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    Posted: 29 October 2018 at 4:05pm
The battlers are in charge of agreeing upon a topic: Poverty Is A State Of Mind

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I walk pass a pot of gold and take what i can
Left over butts, cut the filter and smoke the fag
Dinner is now a must, i head over to the local trash
grab in deep and get myself some beer soaked snacks
I live in Colorado though, so its easy to get some dope nd hash
Fuck a bowl, all i need is some tinfoil nd dabs
So what if im broke, happiness is all i ever had
You can be sad with boatloads of cash
you can be mad poor and still crash when your family dies
Built an empire where i reside when tragedy smiles
i live on the streets but super happy with life
This cant be, you must be lavishly living in denial
Exactly, you tied success with money that you cant buy though
I have nothing yet everything that would make you suicidal
i live life with no gold
while your driving a Ferrari witha blindfold
Take it all away and we know that your pride broke
I live a lifestyle of survival
If you lost it all, your mind would spiral outta control
Your entitled, Just dont think that im not human
Class warfare is tribal like the drums of music
My primal thoughts are dialed in and im not losing
Im not a mutant nor am i spiteful for you consuming
I just live life broke and success is an illusion 
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She said that 'Poverty Was Honestly A State Of Mind!'
But she had lots of these philosophies when slayed on wine
And it's ironically not lost on me ... she stayed at mine ...
while I worked extra hours just to pull our weight combined!
And though it bothered me, this sophistry, I ain't inclined ...
... to argue once I've gazed inside those hazel eyes!
Yes, she taught me lots of things about embracing life ...
like, you gotta play some hands before they raise the blinds
So the day I lost my job, I said 'Hey babe, it's fine!,
It's just another feature of that Great Design!'
But her frown was deadly thunder, then she found her ex's number
and was down inside his hummer ... without say'n goodbye.

5yrs later. As the days go by, you couldn't say that fate's been kind
Now I'm living up that vagrant life, down at Riverside and Eighty-Five
I saw her once; a face reminding ... me of another place and time
I gestured to her ...... but in my out-stretched palm she placed a dime.

Bitch.

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Dizzle.

I liked the concept you came with here,a tale of the opposite side of the coin
to opulence,you had some nice imagery crackin' also,rummaging through the
dumpster and expressing delight at its contents like it was fine dinning was in
my opinion a cool angle,(food is food at the end of the day),but what struck me
the most was the inner strength to the character here,a guy who's in a bad place
but still smiles through adversity,and moulds the world around him to suite him-
self,and continue to smile in the process,i liked the moral stance that exquisite
items are just a luxury and not a tool to survival,this verse was creative in that it
gave a lot to the reader,just a straight forward no fuss piece..

Rid's.

Yeah your expression on the topics take was also solid here,and your tale was
more in the vein of love/poverty,having it all and then losing it all vibe,& as your
character found out,love alone isn't enough,especially when it's a one sided affair
at that,from opening to end this verse kept me engaged,your certainly a creative
fucker when doing topicals,and it doesn't surprise me anymore seeing you do em
since IC2,and doing them well may i just add,i felt the overall mechanics with in
were ripe really,a twist here and there (especially the ending) was nicely done,a
bit of a heart wrenches via the imagery is what my take is,nice verse.


Overall a solid battle here and definitely closer than your last meeting (BAE),i kiked
both offerings here for different reasons,Rid's with he's machines & story progression,
and in truth slightly more creative in that department also,but Dizzle's verse offered
more via he's character,plus he incorporated a depth via he's contents,cuz it remained linear,it that its centred around the now,(where Rid's had a start middle and end),plus
i felt his tale had a more to draw from engaging story,solid tussle guys..

Vote..Dizzle...peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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Win Dizzle,due to this sitting around,I've now closed and awarded the win to Dizzle..
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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