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    Posted: 06 May 2020 at 5:57pm

Gunning for a spot, no I'm not, i'm just joke'in,
My attitude's like... Wot? ..I'm freezing cold and smoking hot,
Smoking pot I never stop for a second.. eases my aggression,
Save for the session, leave em an impresion, of tension,

And angst, lyrical pranks, pulling ranks, fearing no shanks,
Sadist prick you'll get spanks, nice ass bitch... "Ohwhyy!? ..I mean - thanks~!",
locked in a cell, I'm horny as hell, I wake up in the morning-
like what's the spell!? Banging nightmares in my sleep like i'm in a porn'ew,

Im sick, shit there's no need to tell, I'm going mad again ..I'll phone the cops on myself,
Like a fish out of water, turtle lost his shell, I'm fighting imaginary friends again, oh well....
Never mind, put the past behind, focus.. fast forward, dont rewind.. this is my time!
Like a fucking star in the sky bitch I shine, these words are heated, fuck it sniff another line,

Upturning the earth, causes quakes on terra, fears the game there's no end to the letter,
It all gets better when you side-steppa, starts with the self, ..you best checker,
wrecker.. lyrical injecta, ..bloody mary and a few more like her,
Jane.. she drive me insane.. despite her, pass to me and a lighter.

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Liked the assonance here,gave this piece some oomph on reading,and that gusto
helped no ends in the flow department too, the contents (drugs) had this cause &
effect senario etched within,like what the drugs do or don't do When consumed or
not taken, my only gripe is that it wasn't fluent,it read fragmented & here's the thing,
was that a purposeful ploy to convey the erratic nature off drugs?, if so i get it and
then that element would be a cool inclusion,as when on a fueled session to surprise
emotions one day runs into the next pretty quickly, if it wasn't then my gripe would
be justified as this then become a scatty/spatial piece,which would then lessen the
impact of it overal, but as it stands on typing this i'll lean towards it was all part &
parcel and intended, yeah i liked it, like love, it's a subject matter that's been worked
over and done and done,but you cast it from a different slant to keep it fresh still.....
nice read.peace.
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before you can dare make an entrance".
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Neek Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 May 2020 at 8:53pm
I liked the fish/turtle/friends thing. that was pretty cool. kinda sporadic, but free flow is life, I concur.
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