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    Posted: 21 July 2017 at 9:11pm
Chain snatcher, punchlines that spun day backwards
I slay rappers. You don't want it, soon as I aimed at ya
It was ghosts, we had to hire grave trackers
Just to find a trace, LA turned pulpit for fake actors
Rorschach that brain matter, when did duckin' become a hot trend?
Fight club to night club, these faggots just watch men
Pop tense and flex on text, but they don't wanna trade wit Jay
Avoidin' the call of The Ring like that famous tape
Y'all made mistakes, Introduce ya head to a knee
No sneak disses I'll openly say it, fuck Exo and Beans
Everyone can see me and Cuba have these twats rattled
Pull ya skirts up, time to quit duckin' on rap battles
Clap at you, no applause just pull it and shoot
Loaded chamber, the next bullets for Spume
Break him down, you ain't shit but a paper champ
Jay brings them dope lines, worth my weight in grams
Champ for life? Homie, thats stretchin the truth (please)
How's this champ goin' in, bein' expected to lose? (Weak)
Frail rappers, why're so many champs dodgin' the call?
It's cos I'm Marxist wit' caskets, I'm talkin' bodies for all


Edited by Jay Homicide - 21 July 2017 at 9:55pm
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from one five star General to another..
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This site's been great lately. Nice drop man. I don't see you here often but you definitely earned a place. Hope to see you dropping more... verses... bodies too. This was hot man, nice drop. I like that the last bit changed focus to spume and ended nicely. And how you flat out said fuck exo and beans lol
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Cuba Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 23 July 2017 at 4:42pm
I thought this was flames man, nothing too glitzy but direct and really sharp disses...I love that straight talk approach. You dealt shots to a bunch of people who deserved em. Real nice work.

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Thanks for the kind comments.

Bumping to remind people not to be pussies.
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i dont want to feed this because if i do, i might have friends mad at me and that is why i wont feed this. If i give you praise, i might piss someone off that likes me. I cant have my efriends mad at me. Its fucking rude


Chain snatcher, punchlines that spun day backwards
I slay rappers. You don't want it, soon as I aimed at ya
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You talking about me wigga? Huh!! (pounds on chest)


It was ghosts, we had to hire grave trackers
Just to find a trace, LA turned pulpit for fake actors
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Truth sonz


Rorschach that brain matter, when did duckin' become a hot trend?
Fight club to night club, these faggots just watch men
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Gay talk isnt cool but this was straight

Pop tense and flex on text, but they don't wanna trade wit Jay
Avoidin' the call of The Ring like that famous tape
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Where the call of the ring if you aint making callouts?

Y'all made mistakes, Introduce ya head to a knee
No sneak disses I'll openly say it, fuck Exo and Beans
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This was nice. Yeah!!!! Fuck those type of people man

Everyone can see me and Cuba have these twats rattled
Pull ya skirts up, time to quit duckin' on rap battles
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TRUTH MAN, TRUTH!!!!!!!! DUCKING HARDCORE

Clap at you, no applause just pull it and shoot
Loaded chamber, the next bullets for Spume
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OH FUCK

Break him down, you ain't shit but a paper champ
Jay brings them dope lines, worth my weight in grams
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Sort of played but i like it regardless. nice bars so far

Champ for life? Homie, thats stretchin the truth (please)
How's this champ goin' in, bein' expected to lose? (Weak)
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Flow was ehhh but still not bad. A little rhetorical

Frail rappers, why're so many champs dodgin' the call?
It's cos I'm Marxist wit' caskets, I'm talkin' bodies for all

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Marxist wit caskets, this was a nice way to end this shit sonz


Overall - POWER TO YOU SONZ. GOOD SHIT. NICE
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Jay still got it ha ha. Sharpened back up pretty quick bro. Nice writing

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote CHAIN Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 August 2017 at 10:47pm
What Que said.

Jay's the GOAT

Ps: you fools this isn't even Jay's final form *Frieza voice*
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote spume corrupt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 August 2017 at 11:39pm
It was a dope mix of swag and hits
It had a grown up kind of feel, it was   but some of it was bare faced non sensical dialogue I found
It was a kind of weak in the way it was putting the boots into some already pressurised people! So llacking originality and looking a bit needy maybe?
Regardless it's a god set on me....props for that

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote King Jehu Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 11 August 2017 at 3:14am
Good stuff. You can rap this out loud and it sounds good. I would have switched Chain snatcher and I slay rappers, but that might be a nitpick/personal preference.
Insert something rappy here
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