Open Mic: I just couldnt do it....

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    Posted: 18 October 2006 at 6:56am
I haven't really writtin anything like this in a while, it was sort of a topical peice but just lemme know what u guys think, Holla With That Feed....
 
Wakes me up early in the mornin, puts me out on the street
Doesnt give a damn if im scorched with heat
Hasnt got the heart to give me money to eat
An every single day the same thing repeats
Lookin out the window, seein anger in my face
Comes outside and calls me a disgrace
Sittin there lookin deep into my eyes
I wanted to pull out a knife an take him down by suprise
Turns an walks away, I dont make no sounds
An what seems like a smile on my face, quickly turns into a frown
Was I just clowned? what was holdin it back
For heaven sakes I was alone an strapped
Could have gave him a cap, right there in the head
Watch him hit the ground an just lay there dead
Yea the ideas in my head, but i let him walk instead
Nobody would have been there to see me fill him with lead
But what was holdin me back, I just dont understand
Maybe it was the fact, that he was my ol'man (NOT!)
Could it be the fact that I had love for my mom
Naw she didnt like him either, she would have wanted him gone
Man, i dont really know, its like i was struck by cupid
An as much as i hated him, i just couldnt do it....

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This was an iight drop, Seeemed more of a poetry peice than a rap though, content was nice could use some work obviously but who'speices cant use abit of patching up here n there...Had nice feeling in and and seemed deep, Overall though it was iight man
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Kay B nailed it...
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makes a change.. LOL
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hehe well thanks for being honest, an Kay B it would sound better if u heard me spit it, but i kno where ur comin from with the poetry thing, its just the way i wrote it, when u hear it, its like totally different :)

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