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iLL ScriptureZ 
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 Topic: Speakin' in TungsPosted: 03 October 2018 at 8:54pm |
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*loosens tie* Smooth nice with the words but he's not writin’em first OD’in on multis… put your life in a verse Do yourself the favor despite what you heard (kill yourself) Smooth is the fresh wax wiped on the hearse This punk a shady bitch who doesn’t live up the way we spit Sit chump, fists slump & split Tung like the snake he is All bite, no venom, you’re the reason that rap dies People like you only believe you have rhymes You bite the bullet so you seem you blast 9’s But never bare arms cuz we’d all see the track lines It’s still real, you’ll need more than hollows to kill iLL Hopin’ you get found cold from swallowin’ chill pills Spoke up for you, said you deserved a second chance A legend that never was doesn’t have a leg to stand It’s the end, amputated & truthfully the shit is a sin To even feel you were ever here like a residual limb Not phantom pain, Smooth all your lines are bumpy Eatin’ lyrics it’s a wonder why you aren’t chunky (we know why) On methadone daily but back lyin’ with that monkey Could’ve been anyone here but still decided on a junkie Explain to me how you're shitty with two lives? Pinstripes on ya corpse after I'm hittin' the bullseye Fuck outta here..
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2smooth
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 9:04pm |
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All bite, no venom, you’re the reason that rap dies
People like you only believe you have rhymes You bite the bullet so you seem you blast 9’s But never bare arms cuz we’d all see the track lines ^ Death. This was filthy af... incredibly dope. Glossolalia! |
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 9:05pm |
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this was hardbody. my favorite part honestly was.. at the snake that he is section.. I was like..ok..walk off homer.. I was waiting for the bat flip..the skip and the wave to the crowd.. instead you gripped the bat tighter and kept swinging. fuck is wrong with you lol.
god damn man. the fucking schemes were so airtight. the phantom limb shit.. was absolutely ridiculous. whole thing read smooth, no pun.. shit was a one sided ass whooping..and I wanted to throw the towel in and I dont even like the guy. |
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#Bananas
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daydizzle89
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 9:32pm |
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Classy BodyBag RIP SMOOTH
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The Law
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 10:23pm |
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 11:00pm |
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Omg...
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#Bananas
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Rutter knows best
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 11:12pm |
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Solid af Ill nice work here.
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#bananas
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 11:16pm |
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Ugh this was dope. I had a bare arms track lines concept in the arsenal just not worded. I’ll delete it now
This was dope though |
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 11:24pm |
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Appreciate the looks on this.
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Posted: 03 October 2018 at 11:45pm |
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I wasn't going to comment but i felt compelled to do so,this was 'icy' and hard
hitting,so much so that i know he felt these punches/flurry,damn this was some cold shit right here,and i guess justified really as i know you've been working hard getting and setting this tournament up,and the running of it,and if anybody has cause to dish out facts via a diss it's you,and to be honest the other reason i popped a quick comment in here is the emotion aspect you gave,im happy to see how it's made you feel due to the way you expressed this piece,it shows you care about your project so props,as i know you'll keep it all on track and flowing... cool verse. |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 04 October 2018 at 10:46am |
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Word Crim
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Posted: 06 October 2018 at 12:40am |
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Split tung like the snake he is......
That vision there was mad dope Rest was green spinach no doubt Popeyes But that snake style must have got em shook like rattle |
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Dntplywelwitothers
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Posted: 07 October 2018 at 3:59am |
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"Split Tung" to the "blast 9's "....I feel like that defiant kid who looked directly at the sun. That shit was nuts on so many levels, it was such a direct hit..."all bite no venom"... "bite the bullet" ... I mean...set up= exquisite...execution = deadly... everything about this was well crafted. Geewillikers man! |
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Posted: 17 October 2018 at 10:11am |
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damn you murdered this piece I thought that the metaphors were very clever and well-thought-out also well-worded and sounded really dope rhyme scream was tight throughout and Dan you just body bag that mother f***** LOL LOL but yeah this was very b nice piece of art indefinitely #BARZ
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