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iLL ScriptureZ 
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 Topic: Black Tar HeroinPosted: 09 August 2018 at 2:02pm |
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Never seen a verse from you polished & scag Only dope in Syringe is cheap product in bags Snobbish & whack everything honestly trash At first I thought ya drops was a comedy act Saw ya name, sat back & got me a laugh Then I realized you believe you the hottest to rap Waitin’ on the day you keep a concept intact Climb back in the hole where ya mom kept the crack Elementary rhymes… I don’t gotta comment to blast Been lyin’ to yourself I know you dishonest with that You’re guilty of mistruths a convict to lies Locked inside some bars & still can’t process a line Strip searched your style & all I can find… Is the context of ya rhymes has the contents of a crime Infected not as advertised, I’ve read in the fine print A walking contradiction, wet as a dry clit Orthodox stance jabs the left to the eye quick Give’em a halo & wings to go to heaven to fly with Leave you leanin’ like fiends & the italics you write with With no equilibrium can’t find the balance to fight Scriptz Malice in the Palace… callous all night shit Finna get ate like a light salad, scallops & white fish Your talent is like… shit, & too broke to be lit Bazooka expose his chest like he tryna show me his tits Blow him to bits & leave Syringes everywhere Like where he goes for his fix… you ruined, disconnected A proven uncollected loser so I’m shootin’ through Infected Like Daryl’s bow, hypocrite. |
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daydizzle89
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Posted: 09 August 2018 at 2:10pm |
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Never seen a verse from you polished & scag Only dope in Syringe is cheap product in bags Snobbish & whack everything honestly trash At first I thought ya drops was a comedy act ___________________________________  Waitin’ on the day you keep a concept intact Climb back in the hole where ya mom kept the crack Elementary rhymes… I don’t gotta comment to blast Been lyin’ to yourself I know you dishonest with that ______________________________________________  Infected not as advertised, I’ve read in the fine print A walking contradiction, wet as a dry clit Orthodox stance jabs the left to the eye quick Give’em a halo & wings to go to heaven to fly with Leave you leanin’ like fiends & the italics you write with With no equilibrium can’t find the balance to fight Scriptz ___________________________________________________  Bazooka expose his chest like he tryna show me his tits Blow him to bits & leave Syringes everywhere Like where he goes for his fix… you ruined, disconnected A proven uncollected loser so I’m shootin’ through Infected __________________________________________________ 
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The Rap Daemon
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Posted: 09 August 2018 at 2:16pm |
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Opener is a hit out of the park off the bat.
Really liked the prison concepts. Flow was on point throughout, especially => Orthodox stance jabs the left to the eye quick... Rolled off the tongue impeccably well. The killer section of this piece for me was this => Leave you leanin' like fiends & the italics you write with / With no equilibrium can't find the balance to fight Scriptz... That was clever and not just here, but from opener to closer, it went from line-to-line in a naturally aggressive pace. There was no break in the upfront diss that could make any line feel out of place. Top-quality piece. He doesn't deserve feedback and certainly no attention but he had this coming and I enjoyed witnessing this. |
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Lord Puente
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Posted: 10 August 2018 at 2:14am |
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This was crack.... actually, black tar heron.
Straight murder. Best diss verse I read all year. That opener was stoopid id give detailed feed if I wasn’t currently overdosing. |
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daydizzle89
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Posted: 10 August 2018 at 2:54am |
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LP with the subtle OD diss
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 10 August 2018 at 12:57pm |
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Appreciate the time and feed.
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Crimson Juice
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Posted: 11 August 2018 at 12:45pm |
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Damn iLL handing out that ish,this was a well aimed piece,it came off as mean
(and pardon the pun),to the point,i've typed somewhere before here that i find IS antagonising,which to extent i enjoy as it brings extra material to the site via diss/ activity,i feel this verse was better than the last one because its darker in content, and you made him appear as kind of seedy via his alias,which when used coupled up with the w/plays hit hard in my opinion,and to be honest if IS leaves any comm- ent other than "yeah nice verse",then know this piece did its job well and caused him discomfort,and that's probably putting it mildly,this came off as quite clever and thought out,the punches were clean,maybe you should really consider batt- ling,i know you went through a spate recently,maybe it's time to pick up where you left off eh,ripe verse..peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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SupaDupa
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Posted: 12 August 2018 at 11:00am |
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That’s smooth man...wow
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