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daydizzle89
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Posted: 27 June 2018 at 2:02pm |
Production was ehhhhh That opener was ehhhhhh You have the rhymes but this beat is really forcing you to fuck that flow up. You need to pick better beat selections. You sound monotone and that also fucks the flow up. You tho, better than this other guy. He has basic ass shit and his content is immature. DJ, You need to find a beat that is not as fast. You also need to add some emotion to your voice. Not bad and better than anything barrybonds has put out but i dont want to compare you to barrybonds next time you drop a Audio. No hate here but i think you could have took your time, found a better beat and added some more tone to your voice.
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LagShot
Newbie Joined: 27 June 2018 Location: Your moms house Status: Offline Points: 6 |
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Please explain how my content is "immature"
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Neek
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by asking how your content is immature. |
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#Bananas
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LagShot
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No u
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daydizzle89
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"You're fake like your sneakers" "For you rapping is a chore" "Rapping for me is an open door" ETC ETC ETC All i am saying is that your content isnt developed. "Immature". You lack multis, your flow is choppy as fuck and you are not transitioning your bars with content nor flow. Its lacking any delivery because you sound monotone. Be humble that people are giving you advice.
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XcesE5
Groupie Joined: 23 June 2018 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 20 |
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Yea a lot of this just doesn't feel very developed. Not to sound overly cutting but it was mentioned mostly already. The schemes you're using don't hold a lot of depth and in general the delivery from both just kind've sounds like your talking there isn't much energy behind it. Ya'll saying you're about to start a riot, but sound like your making an order at applebees. The lack of emotion put into this is the big killer, if you're going to keep thing simple in scheme you need to make up the depth somewhere else, and that is only really done through emotion, and really putting yourself in it. Just doesn't feel like you guys did here. |
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Xces
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No worries dude, it takes time and effort to really find that place that works well for you, and I guess "Discover" your voice really. Try to work on getting past the monotone side of things, I've been guilt of this myself in the past also.
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