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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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Posted: 25 April 2018 at 12:20am |
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If I aim for the heart, bet the full blade gone follow me there
All day.... Ain’t starting no half measure display with my coronary care Fall away.... Chest cavity borrowed a spear looking hollowed and bare Born this way.... Type depravity so out in front, watch tomorrow appear! Then you’re dying.... Exit the shoulder blades gliding! One hundred it travels in meters Swinging by with.... Seconds after, the sledgehammer slides in unravels ya features Try and buy this.... Cos I pledge to provide it, rolling up with a barrel of bleach bitch I’m dirt defining.... Cos the only way to clean up your act, is to bludgeon you speechless I'm taking mean of the rack so you can suffer this beating Shrug it off as your weakness Won’t be nothing like acting or busting a secret Thug of a boss reaper drop the rocket thesis How to land speech on the top proper! Crush it to pieces Spitting chemical novichok like a Russian nutter released it I'm just a fucking elitist! Seminal beast of the most venomous creatures Putting lives at risk from extreme exposure levels In @the deepest... A war’d up poser General! You dream of owning medals I play for keepers See me ride up in this rap cycle. Just put toes to pedals Sound ya beepers... Before shots get fired and I start unloading several You can call them sleepers Kick a bullet through your dome, explode ya temple now you can own a recess Even your sentinel God knows that I’m mental.... And you're like "Holy Jesus" Tell no lies lies with it, you know you need this And that's the size of it......So go repeat this |
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iLL ScriptureZ
Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW |
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At first, I struggled with this. I wasn't sure if this was a "rap" drop or a "poetic" drop. I think it was in the delivery. But then, I went back and gave it a second go. I grabbed the delivery and it's different. As you went on, it got better.
I really dug that above part. It had a calm but nonchalant grime feel to it.
Dug the fuck outta this. |
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spume corrupt
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Thank you for looking main
Glad you recognised this was different with its delivery, That’s the way I been enjoying switching it up these days |
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daydizzle89
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Typical Spume. Like ILL said, the delivery and to catch flow was a little difficult at first. I caught it and the progression was dope. Cool little verse with some really dope metaphors.
Kick a bullet through your dome, explode ya temple ____________________________________ Dope imagery here Spitting chemical novichok like a Russian nutter released it _________________________________________ Dope meta imagery Overall , I enjoyed reading this. Stay spumey wigga |
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GlockeD
Banned Joined: 27 April 2018 Status: Offline Points: 15 |
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i like how u paused with the "..." after the short line and then followed it up with the punchline after, i picked up the flow after a couple of reads and it was pretty good bro, overall it was pretty thorough, lookin forward to seeing more of your shit in the future
"A war’d up poser General! You dream of owning medals I play for keepers See me ride up in this rap cycle. Just put toes to pedals" good imagery here |
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