bitchI’m dirt defining....
Cos the only way to clean up your act, is to bludgeon you speechless
I'm taking mean of the rack so you can suffer this beating 
Shrug it off as your weakness
I really dug that above part. It had a calm but nonchalant grime feel to it.

Quote Spitting chemical novichok like a Russian nutter released it
Dug the fuck outta this.



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Thank you for looking main
Glad you recognised this was different with its delivery,
That’s the way I been enjoying switching it up these days

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Typical Spume. Like ILL said, the delivery and to catch flow was a little difficult at first. I caught it and the progression was dope. Cool little verse with some really dope metaphors.

Kick a bullet through your dome, explode ya temple
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Dope imagery here

Spitting chemical novichok like a Russian nutter released it
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Dope meta imagery

Overall , I enjoyed reading this. Stay spumey wigga


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i like how u paused with the "..." after the short line and then followed it up with the punchline after, i picked up the flow after a couple of reads and it was pretty good bro, overall it was pretty thorough, lookin forward to seeing more of your shit in the future

"A war’d up poser General! You dream of owning medals
I play for keepers 
See me ride up in this rap cycle. Just put toes to pedals"

good imagery here


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