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Prophecy
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Posted: 18 October 2006 at 6:56am |
I haven't really writtin anything like this in a while, it was sort of a topical peice but just lemme know what u guys think, Holla With That Feed....
Wakes me up early in the mornin, puts me out on the street
Doesnt give a damn if im scorched with heat Hasnt got the heart to give me money to eat An every single day the same thing repeats Lookin out the window, seein anger in my face Comes outside and calls me a disgrace Sittin there lookin deep into my eyes I wanted to pull out a knife an take him down by suprise Turns an walks away, I dont make no sounds An what seems like a smile on my face, quickly turns into a frown Was I just clowned? what was holdin it back For heaven sakes I was alone an strapped Could have gave him a cap, right there in the head Watch him hit the ground an just lay there dead Yea the ideas in my head, but i let him walk instead Nobody would have been there to see me fill him with lead But what was holdin me back, I just dont understand Maybe it was the fact, that he was my ol'man (NOT!) Could it be the fact that I had love for my mom Naw she didnt like him either, she would have wanted him gone Man, i dont really know, its like i was struck by cupid An as much as i hated him, i just couldnt do it.... |
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Kay B
Superior Member Joined: 28 June 2005 Location: Watford Status: Offline Points: 9428 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 58-32-0 Form: LLWWWW |
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This was an iight drop, Seeemed more of a poetry peice than a rap though, content was nice could use some work obviously but who'speices cant use abit of patching up here n there...Had nice feeling in and and seemed deep, Overall though it was iight man
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I-kontinue
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Kay B nailed it...
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hanGing
Veteran Not to be Fucked With. Joined: 28 October 2003 Status: Offline Points: 5008 Text Rank: #8 Stats: 30-10-6 Form: NNWLNL |
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makes a change..
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Prophecy
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hehe well thanks for being honest, an Kay B it would sound better if u heard me spit it, but i kno where ur comin from with the poetry thing, its just the way i wrote it, when u hear it, its like totally different :) Uppin for more feed |
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